Dec. 3, 2019
Visiting with my dad
I’m trying to write about something happy or fun on here 😆
Today my son, mom, and I visited my dad in the hospital.
He had a heavy “appendix” and had an emergency operation.
Since it was a rare case and a tough situation, he’s still been in the hospital for over a month.
He’s getting better and better, and especially he looked fine today.
He said he enjoys making friends in the same room and talking nurses and his doctor 😂
He said he talked with a neighbor patient for 3 hours...!!
His social skill is still high in such a situation! 😂
We were really happy to see him and his neighbor patients!
ここでは、何かハッピーなことや、面白いことを書こうと思います。
今日、息子と母と私で、病院にいる父を訪ねました。
父はひどい「盲腸」になり、緊急手術を受けました。
まれなケースでひどい状況だったため、父はまだなお一ヶ月以上も入院しています。
父はだんだん良くなってきてきており、特に今日は調子が良さそうでした。
父が言うには、同じ病室の人と友達になったり、看護師さんやお医者さんと話すのを楽しんでいるとのことです😂
隣の患者さんと3時間も話したとのこと、、、！
父はこんな状況でも、すごく社交的！😂
私たちは、父と、同室の患者さんに会えて、とてもうれしかったです！
Today my son, mom, and I visited my dad inat the hospital with my son and mom.
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Sounds more natural.
He had a heavy “bad appendix” and had to have an emergency operation.
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Since it was a rare case and a tough situation, he’s still been in the hospital for over a month.
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He’s getting better and better, and he looked especially he looked fine today.
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He said he enjoys making friends in the same room and talking with his nurses and his doctor. 😂
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He said he talked with a neighboring patient for 3 hours...!!
His social skill iss are still high, even in such a situation!
We were really happy to see him and his neighboring patients!
Dec. 8, 2019
Thank you for the correction!🙏🏻
Visiting with my dad
"Visiting with my dad" means you are going with your dad to visit soeone else
He had a heavybad “appendix” and had an emergency operation.
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Since it was a rare case and a tough situation, he’s will still been in the hospital for over a month.
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From the original text I assume your dad is still (and will be) in there for a while.
He’s getting better and better, and he looked especially he looked fine today.
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He said he enjoys making friends in the same room and talking to nurses and his doctor 😂
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We don't "talk" people, we talk to them
As an aside, for a more casual conversation "chat" would work in place of "talk"
We were really happy to see him and his neighboring patients!
Dec. 5, 2019
Thanks for the correction!
He said he enjoys making friends in the same room and talking to nurses and his doctor 😂
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You need to show that he's the one talking by saying "to" the nurses
Dec. 3, 2019
Thank you! I simply forgot it😅😅
Since it was a rare case and a tough situation, he’s still been in the hospital for over a month.
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He’s getting better and better, and he looked especially he looked fine today.
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He said he enjoys making friends in the same room and talking with the nurses and his doctor 😂
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He said he talked with a neighboruring patient for 3 hours...!!
His social skill iss are still high even in such a situation!
Dec. 3, 2019
Thanks for the correction!✨
Visiting with my dad
I’m trying to write about something happy or fun on here 😆
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Don’t forget to add punctuation to your sentences.
Today my son, my mom, and I visited my dad in the hospital.
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Optional but I would identify Mom as your mom to match the rest of the sentence.
He had a “heavy” “appendix” and had an emergency operation.
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I think the quotation marks should go around heavy rather than appendix. Appendix is a known body part. Heavy sounds like it could be a casual or slangy term.
He said he enjoys making friends in the same room and talking nurses and his doctor. 😂
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Adding punctuation.
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This was very nicely written. Best wishes to your Dad on a continued speedy recovery.
Dec. 4, 2019
Thank you for the correction!
Oops, Japanese people tend to use Emoji instead of punctuation marks.😓
I’ll be more careful!
Thanks for your kind word for my dad as well!✨
Visiting with my dad
I’m trying to write about something happy or fun on here 😆
He had a heavyvery bad “appendix” and had an emergency operation.
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I left the quotation marks around "appendix" because it may be accurate (depending on context), since we sometimes use them in English for words we hadn't heard before, and since they're in the original Japanese I'm assuming it's correct.
Since it was a rare case and a tough situation, he’s still been in the hospital for over a month.
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I can't explain it well, but I don't think the tenses match; you could alternatively write something like "he's still in the hospital after over a month".
He’s getting better and better, and he looked especially he looked fine today.
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He said he enjoys making friends in the same room and talking with the nurses and his doctor 😂
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You could alternatively use "talking to" instead of "talking with".
He said he talked with a neighboring patient for 3 hours...!!
You could also say "he talked with his neighbor for 3 hours", with it being implied that you're talking about another patient, but it may be too ambiguous.
His social skill is still highe's very social, even in such a situation!
You could also change it a lot more by saying something like "Despite the situation, he's still very social!", but I wanted to keep the basic structure similar. You could also replace "such a situation" with "a situation like this".
