Feb. 27, 2022
Yesterday I reviewed my writing these days and did not write new journals. Today I opened this web joyfully and clicked the button "write" . Suddenly, an alarm message popped. I was shocked, soon I calmed down and found it reminded me to correct more journals to maintain my correcting rate of 50%. I was relieved.
The only problem is that there are usually few new Chinese journals, such as yesterday, that no recent article was recommended to me. Happily, today I got three new ones to correct. I secretly hope Chinese learners write more haha. Today I fixed an article about "Paper Bag Test", and learned more about racism in American history, and it is an excellent experience to understand others' perspectives by communication.
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Yesterday I reviewed my recent writing these days and did not write new journals.
Yesterday I reviewed my recent writing and did not write new journals.
This sounds a bit more natural.
Today I opened this website joyfully and clicked the button "write" button.
Today I opened this website joyfully and clicked the "write" button.
Wording, word order.
Suddenly, an alarm message popped up. Suddenly, an alarm message popped up.
I was shocked, but soon I calmed down and found it reminded me to correct more journals to maintain my correctiong rate of 50%.
I was shocked, but soon I calmed down and found it reminded me to correct more journals to maintain my correction rate of 50%.
I was relieved.
The only problem is that there are usually few new Chinese journals, such as yesterday, thatwhen no recent article was recommended to me.
The only problem is that there are usually few new Chinese journals, such as yesterday, when no recent article was recommended to me.
Happily, today I got three new ones to correct.
I secretly hope Chinese learners write more haha.
Today I fixed an article about "Paper Bag Test", and learned more about racism in American history, and it i. It was an excellent experience to understand others' perspectives bythrough communication.
Today I fixed an article about "Paper Bag Test", and learned more about racism in American history. It was an excellent experience to understand others' perspectives through communication.
I would break this sentence into two for improved readability.
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Good job! I'll try and do some Chinese journals, haha.
022701 - An Emergency
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First sentence comes straight from @lovemixlive:
Yesterday I reviewed my (recent journal entries, but I did not write any new entries.)
Today I opened this web(site with joy), and clicked the button "write"(.) --> The other reviewers think "I opened this website joyfully" sounds a bit strange - but in reality, there's nothing wrong with it! It's a mouthful haha! But I like it and you should feel confident! Perfectly valid examples, "I danced joyfully", "I laughed joyfully", "I ran through the streets joyfully".
Suddenly, an alarm message popped (up). I was shocked, (but) soon I calmed down(. I) found it reminded me to correct more journals (in order) to maintain my correcting rate of 50%. I was relieved. --> I often trip up with "in order to" because it is a bit unwieldy. But used very carefully, it can work well...
The only problem is that there are usually few new Chinese journals(... For example,) yesterday (no new) article(s) (were) recommended to me.
Happily, today I got three new (entries) to correct. --> Again, I'd say there is nothing wrong with "Happily," at the start of this sentence. You could say "Luckily," or "Fortunately," but it's perfectly fine.
I secretly hope Chinese learners write more haha. Today I fixed an article about (a) "Paper Bag Test", and (I) learned more about racism in American history(.) (Writing these journal corrections is) an excellent experience to understand others' perspectives(.)
Yesterday I reviewed my writing these days andrecent journal entries, but I did not write new journalany new entries.
Yesterday I reviewed my recent journal entries, but I did not write any new entries.
Today, I opened this website and joyfully and clicked the button "write" .
Today, I opened this website and joyfully clicked the button "write" .
Suddenly, an alarmert message popped up.
Suddenly, an alert message popped up.
I was shocked, soobut then I calmed down and founwhen I realized it was remindeding me to correct more journals to maintain my correctiong rate of 50%.
I was shocked, but then I calmed down when I realized it was reminding me to correct more journals to maintain my correction rate of 50%.
I wasWhat a relieved.f!
What a relief!
The only problem is that there are usually very few new Chinese journals, such as entries. For example, yesterday, that no recent article was recommended to meere were no new entries recommended for correction.
The only problem is that there are usually very few new Chinese journal entries. For example, yesterday there were no new entries recommended for correction.
HappiFortunately, today I gotthere were three new ones to correct.
Fortunately, today there were three new ones to correct.
I secretly hope the Chinese learners write more, haha. I secretly hope the Chinese learners write more, haha.
Today I fixcorrected an article about "Paper Bag Test", and learned more about racism in American history, and it is an excellent experience to understand others' perspectives by communication. It was an great experience to read about other people's perspectives.
Today I corrected an article about "Paper Bag Test" and learned more about racism in American history. It was an great experience to read about other people's perspectives.
Yesterday, I reviewed my writing these days and did not write. Lately, I haven't written any new journal entries.
Yesterday, I reviewed my writing. Lately, I haven't written any new journal entries.
let me know if this is what you mean
Today, I opened this web joyfulsite excitedly and clicked the button "write" .
Today, I opened this website excitedly and clicked the button "write" .
Suddenly, an alarm message popped up. Suddenly, an alarm message popped up.
popped up
(phrasal verb - to appear)
I was shocked, s. Soon I calmed down and. I found it reminded me to correct more journals to maintain my correcting rate of 50%.
I was shocked. Soon I calmed down. I found it reminded me to correct more journals to maintain my correcting rate of 50%.
The only problem is that there are usually few new Chinese journals, s. Such as yesterday, that no recent articles wasere recommended to me.
The only problem is that there are usually few new Chinese journals. Such as yesterday, no recent articles were recommended to me.
HappLuckily, today I got three new ones to correct.
Luckily, today I got three new ones to correct.
Today I fixed an article about "Paper Bag Test", and learned more about racism in American history, and i. It is an excellent experience to understand others' perspectives by communication.
Today I fixed an article about "Paper Bag Test", and learned more about racism in American history. It is an excellent experience to understand others' perspectives by communication.
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Good work
Some new words I wrote which fit better with the sentence
A new phrasal verb
Also, made some sentences shorter
You have many good ideas
But too many ideas in one sentence makes it hard to read
Good work!
=)
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Yesterday I reviewed my writing these days and did not write new journals.
Yesterday, I reviewed my writing let me know if this is what you mean
Yesterday I reviewed my
Yesterday I reviewed my recent writing This sounds a bit more natural. |
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Today I opened this web joyfully and clicked the button "write" .
Today, I opened this web
Today, I opened this website and joyfully
Today I opened this website joyfully and clicked the Wording, word order. |
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Suddenly, an alarm message popped. Suddenly, an alarm message popped up. Suddenly, an alarm message popped up. popped up (phrasal verb - to appear)
Suddenly, an al Suddenly, an alarm message popped up. Suddenly, an alarm message popped up. |
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I was shocked, soon I calmed down and found it reminded me to correct more journals to maintain my correcting rate of 50%.
I was shocked
I was shocked,
I was shocked, but soon I calmed down and found it reminded me to correct more journals to maintain my correction |
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I was relieved.
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The only problem is that there are usually few new Chinese journals, such as yesterday, that no recent article was recommended to me.
The only problem is that there are usually few new Chinese journals
The only problem is that there are usually very few new Chinese journal
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Happily, today I got three new ones to correct.
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I secretly hope Chinese learners write more haha. I secretly hope the Chinese learners write more, haha. I secretly hope the Chinese learners write more, haha. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Today I fixed an article about "Paper Bag Test", and learned more about racism in American history, and it is an excellent experience to understand others' perspectives by communication.
Today I fixed an article about "Paper Bag Test", and learned more about racism in American history
Today I
Today I fixed an article about "Paper Bag Test", and learned more about racism in American history I would break this sentence into two for improved readability. |
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