Nov. 22, 2019
Vacations last year (Problem solution story)
There were many bad roads we drive in the way to the beach. the wholes on the pavement are so deep you can put your foot your calf and your knee inside and keep going. Because of this, the car had problems of the tires and one exploded when it went into a whole. the tools had stayed in the garage, and we could not see any help 360 degrees around. we were by ourselves. good thing is mum has many resources of the hands, and quickly found a way to make lever with branches she spotted in the distance, so after breaking them off the trees, and with the use of a big rock, all the family stands on top of the branch which is by now leaning over the big rock on the side of the car with the wheel that exploded in the deep whole, so after several up and down motions, the car begins to give in, and little by little it moves to the side, and the hope of all around begins to rise, and in the final moment, we did it. With all the participation of every member of the family in this journey we push the cars approximately 37 degrees in a direction away from the hole, and now it is free. we have regained the liberty of the car, but still have most important problem: the wheel is exploded, and pushing car is not an option, because it is heavy, and we are strong but not that strong, so in the final instance, my brother Marco remembers we have coupon for $350.00 we won on a Black Friday sale, and he thinks we don't have to preoccupy for the wheel because we can only buy one more wheel with no difficulty if we only go to store and exchange our coupon for new wheel. My mum is not sure if this is good thought because this is not the only whole we see on the road. the holes are all over the pavement and some deeper than others, others deep enough to go in up to stomach, and she worried that we are driving and fit the other wheels in other holes on the road, and we have the problem of exploded wheels again, except this times we may not do much to solutions the problem, because there are no branches in the distance we can see, only grass and that does not have the strength necessary to push car away from hole if this happens again. the good thing is my family is supernatural intelligent and my brother Paul decides to say my mum the solution is driving by the side of the road not on the road. of course she says, no matter the exploded wheel, the sides of the road doesnt have much holes so the problem is not that obvious. with plan in mind, we drive at full velocity to the store and exchange the coupon, we got the best new wheel we needed to change for the exploded one and we manage to stay at the beach before the sun goes under. we had a rocky start to the beach trip, but it was great after all at the final. This is my trip to the beach and the memory i remember of the problems and solution we found to work together to never surrender in the presence of a trouble that is not enough to stop us.
VA story about my vacations last year (Pa problem - solution story)
I would make it more specific
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This happened in the past so remember to keep it past tense because you don't know if they fixed it or not
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Hole not whole
All the tools had stayedwere in the garage, and we could not see any help 360 degrees aroundthere was no one in sight to help us.
Capitalize the first letter in new sentence
wWe were by ourselves.
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I tried my best to figure out what you wanted to say.
With all the participation of every member of the family in this journey we pushthe help from everyone, we managed to move the cars approximately 37 degrfeest in a direction away from the pothole, and now it is free.
What do you mean by degrees? You should use distance units (feet, meters, kilometers, etc)
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00 we won on a Black Friday sale, and he thinks we don't have to preoccupy for the wheel because we can only buy one more wheel with no difficulty if we only gHe didn't want us to waste our time, because replacing the wheel was the easiest option. All we had to do is go to tohe store and exchange ourthe coupon for a new wheel. ¶
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tThe good thing is that my family is supernaturally intelligent and, so my brother Paul decidesd to saytell my mumother the solution is driving bywas to drive on the side of the road notinstead of on the road.
wiWith the plan in mind, we drive at full velocityspeed to the store and exchange the coupon, we got the best new wheel we needed to change for the exploded one for a new tire. We changed out the tire, and we managed to stay atget to the beach before the sun goes under.set.
wWe had a rocky start to the beach trip, but in the end it was great after all at the final.
This iwas my trip to the beach and the memory i remember of the problems and solution we found to work together to never surrender in the presence of a trouble that is not enough to stop us.
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Please be careful about the tenses and make sure to capitalize the first letter in your sentences.
