Karma may strike you back whenever you least expect it Karma may strike whenever you least expect it

The original version is also correct, but my correction sounds more natural to me.

Karma may strike you back wheneverwhen you least expect it . Karma may strike when you least expect it.

ItThis happened in Washington, USA. This happened in Washington, USA.

42 year-old William Kelley called the police in the early morning hours onf August 25th in 2019. 42 year-old William Kelley called the police in the early morning hours of August 25th in 2019.

42 year-old William Kelley called the police in the early morning hours on August 25th in, 2019. 42 year-old William Kelley called the police in the early morning hours on August 25, 2019.

He reported his car stolen from the parking lot1 at the Tin Hat Tavern parking lot. He reported his car stolen from the Tin Hat Tavern parking lot.

The police arrived and started thean investigation. The police arrived and started an investigation.

Yours is not incorrect, but mine perhaps sounds more natural.

The police arrived and started the investigationg. The police arrived and started investigating.

This is just another option aside from the correction you already received!

The cops examined the evidence, a surveillance video2 from the scene of crime, and managed3 to pick up some details, which made the guy the CSI and got him behind the bars4. The cops examined the evidence, a surveillance video2 from the scene of crime, and managed3 to pick up some details, which made the guy the CSI and got him behind the bars4.

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The cops examined the evidence, a surveillance video2 from the scene of crime, and managed3 to pick up some details, which made the guy the CSI and got him behind the bars4. resulted in Kelley getting put behind bars. The cops examined the evidence, a surveillance video from the scene of crime, and managed to pick up some details, which resulted in Kelley getting put behind bars.

Since Kelley is the one getting arrested and not the person who stole the car as we would expect, you need to specify.

The video revealed that William Kelley was actually stealing from a business5 across the street6 as the other thief took his car. The video revealed that William Kelley was actually stealing from a business across the street as the other thief took his car.

The other thief was very confident and quick as it only took him several seconds to throw his bicycle into the bed7 of the William Kelley’s pick-up, unlock the door and drive away from the parking lot1. The other thief was very confident and quick as it only took him several seconds to throw his bicycle into the bed7 of William Kelley’s pick-up, unlock the door and drive away from the parking lot1.

The other thief was very confident and quick, as it only took him several seconds to throw his bicycle into the bed7 of the William Kelley’s pick-up, unlock the door, and drive away from the parking lot1. The other thief was very confident and quick, as it only took him several seconds to throw his bicycle into the bed of William Kelley’s pick-up, unlock the door, and drive away from the parking lot.

The owner of the car tried to catch up8 with the thief on feeoot9 but wasn’t fast enough to do so. The owner of the car tried to catch up8 with the thief on foot9 but wasn’t fast enough to do so.

The owner of the car tried to catch up8 with the thief on feet9oot but wasn’t fast enough to do so. The owner of the car tried to catch up with the thief on foot but wasn’t fast enough to do so.

Kelly had already had an existing warrant, which will increase his term behind the bars. Kelly already had an existing warrant, which will increase his term behind the bars.

Kelly had already had an existing warrant, which will increase his term behind the bars. Kelly already had an existing warrant, which will increase his term behind bars.

"behind bars" is a fixed expression; no article needed!

The funniest part, though, is that not only was William arrested because of the said crime, but his truck hasn’t been found yet as well! The funniest part, though, is that not only was William arrested because of the said crime, but his truck hasn’t been found yet as well!

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The funniest part, though, is that not only was William arrested because of the saiaforementioned crime, but also that his truck hasn’t been found yet as well! The funniest part, though, is that not only was William arrested because of the aforementioned crime, but also that his truck hasn’t been found yet!

Kelly called the cops to catch the thief of his car, he evenactually called them on himself, and on top of that, the car hasn’t been found yet. Kelly called the cops to catch the thief of his car, he actually called them on himself, and on top of that, the car hasn’t been found yet.

This seems more natural to me.

Kelly called the cops to catch the thief ofwho stole his car, he eventupractically called the police on himself, and on top of that, the car hasn’t been found yet. Kelly called the cops to catch the thief who stole his car, he practically called the police on himself, and on top of that, the car hasn’t been found yet.

He will certainly think twice the next time beforhe callings the police after committing a crime. He will certainly think twice the next time he calls the police after committing a crime.

He will certainly think twice the next time he calls the police... OR He will certainly think twice next time before calling the police...