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April 29, 2024

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Two Maps, Two Children

In the spring three years ago, I put a map of Tokyo on the wall in the living room. My son had gone to college far away in Tokyo and started to live by himself. Looking at the map occasionally, I have spent the past years thinking about what his life would be like there. My daughter also entered college this spring and another map of Yamagata came next to the Tokyo one.
 
Two children left home and a new life only with my husband started. Nowadays we can talk face-to-face or chat with each other using a free video call app or a communication app. However, although our house has indeed become less messy without children, I feel lonely somehow. Without being thrown around, their clothes are kept tidy in the closet as if they are faithful guardian deities waiting for their master's return.

I wonder if they are going to come back home during the Golden Week holidays. Even their short-term return would illuminate our house in a matter of seconds. What is likely to come up in our conversation first is our daughter's new life in college, I guess.

Today as well, I take another look at the two maps quietly, hoping that both my son and daughter keep smiling without getting injured, catching a cold, or facing danger.

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Today as well, I take another look at the two maps quietly, hopingand hope that both my son and daughter will keep smiling without getting injured, catching a cold, or facing danger.

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April 30, 2024

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Two Maps, Two Children

In the spring three years ago, I put a map of Tokyo on the wall in the living room.

My son had gone to college far away in Tokyo and started to live by himself.

Looking at the map occasionally, I have spent the past years thinking about what his life would be like there.

My daughter also entered college this spring and another map of Yamagata came next to the Tokyo one.

Two children left home and a new life only with my husband started.

Nowadays we can talk face-to-face or chat with each other using a free video call app or a communication app.

However, although our house has indeed become less messy without children, I feel lonely somehow.

Without being thrown around, their clothes are kept tidy in the closet as if they are faithful guardian deities waiting for their master's return.

I wonder if they are going to come back home during the Golden Week holidays.

Even their short-term return would illuminate our house in a matter of seconds.

What is likely to come up in our conversation first is our daughter's new life in college, I guess.

Today as well, I take another look at the two maps quietly, hoping that both my son and daughter keep smiling without getting injured, catching a cold, or facing danger.

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This was very nice! Outside of the language, it’s well written. Not only do you sound native, you sound like a writer!

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satota

April 30, 2024

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Two Maps, Two Children

In the spring three years ago, I putThree years ago in the spring, I placed a map of Tokyo on the wall in theour living room wall.

"Put" is 100% correct, but "placed" means you made a careful decision to put it there. It sounds more thoughtful.

My son had gone to college far away in Tokyo and started to live by himself.

Looking at the map occasionally, I have spentver the plast years thinking aboutthree years, I have often wondered what his life would be like there.

My daughter also entered college thisin the spring and another, so a map of Yamagata cameappeared next to the Tokyo one.

TMy two children left home, and a new life only with my husband started.

I would say "When our two children left home, a new life with my husband began."

Nowadays we, I can talk face-to-face or chat with each to my children via video chat or phone one another using a free video call app or a communication app.

However, although our house has indeed become less messy without the children gone, I feel lonely somehow.

Without being thrown around, their clothes are kept tidy in the closet as if they are faithful guardian deities waiting for their master's return.

I wonder if they are going to come back home during the Golden Week holidays.

Even theira short-term return would illuminate stay would light up our house in a matter of seconds.!

What is likely to come up in our conversation first is our daughter's new life in college, I guess.

"I guess" sounds a little negative at the end of a sentence. If you say, "It's nice, I guess," it means you're not sure whether it's nice, and you're forced to say it.

Maybe, "I wonder if we're going to talk about our daughter's new life in college first."

Today as well, IEven today, I find myself quietly takeing another look at the two maps quietly, hoping that both my son and daughter keep smiling without getting injured, catching a cold, or facing danger.

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This is a sweet entry. It makes me think of my own parents. I wonder if they are thinking of their children, too.

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satota

April 30, 2024

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Thank you!

In the spring three years ago, I put a map of Tokyo on the wall in the living room.

My son had gone to college far away in Tokyo and had started to live by himself.

LookingI look at the map occasionally, Iand have spent the past few years thinking about what his life wouldhas been like there.

MThis spring, my daughter also entered college this spring and another, and a second map of Yamagata camewas placed next to the Tokyo one.

TSince my two children left home and, a new life only withwith only my husband has started.

However, although our house has indeed become less messy without children, I feel lonely somehow.

WithouNow that they're not being thrown around, their clothes are kept tidy in the closet, as if they are faithful guardian deities waiting for their master's return.

Today as well, I take another look at the two maps quietly, hoping that both my son and daughter keep smiling without getting injured, catching a cold, or facing danger.

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satota

April 30, 2024

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Thank you!

Two Maps, Two Children


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In the spring three years ago, I put a map of Tokyo on the wall in the living room.


In the spring three years ago, I put a map of Tokyo on the wall in the living room.

In the spring three years ago, I putThree years ago in the spring, I placed a map of Tokyo on the wall in theour living room wall.

"Put" is 100% correct, but "placed" means you made a careful decision to put it there. It sounds more thoughtful.

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My son had gone to college far away in Tokyo and started to live by himself.


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My son had gone to college far away in Tokyo and had started to live by himself.

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Looking at the map occasionally, I have spent the past years thinking about what his life would be like there.


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LookingI look at the map occasionally, Iand have spent the past few years thinking about what his life wouldhas been like there.

Looking at the map occasionally, I have spentver the plast years thinking aboutthree years, I have often wondered what his life would be like there.

My daughter also entered college this spring and another map of Yamagata came next to the Tokyo one.


MThis spring, my daughter also entered college this spring and another, and a second map of Yamagata camewas placed next to the Tokyo one.

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My daughter also entered college thisin the spring and another, so a map of Yamagata cameappeared next to the Tokyo one.

Two children left home and a new life only with my husband started.


TSince my two children left home and, a new life only withwith only my husband has started.

TMy two children left home, and a new life only with my husband started.

I would say "When our two children left home, a new life with my husband began."

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Nowadays we can talk face-to-face or chat with each other using a free video call app or a communication app.


Nowadays we, I can talk face-to-face or chat with each to my children via video chat or phone one another using a free video call app or a communication app.

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However, although our house has indeed become less messy without children, I feel lonely somehow.


However, although our house has indeed become less messy without children, I feel lonely somehow.

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Without being thrown around, their clothes are kept tidy in the closet as if they are faithful guardian deities waiting for their master's return.


WithouNow that they're not being thrown around, their clothes are kept tidy in the closet, as if they are faithful guardian deities waiting for their master's return.

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I wonder if they are going to come back home during the Golden Week holidays.


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Even their short-term return would illuminate our house in a matter of seconds.


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What is likely to come up in our conversation first is our daughter's new life in college, I guess.


What is likely to come up in our conversation first is our daughter's new life in college, I guess.

"I guess" sounds a little negative at the end of a sentence. If you say, "It's nice, I guess," it means you're not sure whether it's nice, and you're forced to say it. Maybe, "I wonder if we're going to talk about our daughter's new life in college first."

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Today as well, I take another look at the two maps quietly, hoping that both my son and daughter keep smiling without getting injured, catching a cold, or facing danger.


Today as well, I take another look at the two maps quietly, hoping that both my son and daughter keep smiling without getting injured, catching a cold, or facing danger.

Today as well, IEven today, I find myself quietly takeing another look at the two maps quietly, hoping that both my son and daughter keep smiling without getting injured, catching a cold, or facing danger.

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Today as well, I take another look at the two maps quietly, hopingand hope that both my son and daughter will keep smiling without getting injured, catching a cold, or facing danger.

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