July 30, 2021
Uma Musume Pretty Derby
The smartphone App Uma Musume Pretty Derby has become a fad in Japan these days. Surprisingly, the game earned 14 billion yen (130 million dollars) in this March, which leads to the 4th rank in global sales ranking, even though it is available only among Japanese users due to VPN security. In last week, Cygames, Inc. announced that the number of downloads has surpassed 90 million.
You would find it's characters and plots weird because cheerful teenage girls with horse ears and tail take part in running races on turf. In addition, they are supposed to dance on the stage soon after their races as a winning live performance. It made me feel confused and curious about it. When I watched the second season of this anime, I couldn't help but watching the next episode and downloading the game app.
The most intriguing point is that the story depicts the original events dramatically and faithfully, which allows me to feel enthusiasm in 90's horse racing. If you know much about legends of Japanese horse racing, you would be obsessed with their characters and dream matches which didn't happen in the reality because of generation gaps or tragic deaths.
Uma Musume Pretty Derby
The smartphone App Uma Musume Pretty Derby has become a fad in Japan these days.
Surprisingly, the game earned 14 billion yen (130 million dollars) in this March, which leads to the 4th rankranks it 4th in global sales ranking, even though it is available only among Japanese users due to VPN security.
In the last week, Cygames, Inc. announced that the number of downloads has surpassed 90 million.
You would find it's characters and plots weird because cheerful teenage girls with horse ears and tail take part in running races on turf.
In addition, they are supposed to dance on the stage soon after their races as a winning live performance.
IThat made me feel confused and curious about it.
When I watched the second season of this anime, I couldn't help but watching the next episode and downloading the game app.
The most intriguing point is that the story depicts the original events dramatically and faithfully, which allows me to feel enthusiasm infor 90's horse racing.
Preposition "for" is perhaps more suitable here.
If you know muchanything about legends of Japanese horse racing, you wouldill be obsessed with their characters and dream matches which didon't happen in the reality because of generation gaps or tragic deaths.
This sentence seems ok but to be really clear as to what you want to say, it probably is better to use "will" in the second part of the sentence. The whole sentence then uses the "first conditional" for the verbs. I hope I have helped you with this.
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July 31, 2021
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Uma Musume Pretty Derby This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The smartphone App Uma Musume Pretty Derby has become a fad in Japan these days. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Surprisingly, the game earned 14 billion yen (130 million dollars) in this March, which leads to the 4th rank in global sales ranking, even though it is available only among Japanese users due to VPN security. Surprisingly, the game earned 14 billion yen (130 million dollars) |
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In last week, Cygames, Inc. announced that the number of downloads has surpassed 90 million. In the last week, Cygames, Inc. announced that the number of downloads has surpassed 90 million. |
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You would find it's characters and plots weird because cheerful teenage girls with horse ears and tail take part in running races on turf. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In addition, they are supposed to dance on the stage soon after their races as a winning live performance. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It made me feel confused and curious about it.
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When I watched the second season of this anime, I couldn't help but watching the next episode and downloading the game app. When I watched the second season of this anime, I couldn't help but watch |
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The most intriguing point is that the story depicts the original events dramatically and faithfully, which allows me to feel enthusiasm in 90's horse racing. The most intriguing point is that the story depicts the original events dramatically and faithfully, which allows me to feel enthusiasm Preposition "for" is perhaps more suitable here. |
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If you know much about legends of Japanese horse racing, you would be obsessed with their characters and dream matches which didn't happen in the reality because of generation gaps or tragic deaths. If you know This sentence seems ok but to be really clear as to what you want to say, it probably is better to use "will" in the second part of the sentence. The whole sentence then uses the "first conditional" for the verbs. I hope I have helped you with this. |
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