S...she always entervisited to library to slearchn more about languages. ...she always visited to library to learn more about languages.

Sshe always entered tohe library to search about languages. she always entered the library to search about languages.

She always wentered to to the library to research about languages. She always went to the library to research about languages.

"Research" is more correct when talking about studying.

Sshe always wentered to library to srearchd about languages. she always went to library to read about languages.

I combined this sentence with the previous sentence because it flows better. "Went" is better than "entered" in this context because it emphasizes that her destination was the library rather than focusing on the fact that she went into it.

Sshe always wentered to to the library to search(read / search for books) about languages. she always went to the library to (read / search for books) about languages.

One day Malinda becammade a new friend him named Alex. One day Malinda made a new friend named Alex.

One day Malinda became a new friend himfriends with a boy named Alex. One day Malinda became friends with a boy named Alex.

One day Malinda becammade a new friend him. His name is Alex. One day Malinda made a new friend. His name is Alex.

When someone has a new friend, we say they MADE a new friend.

One day, Malinda became a new friend himfriends with a boy named Alex. One day, Malinda became friends with a boy named Alex.

There's multiple ways you can write this as well: Example: "One day, Malinda met a boy named Alex and became friends with him."

One day, Malinda becammade a new friend him name, Alex. One day, Malinda made a new friend, Alex.

Malinda didn't "become" anything, she "made" a friend. She technically became friends with something, but English uses "make" for friends.

One day Malinda becammade a new friend; hims name was Alex. One day Malinda made a new friend; his name was Alex.

Alex was helped Malinda until her becaome a translator. Alex helped Malinda become a translator.

Some other suggestions: Alex supported Malinda in reaching her goal/dream of becoming a translator. Alex helped Malinda in reach her goal/dream of becoming a translator.

Alex was helped Malinda until sher became a translator. Alex helped Malinda until she became a translator.

Alex was helping Malinda until sher became a translator. Alex was helping Malinda until she became a translator.

Alex was helped Malinda until sher became a translator. Alex helped Malinda until she became a translator.

Alternatively, I would word it as: "Alex helped Malinda [to] fulfill her dreams of becoming a translator."

Alex was helped Malinda until sher finally became a translator. Alex helped Malinda until she finally became a translator.

I added "finally" here to show all the hard work they put into this.

Alex was helping Malinda until sher became a translator. Alex was helping Malinda until she became a translator.

One day Alex came and told to Malinda cand asked, "Will you marry me ?" One day Alex came to Malinda and asked, "Will you marry me?"

One day Alex came and told toasked Malinda can, will you marry me ? One day Alex came and asked Malinda, will you marry me ?

One day Alex came and told to Malinda can"Will you marry me ?" One day Alex came and told Malinda "Will you marry me?"

You don't need the "to" in scenarios like this. We use "can" if someone is able to do something, and "Will" when someone chooses to do something.

One day, Alex came and told toasked Malinda can: "Would you marry me ?" One day, Alex came and asked Malinda: "Would you marry me?"

In English, when proposing to someone we ask "Would you marry me?"

One day, Alex came and told toasked Malinda can youto marry me him? One day, Alex came and asked Malinda to marry him?

If you want to make this dialogue, you can say: "One day, Alex came and asked Malinda, "Can you marry me?"

One day Alex came and tolsaid to Malinda c"Can you marry me ?" One day Alex came and said to Malinda "Can you marry me?"

"told" is usually not used for questions. It's usually used for factual statements or commands.

Now, Alex and Malinda have 2 children. Now, Alex and Malinda have 2 children.

Now, Alex and Malinda have 2two children., Now, Alex and Malinda have two children,

Their names are Sawsan and Badr. Their names are Sawsan and Badr.

Their names are Sawsan and Badr. Their names are Sawsan and Badr.

Their names are Sawsan and Badr. Their names are Sawsan and Badr.

Plural for "name" is "names", since we are talking about 2 children.

Their names are Sawsan and Badr. Their names are Sawsan and Badr.

Ttheir names are Sawsan and Badr. their names are Sawsan and Badr.

I combined this with the previous sentence and changed "name" to "names" to show that there are more than one name.

Their names are Sawsan and Badr. Their names are Sawsan and Badr.

When mMalinda entered into a school., When Malinda entered school,

This clause and the one the sentence following it should be combined into one sentence.

When mMalinda entered into a school., When Malinda entered school,

When mMalinda enterrolled into a school. When Malinda enrolled into a school.

"Enrolled" is when you enter a school/university or any program.

When mMalinda wentered into a school to school, she always went into the library to learn about languages. When Malinda went to school, she always went into the library to learn about languages.

I'd combine this sentence (fragment) with the next sentence to form one sentence. "To enter a school" for me means that she has enrolled in the school. I'm assuming you want to say that every day that she went to school, she would go to the library sometime during or after school to read about other languages.

When mMalinda entered into a school., When Malinda entered school,

Malinda needs to be capitalized because it's a name. You can also say "started" instead of "entered."

When mever Malinda entered into a school., Whenever Malinda entered school,

Names are capitalised, and this isn't a full sentence on its own so I removed the full stop. "a school" makes it sound like she's going into many different schools randomly, whereas "school" makes it sound like the school she regularly attends.

And sShe said , "yes." She said, "yes."

And sShe said yes. She said yes.

There's a debate about whether to start sentences with "and" or not. Since this is an official story, it's probably better not to start a sentence with it.

And sShe said yes. She said yes.

It's considered poor practice to start a sentence with "And" in English writing - people do it all the time in speech however.

The bBeautiful gGirl The Beautiful Girl

Titles are usually in title case

One day there was a beautiful girl. One day there was a beautiful girl.

Once day there was a beautiful girl. Once there was a beautiful girl.

Once day there was a beautiful girl. Once there was a beautiful girl.

"Once" is more commonly used in this context.

One day, there was a beautiful girl. One day, there was a beautiful girl.

One day, there was a beautiful girl. One day, there was a beautiful girl.

Her name iwas Malinda. Her name was Malinda.

Her name iwas Malinda. Her name was Malinda.

Her name iwas Malinda. Her name was Malinda.

You are talking about something that happened in the past.

Her name iwas Malinda. Her name was Malinda.

Since you used "was" in the previous sentence, you have to keep using it so everything is in past tense.

Her name iwas Malinda. Her name was Malinda.

You started in the past tense, so you should keep with the past tense since this story is happening in the past.

Malinda iwas 7 years. Malinda was 7 years.

Malinda is 7 years old. Malinda is 7 years old.

We say that someone is X years OLD when we are talking about their age.

Malinda iwas 7 years old. Malinda was 7 years old.

Malinda is 7seven years old. Malinda is seven years old.

In stories, it's common to write out numbers instead of using the number itself.

Malinda iwas 7 years old. Malinda was 7 years old.

She always said , "I want to become a translator." She always said, "I want to become a translator."

She always said Ishe wanted to become a translator. She always said she wanted to become a translator.

She always said "I want to become a translator". She always said "I want to become a translator".

She always said Isaid that she always wanted to become a translator. She said that she always wanted to become a translator.

She always said Ishe wanted to become a translator. She always said she wanted to become a translator.

"Wanted" is the past tense.

She always said "I want to become a translator." / She always said she wanted to become a translator She always said "I want to become a translator" / She always said she wanted to become a translator

The first is a direct quote, and in that case you can use the pronouns and tense of the original statement, but it needs to be in quotation marks. Otherwise, you can use an indirect quote, without quotation marks, but then it has to match the tense of your sentence.