Jan. 30, 2021
Very Close to a Crisis
This past Monday I talked to one of my language partners, and had noticed her hair was unusually messy. Every time I see her, she uses her fingers to arrange her hair. She always looks like an absent minded professor, and actually, her husband is a real professor at an Australian University studying Catalist. That is to say he's trying to find the best method to convert
Hydrogen into electricity with the catalyst for a long time.
She didn't realize her hair had been messy at that time. So I've thought that something happened to her, and I knew she didn't get enough sleep last night. To my surprise, a forest fire happened on a mountain near her home yesterday, and it was coming closer to her house. She and her family all had been on alert for all day long.
The closest distance was 5 kilometers from her home, and some of her neighbors had already evacuated. It's so frightening and scared, all of her family was watching the forest fire coming closer to home. When they were about to decide on evacuation at 3 o'clock after midnight, the direction of the wind suddenly turned to the South. The forest fire had made a right turn in the direction of travel.
Fortunately, the forest fire didn't come, but there were a few houses that were burned out by the forest fire. Even last year there was a very big forest fire in Australia, and Australian government almost gave up extinguishing at that time. The forest fire lasted several months. It had not rained for a long time. I guess that it's because of global warming caused by Carbon dioxide emissions.
This past Monday I talked to one of my language partners, and had noticed her hair rumpled so much.was unusually rumpled
Rumpled is a bit of a weird word for hair. We use it more for things that usually lie flat, like cloth or paper. "Tangled" or "messy" could be better here.
Every time I see her, she uses her fingers to arrange her hairs.
She is always looks like an absent minded professor, and actually, her husband actually is a real professor at an Australian University professor studying Ccataliysts.
That is to say he's been trying to find the best method to extract oxygen from hydrogen with the catalyst for a long time.
Do you mean "separate" oxygen from hydrogen? There isn't any oxygen in hydrogen, so "extract" doesn't make a lot of sense. The chemical reaction for splitting water into oxygen and hydrogen gas is called hydrolysis. Maybe that's what he's making catalysts for?
She didn't realize that her hairs had rumpgotten tangled at that time.
Just an example of how to use tangled if you like it better than rumpled.
So I've noticedthought that something happened to her, and I knew she didn't get enough sleep last night.
Noticed is okay, but I think "thought" feels more natural here. :)
To my surprise, yesterday a forest fire happened on a mountain near her home yesterday, and it was coming closer to her house.
She and her family all haved been on alert for all day longthe entire day.
The closest distance was 5 kilometers from her home, and some of her neighbors had already evacuated.
Because you're retelling the story in the past tense, you need to use the construction with "had" for things that happened before the moment you're retelling (which is your conversation with your language exchange partner)
SIt was so frightening and scared,y, and all of her family was watching the forest fire coming closer to home.
When they were about to decide on evacuation at 3 o'clock after midnight, the direction of the wind suddenly turned to South at that time.
The forest fire had made a right turn toaway from the direction ofit had been travelling.
Fortunately, the forest fire didn't come, but there were a few houses whichthat were burned out by the forest fire.
Even last year there were very big forest fires in Australia, and the Australian goverment almost gave up extinguishing them at that time.
The forest fire lasted several months.
It had not rained for a long time.
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Wow! I'm glad your language partner is okay. Hope the corrections help :)
Jan. 30, 2021
Thanks a lot. I was a bit confused about Catalyst, which extracts hydrogen from water and change electricity from hydrogen.
