March 31, 2021
Vaccine
On Monday night, the school informed that free COVID-19 vaccinations were available and registration was required. But the deadline was at 15:00 on Tuesday. In the promotional materials, it was claimed that the vaccine used was the "domestic inactivated vaccine", but there was no specific brand, no list of ingredients, and no specific adverse reactions were clearly written. It is hard to believe that such incomplete information was used to promote the vaccine! I talked to my parents on the phone and we decided none of us would sign up. Because China's Kexing Biologicals and Sinopharm are the fastest manufacturers to start clinical trials, and also announce key figures such as vaccine efficiency on their own, but never publish the basic data information in journals for independent expert examination and review. This makes me very uneasy.
周一晚上，学校通知可以免费打新冠疫苗了，需要报名。但是周二中午15:00就截止了。在宣传资料中，声称使用的是“国产新冠病毒灭活疫苗”，没有具体的厂牌，没有成分表，没有明确写出具体的不良反应。这么不全面的资料，居然拿来宣传，难以相信！我和家长通了电话，我们决定都不报名。因为中国的科兴生物和国药集团是最快展开临床实验的厂商，亦自行宣布疫苗有效率等关键数字，却始终未将基本数据资料发表于期刊上供独立专家检验审查。这让我非常不放心。
Vaccine
On Monday night, the school informed us that free COVID-19 vaccinations were available and registration was required.
there has to be someone or something that is informed. You could also say "announced" instead of informed.
B, but the deadline was at 15:00 on Tuesday.
You generally shouldn't start a sentence with "But" as it is a conjunction.
In the promotional materials, it was claimed that the vaccine used was the "domestic inactivated vaccine", but there was no specific brand, no list of ingredients, and no specific adverse reactions were clearly written.
at the end of a list, there is never a comma before the final "and...".
It is hard to believe that such incomplete information was used to promote the vaccine!
I talked to my parents on the phone and we decided none of us would sign up.
BThis is because China's Kexing Biologicals and Sinopharm are the fastest manufacturers to start clinical trials, and also announce key figures such as vaccine efficiency on their own, but never publish the basic data information in journals for independent expert examination and review.
"because" normally starts an additional clause. This additional clause is huge and works better as a standalone statement. Henc beginning with "This is because". You don't need a comma if you use "and". Someone reading this out loud would put their own pauses in.
This makes me very uneasy.
April 1, 2021
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On Monday night, the school informed that free COVID-19 vaccinations were available and registration was required. On Monday night, the school informed us that free COVID-19 vaccinations were available and registration was required. there has to be someone or something that is informed. You could also say "announced" instead of informed. |
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But the deadline was at 15:00 on Tuesday.
You generally shouldn't start a sentence with "But" as it is a conjunction. |
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In the promotional materials, it was claimed that the vaccine used was the "domestic inactivated vaccine", but there was no specific brand, no list of ingredients, and no specific adverse reactions were clearly written. In the promotional materials, it was claimed that the vaccine used was the "domestic inactivated vaccine", but there was no specific brand, no list of ingredients at the end of a list, there is never a comma before the final "and...". |
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It is hard to believe that such incomplete information was used to promote the vaccine! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I talked to my parents on the phone and we decided none of us would sign up. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Because China's Kexing Biologicals and Sinopharm are the fastest manufacturers to start clinical trials, and also announce key figures such as vaccine efficiency on their own, but never publish the basic data information in journals for independent expert examination and review.
"because" normally starts an additional clause. This additional clause is huge and works better as a standalone statement. Henc beginning with "This is because". You don't need a comma if you use "and". Someone reading this out loud would put their own pauses in. |
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This makes me very uneasy. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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