Dec. 1, 2020
Journal 12/1/20
Generally, I like to take naps after lunch. Every day after lunch, I usually learn English on my phone. Read the news and watch short videos. Ten minutes after learning English, I usually feel sleepy and fall asleep. But I can’t sleep long or sleep deeply, and will wake up after half an hour of sleep or so. But this afternoon, I had an hour's sleep, and slept soundly. When I kind of woke up, I still didn’t want to get up, and I felt some unnamed pain in my body-those kind of pain that after heavy manual labor. All in all, this afternoon, I slept long and very soundly.
Correction Settings
TAfter ten minutes afterof learning English, I usually feel sleepdrowsy and fall asleep.
After ten minutes of learning English, I usually feel drowsy and fall asleep.
I suggested 'drowsy' instead of 'sleepy' so that you are not repeated the word sleep twice in one sentence
When I kind of woke up, I still didn’t want to get up, and I felt some unnamed painan ache in my body- those kind of pain that afterache you might feel after having done heavy manual labor.
When I woke up, I still didn’t want to get up, and I felt an ache in my body- the kind of ache you might feel after having done heavy manual labor.
Dec. 1, 2020
TAfter ten minutes afterof learning English, I usually feel sleepdrowsy and fall asleep.
I suggested 'drowsy' instead of 'sleepy' so that you are not repeated the word sleep twice in one sentence
After ten minutes of learning, I usually feel drowsy and fall asleep.
Journal 12/1/20
Generally, I like to take naps after lunch.
Every day after lunch, I usually learn English on my phone.
RI read the news and watch short videos.
I read the news and watch short videos.
Ten minutes after starting to learning English, I usually feel sleepstart feeling drowsy and fall asleep.
Ten minutes after starting to learn English, I usually start feeling drowsy and fall asleep.
If you write "Ten minutes after learning English", it means 10 minutes after you've learned the entire English language. (The word "sleepy" is correct, but it's nicer to avoid the repetition of the word "sleep".)
But I can’t sleep for long or sleep deeply, and will wake up after half an hour or so of sleep or so.
But I can’t sleep for long or sleep deeply, and will wake up after half an hour or so of sleep.
But this afternoon, I had an hour's sleep, and slept soundly.
When I kind ofBut when I woke up, I still didn’t want to get up, and I felt some unnaman unexpected pain in my body---those kind of pain thatI experience after heavy manual labor.
But when I woke up, I still didn’t want to get up, and I felt an unexpected pain in my body---the kind of pain I experience after heavy manual labor.
Feedback
The last sentence feels detached: I feel it should be tied into your experience of pain. And while "I slept long and very soundly" is correct, it's smoother to write e.g. "I slept soundly for an hour".
Dec. 25, 2020
Thank you very much.
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Journal 12/1/20 This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Generally, I like to take naps after lunch. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Every day after lunch, I usually learn English on my phone. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Read the news and watch short videos.
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Ten minutes after learning English, I usually feel sleepy and fall asleep.
Ten minutes after starting to learn If you write "Ten minutes after learning English", it means 10 minutes after you've learned the entire English language. (The word "sleepy" is correct, but it's nicer to avoid the repetition of the word "sleep".)
I suggested 'drowsy' instead of 'sleepy' so that you are not repeated the word sleep twice in one sentence |
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But I can’t sleep long or sleep deeply, and will wake up after half an hour of sleep or so.
But I can’t sleep for long or sleep deeply, and will wake up after half an hour or so of sleep |
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But this afternoon, I had an hour's sleep, and slept soundly. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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When I kind of woke up, I still didn’t want to get up, and I felt some unnamed pain in my body-those kind of pain that after heavy manual labor.
When I |
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All in all, this afternoon, I slept long and very soundly. |
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