Dec. 16, 2020
Exercise –Abandon ship
The order to abandon ship was given. It was so unexpected that everyone unprepared and,don't know how could they manage to it at all. Everyone was seized with panic and confusion. People were all rushing in all directions for their lives. A flood of crews came up from below because the 16 watertight compartments of Titanic was almost filled with water. As a result of lifeboats lowered,people could just jumped overboard. The lifeboats fulled soon,for people all struggled to get into lifeboats.
For some people,it's fortunate they left and survived the drown,but for the other people it's another thing. Looking the Titanic sank rapidly,people in water were desperate for death. Lifeboats moved away one by one,not only people in water but people who in lifeboats all cries for despair.
Actually,I don't know whether "a flood of crews" is right or not.
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Exercise –Abandon ship
The order to abandon ship was given.
It was so unexpected that everyone was unprepared, and,do they didn't know how could they manage to do it at all.
It was so unexpected that everyone was unprepared, and they didn't know how could they manage to do it at all.
Everyone was seized with panic and confusion.
People were all rushing in all directions for their lives.
A flood of crewspeople came up from below because the 16 watertight compartments of Titanic wasere almost filled with water.
A flood of people came up from below because the 16 watertight compartments of Titanic were almost filled with water.
I know you already caught this -- and I agree!
As a result of lifeboats being lowered, people could just jumped overboard.
As a result of lifeboats being lowered, people could just jump overboard.
This sentence does not flow well, but it is grammatically correct. I would probably say something like: "Because the lifeboats had been lowered into the water, people could just jump overboard."
The lifeboats fuilled soon, for people all struggled to get into lifeboats.
The lifeboats filled soon for people all struggled to get into lifeboats.
I would say "because" instead of "for" even though technically you could leave it this way.
For some people,it's fortunate they left and survived the drown,isaster, but for the other people it's another thing.
For some people,it's fortunate they left and survived the disaster, but for the other people it's another thing.
If you wanted to use "drown" in this sentence, I would say something like: "For some people, it's fortunate they left and did not drown."
Looking tThe Titanic sank rapidly, and the people in the water were desperate for death.
The Titanic sank rapidly, and the people in the water were desperate.
"Desperate for death" sounds like the people are suicidal
Lifeboats moved away one by one,n. Not only the people in the water but also the people who inin the lifeboats all cries forcried with despair.
Lifeboats moved away one by one. Not only the people in the water but also the people in the lifeboats cried with despair.
Just adding some definite articles for clarity. People always cry "with" despair.
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The order to abandon ship was given. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It was so unexpected that everyone unprepared and,don't know how could they manage to it at all.
It was so unexpected that everyone was unprepared, and |
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Everyone was seized with panic and confusion. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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People were all rushing in all directions for their lives. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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A flood of crews came up from below because the 16 watertight compartments of Titanic was almost filled with water.
A flood of I know you already caught this -- and I agree! |
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As a result of lifeboats lowered,people could just jumped overboard.
As a result of lifeboats being lowered, people could just jump This sentence does not flow well, but it is grammatically correct. I would probably say something like: "Because the lifeboats had been lowered into the water, people could just jump overboard." |
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The lifeboats fulled soon,for people all struggled to get into lifeboats.
The lifeboats f I would say "because" instead of "for" even though technically you could leave it this way. |
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For some people,it's fortunate they left and survived the drown,but for the other people it's another thing.
For some people,it's fortunate they left and survived the d If you wanted to use "drown" in this sentence, I would say something like: "For some people, it's fortunate they left and did not drown." |
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Looking the Titanic sank rapidly in their eyes,people in water were desperate for death. |
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Lifeboats moved away one by one,not only people in water but people who in lifeboats all cries for despair.
Lifeboats moved away one by one Just adding some definite articles for clarity. People always cry "with" despair. |
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Looking the Titanic sank rapidly,people in water were desperate for death.
"Desperate for death" sounds like the people are suicidal |
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