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This past Monday I talked to one of my language partners, and had noticed her hair rumpled so much. This past Monday I talked to one of my language partners Rumpled is a bit of a weird word for hair. We use it more for things that usually lie flat, like cloth or paper. "Tangled" or "messy" could be better here. |
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Every time I see her, she uses her fingers to arrange her hairs. Every time I see her, she uses her fingers to arrange her hair |
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She is always looks like an absent minded professor, and actually, her husband is a real professor at an Australian University professor studying Catalist. She |
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That is to say he's trying to find the best method to extract oxygen from hydrogen with the catalyst for a long time. That is to say he's been trying to find the best method to extract oxygen from hydrogen with the catalyst for a long time. Do you mean "separate" oxygen from hydrogen? There isn't any oxygen in hydrogen, so "extract" doesn't make a lot of sense. The chemical reaction for splitting water into oxygen and hydrogen gas is called hydrolysis. Maybe that's what he's making catalysts for? |
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She didn't realize her hairs had rumpled at that time. She didn't Just an example of how to use tangled if you like it better than rumpled. |
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So I've noticed that something happened to her, and I knew she didn't get enough sleep last night. So I've Noticed is okay, but I think "thought" feels more natural here. :) |
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To my surprise, yesterday a forest fire happened on a mountain near her home, and it was coming closer to her house. To my surprise, |
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She and her family all have been on alert for all day long. She and her family all ha |
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The closest distance was 5 kilometers from her home, and some of her neighbors already evacuated. The closest distance was 5 kilometers from her home, and some of her neighbors had already evacuated. Because you're retelling the story in the past tense, you need to use the construction with "had" for things that happened before the moment you're retelling (which is your conversation with your language exchange partner) |
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So frightening and scared, all of her family was watching the forest fire coming closer to home.
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When they were about to decide evacuation at 3 o'clock after midnight, the direction of wind suddenly turned to South at that time. When they were about to decide on evacuation at 3 o'clock after midnight, the direction of the wind suddenly turned |
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The forest fire had made a right turn to the direction of travel. The forest fire had made a right turn |
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Fortunately, the forest fire didn't come, but there were a few houses which were burned out by the forest fire. Fortunately, the forest fire didn't come, but there were a few houses |
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Even last year there were very big forest fire in Australia, and Australian goverment almost gave up extinguishing at that time. Even last year there were very big forest fires in Australia, |
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The forest fire lasted several months. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It had not rained for a long time. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I guess that it's because global warming. |
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It's so frightening and scared, all of her family was watching the forest fire coming closer to home. |
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Even last year there was a very big forest fire in Australia, and Australian government almost gave up extinguishing at that time. |
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This past Monday I talked to one of my language partners, and had noticed her hair was unusually messy. |
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She always looks like an absent minded professor, and actually, her husband is a real professor at an Australian University professor studying Catalist. |
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The forest fire had made a right turn in the direction of travel. |
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Every time I see her, she uses her fingers to arrange her hair. |
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That is to say he's trying to find the best method to make electricity from hydrogen with the catalyst for a long time. |
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She didn't realize her hairs had been messy at that time. |
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To my surprise, a forest fire happened on a mountain near her home yesterday, and it was coming closer to her house. |
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She and her family all had been on alert for all day long. |
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The closest distance was 5 kilometers from her home, and some of her neighbors already had evacuated. |
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So I've thought that something happened to her, and I knew she didn't get enough sleep last night. |
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That is to say he's trying to find the best method to change electricity from hydrogen with the catalyst for a long time. |
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Fortunately, the forest fire didn't come, but there were a few houses that were burned out by the forest fire. |
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When they were about to decide on evacuation at 3 o'clock after midnight, the direction of the wind suddenly turned to South. |
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She and her family all had been on alert foray long. |
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The closest distance was 5 kilometers from her home, and some of her neighbors had already evacuated. |
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When they were about to decide on evacuation at 3 o'clock after midnight, the direction of the wind suddenly turned to the South. |
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She didn't realize her hair had been messy at that time. |
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That is to say he's trying to find the best method to convert the |
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hydrogen into the electricity with the catalyst for a long time. |
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I guess that it's because of global warming. |
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I guess that it's because of global warming caused by dioxide emissions. |
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Hydrogen into the electricity with the catalyst for a long time. |
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That is to say he's trying to find the best method to convert |
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Hydrogen into electricity with the catalyst for a long time. |
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I guess that it's because of global warming caused by Carbon dioxide emissions. |
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She always looks like an absent minded professor, and actually, her husband is a real professor at an Australian University studying Catalist. |
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