We were really happy to see him and his neighboring patients!
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You're doing really great! I wish I could give a more thorough explanation on a lot of it, but sadly I only really know these things intuitively, so it's hard for me to describe at times.
I'm glad your dad seems to be doing well, though! Hopefully he can get out of the hospital soon!
Dec. 3, 2019
He had a heavyvery bad “appendix” and had an emergency operation.
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Yes, you’re right!😅My vocabulary is so limited, and of course I didn’t know what to call his sick. So I googled it, and added “” so that it shows a new word to me 😂
Dec. 3, 2019
Thank you so much for correction with explanations in detail! I really appreciate your kindness 😊🙏🏻✨
I learned “to visit with someone ” means “to enjoy talking to someone “, so I wrote that title. But does it sound weird?? 🤔
Dec. 3, 2019
Thank you so much for correction with explanations in detail! I really appreciate your kindness 😊🙏🏻✨ I learned “to visit with someone ” means “to enjoy talking to someone “, so I wrote that title. But does it sound weird?? 🤔
In my opinion it sounds weird, because it sounds like something is missing. As it currently is, it sounds like you and your dad are visiting someone or something else, but there's nothing else there. The simplest rephrasing is to just change it to "Visiting my dad" (which makes it more clear that you're visiting him), but you could also phrase it like "Having a visit with my dad", however this can make it sound a bit too formal.
I think you may also be able to phrase it like "Visiting my dad with my family", but I'm not sure how weird it'd sound - if I start thinking too much about the details then everything starts to sound weird lol
I'm just glad I could help some! And I'm honestly jealous of your emotes - I feel limited in how I can express myself without them!
Dec. 4, 2019
Oh then, I really understand it!
Thank you so much for taking your time to answer this weird question 😂
Please take a break, here is your coffee from me!☕️😂lol
Aww thanks for your compliments!
I guess I’m just a tally person😝
Dec. 4, 2019
Talky* !! What a typo! Lol
Visiting with my dad
I’m trying to write about something happy or fun on here 😆
Today my son, momther, and I visited my dad in the hospital.
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'son, mom, and I' doesn't sound natural. I would say either 'mother' or 'my mom'.
He had a heavy “appendix”citis and had an emergency operation.
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I've never heard the term heavy appendix. Maybe it is correct and I have just never heard it. Other terms might be inflamed appendix, or swollen appendix. There is no need for quotes around appendix.
Since it was a rare case and a tough situation, he’s still been in the hospital for over a month.
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or say "he's still in the hospital after a month"
We were really happy to see him and his neighborfellow patients!
'neighbor patients' does not sound natural. You might also say 'nearby patients'
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I hope he gets better soon!
Dec. 3, 2019
Thanks for the correction and the explanation in detail!✨
I learned other phrases 😊🙏🏻
Thank you, we’re looking forward to his coming back home!
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He had a heavy “appendix” and had an emergency operation. He had I've never heard the term heavy appendix. Maybe it is correct and I have just never heard it. Other terms might be inflamed appendix, or swollen appendix. There is no need for quotes around appendix. He had a I left the quotation marks around "appendix" because it may be accurate (depending on context), since we sometimes use them in English for words we hadn't heard before, and since they're in the original Japanese I'm assuming it's correct. He had a “heavy” I think the quotation marks should go around heavy rather than appendix. Appendix is a known body part. Heavy sounds like it could be a casual or slangy term. He had a He had a |
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He said he enjoys making friends in the same room and talking nurses and his doctor 😂 He said he enjoys making friends in the same room and talking with the nurses and his doctor 😂 You could alternatively use "talking to" instead of "talking with". He said he enjoys making friends in the same room and talking nurses and his doctor. 😂 Adding punctuation. He said he enjoys making friends in the same room and talking with the nurses and his doctor 😂 He said he enjoys making friends in the same room and talking to nurses and his doctor 😂 You need to show that he's the one talking by saying "to" the nurses He said he enjoys making friends in the same room and talking to nurses and his doctor 😂 We don't "talk" people, we talk to them As an aside, for a more casual conversation "chat" would work in place of "talk" He said he enjoys making friends in the same room and talking with his nurses and |
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He said he talked with a neighbor patient for 3 hours...!! He said he talked with a neighboring patient for 3 hours...!! You could also say "he talked with his neighbor for 3 hours", with it being implied that you're talking about another patient, but it may be too ambiguous. He said he talked with a neighbo He said he talked with a neighboring patient for 3 hours...! |
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His social skill is still high in such a situation! H You could also change it a lot more by saying something like "Despite the situation, he's still very social!", but I wanted to keep the basic structure similar. You could also replace "such a situation" with "a situation like this". His social skill His social skill |
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We were really happy to see him and his neighbor patients! We were really happy to see him and his 'neighbor patients' does not sound natural. You might also say 'nearby patients' We were really happy to see him and his neighboring patients! We were really happy to see him and his neighboring patients! We were really happy to see him and his neighboring patients! |
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