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Cutting to the chase, here in Brazil, unfortunately, it is very common to see kids pregnant, age around ages 13/14/15 along those lines.

I erased 'along those lines' because it is a little redundant and so removing it sounds more fluent. Also it would be 'around ages' or 'around the ages of' instead of 'age around'

As everyone knows, besides be a motherjust being a mother, the situation also comes towith prejudice and discriminateion, a lot of mothers have to handle with thisthese situations by selfthemselves, they are warriors, truly warriors. Of course, is not every mother is good, also havsome mothers are really bad, which doesn't care for your sotheir children.

I assume here you are saying that beyond the hardships of mentally and physically carrying and caring for a child, there is also prejudice and discrimination. So I added 'just' because it emphasizes the extra struggle. Also 'being a mother' would be the correct way to say it instead of 'be a mother' because 'being' is present-tense, whereas 'be' is future. Based on how you set up this sentence, present-tense makes more sense. For the second part of the sentence, just saying 'handle these situations' is the correct way to say this. In the second sentence, You had 'Of course, is not every mother is good', which you only needed the second 'is'. The last part is tricky, but you are talking about a group of women, 'ellas' in Spanish or 'elas' in Português, so we need to conjugate the rest of the sentence accordingly. 'Doesn't' I believe is for speaking to a singular person (like tu in Português), but 'don't' is for a group (eles/elas in Português). Also you should change 'your' son to 'their' son, because when I am reading this, it sounds like some mom is not taking care of MY son, not their own sons (eles não ajudam meu filho / eles não ajudam o filho deles in Português). Also I changed 'son' to 'children' because in English, children are not male by default (3 girls and 1 boy would be filhos, but in English, it would be best to say children or kids, which has no gender)

Guys, for this text, I really want to know about my evolutionhow to improve.

Evolution in English has more meaning with Darwin's theory of evolution, and like science. I changed it to 'how to improve' since I assume that is what you're trying to ask. Asking for your evolution makes me think you want to know how humans came from monkeys.