Nov. 22, 2019
I'll finish correcting your journal later tonight. Please let me know if you have any questions
Nov. 23, 2019
There were many bad roads that we driove ion theour way to the beach.
thanks you for feedback
Nov. 23, 2019
Because of this, the car had tire problems of the tires and one even exploded when it went into a whit a pothole.
i am confusion with that word all time, thanks
Nov. 23, 2019
Which words confuse you? Maybe I can help explain it
Nov. 23, 2019
Finished correcting your journal. I did my best trying to understand what you wanted to say. I hope it is helpful
Nov. 24, 2019
The good thing is mum has many resources of the hands, and quickly foundthat my mother is really resourceful, so she quickly figured out a way to make a lever withusing some branches she spotted in the distance, so after breaking. She broke (some) of them off of the trees, and with the use of a big rock, all the family stands on top of the branch which is by now leaning over the big rock on the side of the car with the wheel that explodefound a large rock. She puts one end of the lever underneath the wheel and then we all stand ion the deep whole, so after several up and down motions,op of the other. We do a jump-like motion and suddenly the car is begins to give in, ang lifted little by little it moves to the side, and the hope of all around begins to rise, and in the final moment, we did it. Everyone started getting hopeful and finally we managed to rescue the car.
This is makes the idea have a better listening, thanks you for every help
Nov. 24, 2019
With all the participation of every member of the family in this journey we pushthe help from everyone, we managed to move the cars approximately 37 degrfeest in a direction away from the pothole, and now it is free.
Angels are acute and obtus and circunference is 360, so we only push 37 of 360. Not a very long distance buy good enough
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Vacations last year (Problem solution story)
I would make it more specific |
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There were many bad roads we drive in the way to the beach. There were many bad roads that we dr |
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the wholes on the pavement are so deep you can put your foot your calf and your knee inside and keep going.
This happened in the past so remember to keep it past tense because you don't know if they fixed it or not |
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Because of this, the car had problems of the tires and one exploded when it went into a whole. Because of this, the car had tire problems Hole not whole |
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the tools had stayed in the garage, and we could not see any help 360 degrees around. All the tools Capitalize the first letter in new sentence |
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we were by ourselves. |
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good thing is mum has many resources of the hands, and quickly found a way to make lever with branches she spotted in the distance, so after breaking them off the trees, and with the use of a big rock, all the family stands on top of the branch which is by now leaning over the big rock on the side of the car with the wheel that exploded in the deep whole, so after several up and down motions, the car begins to give in, and little by little it moves to the side, and the hope of all around begins to rise, and in the final moment, we did it. The good thing is I tried my best to figure out what you wanted to say. |
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With all the participation of every member of the family in this journey we push the cars approximately 37 degrees in a direction away from the hole, and now it is free. With What do you mean by degrees? You should use distance units (feet, meters, kilometers, etc) |
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we have regained the liberty of the car, but still have most important problem: the wheel is exploded, and pushing car is not an option, because it is heavy, and we are strong but not that strong, so in the final instance, my brother Marco remembers we have coupon for $350.
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00 we won on a Black Friday sale, and he thinks we don't have to preoccupy for the wheel because we can only buy one more wheel with no difficulty if we only go to store and exchange our coupon for new wheel.
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My mum is not sure if this is good thought because this is not the only whole we see on the road.
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the holes are all over the pavement and some deeper than others, others deep enough to go in up to stomach, and she worried that we are driving and fit the other wheels in other holes on the road, and we have the problem of exploded wheels again, except this times we may not do much to solutions the problem, because there are no branches in the distance we can see, only grass and that does not have the strength necessary to push car away from hole if this happens again.
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the good thing is my family is supernatural intelligent and my brother Paul decides to say my mum the solution is driving by the side of the road not on the road.
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of course she says, no matter the exploded wheel, the sides of the road doesnt have much holes so the problem is not that obvious. |
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with plan in mind, we drive at full velocity to the store and exchange the coupon, we got the best new wheel we needed to change for the exploded one and we manage to stay at the beach before the sun goes under.
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we had a rocky start to the beach trip, but it was great after all at the final. |
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This is my trip to the beach and the memory i remember of the problems and solution we found to work together to never surrender in the presence of a trouble that is not enough to stop us.
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