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Nov. 6, 2024

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Underprivileged Prodigies in Sport Need Help

Some governments spend a huge amount of money to cultivate players to win golden medals in all international contests instead of allotting such money to the children who really have enthusiasm for certain sports or regard sports as hobby, and I completely disagree this misuse.

Obviously, there are a variety of benefits children can get from doing exercise. First and foremost, doing sports will lead to a higher life expectancy for everyone, not just for children. There are a number of instances that some patients have recovered by the attempt to practice some sport, even without surgery. Moreover, taking up sports can make children perform well in both study and work, because exercise is not only a way to release stress but the process to acquire how to collaborate with others, let us say basketball or football, which are crucial abilities for people to achieve some work or business.

Not only does any practise which merely subsidize partial people to become competitors wreck social fairness, but stifle the opportunities for the underprivileged to be top-tier players. We have seen that a number of children born into the areas with poverty who are prodigies of some particular sports, because of no support from their governments, have to lead a common life. I do not mean that common life is awful, but it would be a great loss for the whole human civilization to possess excellent players, and the Olympic game should have been more competitive with them for audience to appreciate.

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Underprivileged Prodigies in Sports Need Help

Prodigy usually refers to talent in more mentally intensive fields such as mathematics or science. I would consider changing out prodigies for something like rising stars.

Some governments spend a huge amount of money to cultivate players to win golden medals in all international contests instead of allotting such money to the children who really have enthusiasm for certain sports or regard sports as hobby, anda passion for the sport. I completely disagree this misusewith this approach.

Obviously, there are a variety of benefits children can get from doing exercise.

First and foremost, doing sports will lead to a higher life expectancy for everyone, not just for children.

There are a number of instances that some patients have reconeeding surgery who have red by the attempt to practice some sport, even wimedied the underlying cause to go throutgh surgery through sports.

Moreover, taking up sports can make children perform well in both study and work, because e. Exercise is not only a way to release stress but the process to acquire how to collaborate with others, let us say basketball or football, which are crucial abilities for people to achieve somepresents the opportunity to learn teamwork, such as in the case of basketball or football. Both stress-relief and teamwork are pivotal in work orand business.

This sentence is way overextended.

Not only does anythe practisce which merely subsidize partial peoplof favoring only a small elite to become top-competitors wreck social fairness, but it also stifles the opportunities for the underprivileged to become top-tier players.

We have seen that a number of sports gifted children born into timpoverished areas with poverty who are prodigies of some particular sports, because of no support from their governments, have to lead a common lifehave had to lead a common life due to a lack of governmental support to pursue their passion.

I do not mean that common life is awful, but it would be a great loss for the whole human civilizationsociety to possess excellent players, and whose talents never truly shone. If we cultivated these players, the Olympic gGame shs would have been more competitive with them for audience to appreciatebe more enjoyable with a higher degree of competition.

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I agree with you: it isn't fair when people talented in sports don't have the opportunity to really shine simply due to their economic situation. I felt that your writing got its message across clearly so overall good work. Keep on working on sentence length and refinement.

Underprivileged Prodigies in Sport Need Help


Underprivileged Prodigies in Sports Need Help

Prodigy usually refers to talent in more mentally intensive fields such as mathematics or science. I would consider changing out prodigies for something like rising stars.

Moreover, taking up sports can make children perform well in both study and work, because exercise is not only a way to release stress but the process to acquire how to collaborate with others, let us say basketball or football, which are crucial abilities for people to achieve some work or business.


Moreover, taking up sports can make children perform well in both study and work, because e. Exercise is not only a way to release stress but the process to acquire how to collaborate with others, let us say basketball or football, which are crucial abilities for people to achieve somepresents the opportunity to learn teamwork, such as in the case of basketball or football. Both stress-relief and teamwork are pivotal in work orand business.

This sentence is way overextended.

Not only does any practise which merely subsidize partial people to become competitors wreck social fairness, but stifle the opportunities for the underprivileged to be top-tier players.


Not only does anythe practisce which merely subsidize partial peoplof favoring only a small elite to become top-competitors wreck social fairness, but it also stifles the opportunities for the underprivileged to become top-tier players.

We have seen that a number of children born into the areas with poverty who are prodigies of some particular sports, because of no support from their governments, have to lead a common life.


We have seen that a number of sports gifted children born into timpoverished areas with poverty who are prodigies of some particular sports, because of no support from their governments, have to lead a common lifehave had to lead a common life due to a lack of governmental support to pursue their passion.

I do not mean that common life is awful, but it would be a great loss for the whole human civilization to possess excellent players, and the Olympic game should have been more competitive with them for audience to appreciate.


I do not mean that common life is awful, but it would be a great loss for the whole human civilizationsociety to possess excellent players, and whose talents never truly shone. If we cultivated these players, the Olympic gGame shs would have been more competitive with them for audience to appreciatebe more enjoyable with a higher degree of competition.

Some governments spend a huge amount of money to cultivate players to win golden medals in all international contests instead of allotting such money to the children who really have enthusiasm for certain sports or regard sports as hobby, and I completely disagree this misuse.


Some governments spend a huge amount of money to cultivate players to win golden medals in all international contests instead of allotting such money to the children who really have enthusiasm for certain sports or regard sports as hobby, anda passion for the sport. I completely disagree this misusewith this approach.

Obviously, there are a variety of benefits children can get from doing exercise.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

First and foremost, doing sports will lead to a higher life expectancy for everyone, not just for children.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

There are a number of instances that some patients have recovered by the attempt to practice some sport, even without surgery.


There are a number of instances that some patients have reconeeding surgery who have red by the attempt to practice some sport, even wimedied the underlying cause to go throutgh surgery through sports.

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