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hsen2012

March 8, 2022

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Violent In TV

I'm amazed at how violent TV is in Yemen. Some detective programs show all the details of people getting shot. You see fighting on the news every day. Some cable channels even show real people getting murdered. I feel strongly that the rating system doesn't always help, because children are sometimes home themselves and can watch what they want. Basically, TV is violent. Let's stop watching these violent programs and demand more educational ones. May be that way, TV will change.

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TV Violent In TVce

I'm amazed at how violent TV ishows are in Yemen.

Some detective programs show all the details of people getting shot without any censorship.

This is another stylistic correction. It makes the sentence flow better.

You see fighting on the news every day.

Some cable channels even show real people getting murdered.

I feel strongly feel that the rating system doesn't always help, because children are sometimes home themselves andalone and without any supervision, they can watch whatever they want.

Basically, TV is violent.violence is everywhere on TV.

Let's stop watching these violent programs and demand more educational ones.

May be that way, TVe stigma associated with television will change.

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I believe that your grammar is great overall! There are things you can change to make the sentences flow better.

I'm amazed at how violent TV is in Yemen.

I'm amazed at how violent TV ishows are in Yemen.

Violent In TV

TV Violent In TVce

Some detective programs show all the details of people getting shot.

Some detective programs show all the details of people getting shot without any censorship.

This is another stylistic correction. It makes the sentence flow better.

You see fighting on the news every day.

You see fighting on the news every day.

Some cable channels even show real people getting murdered.

Some cable channels even show real people getting murdered.

I feel strongly that the rating system doesn't always help, because children are sometimes home themselves and can watch what they want.

I feel strongly feel that the rating system doesn't always help, because children are sometimes home themselves andalone and without any supervision, they can watch whatever they want.

Basically, TV is violent.

Basically, TV is violent.violence is everywhere on TV.

Let's stop watching these violent programs and demand more educational ones.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

May be that way, TV will change.

May be that way, TVe stigma associated with television will change.

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