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Scarlett_Father

July 28, 2023

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Twitter Logo Changed (I)

Just a couple of days ago, I noticed that the logo on Twitter had changed. I have become aware that Elong Musk considering creating Twitter to a "everything app" like WeChat in China, it seems he is likely to be a pioneer in various fields. As the former founder of Paypal, Boing and OpenAI, no one will question his potential to succeed, he doesn't know the vocabulary "failure".

When I saw the logo "X" displayed on the website, it recalled me a sharp knife streaking through the sky, which represents Elong's ambition to dominate the world. Does he really know the meaning of "everything app", this means the monopoly. He was born as a prodigy from South Africa, and developed in America, however, he will meet Waterloo starting from this "X".

This logo is very similar to the symbol of the Iron Cross for the German military in 1940s.

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I have become aware that Elong Musk is considering creathanging Twitter to abe an "everything app" like WeChat in China, it seems he is likely to be a pioneer in various fields.

Between the name "Elon" and the verb "considering", the conjunction "is" should be used. "changing" should be used instead of "creating", "changing" often tells us that something that already exists is moving from one state to another. "Creating" is slightly inaccurate, it tells us that the subject "Twitter" has just been created.

As the former founder of Paypal, Boeing, and OpenAI, no one will question his potential to succeed, he doesn't know the vocabulary "failure".

"Vocabulary" is correct, though a better choice may be "word". Comma placement is correct depending on whether you like to use the Oxford comma or not.

When I saw the logo "X" displayed on the website, it recallminded me as if a sharp knife had streakinged through the sky, which represents Elong's ambition to dominate the world.

"Recall" means you remembered something by yourself without outside help, while "Remind" means you were made aware of something by an outside force or another person.

Here is an example of the word "recall" being used:
"I recall that you sent me an email last night"
"He recalled the conversation they had earlier"

Here is an example of the word "recall" being used:
"The teacher reminded him that it was time for class in fifteen minutes."
"His kitchen timer reminded him that it was time to take the cookies out of the oven."

He was born as a prodigy from South Africa, and developed inupon coming to America, however, he further developed his reputation. He will meet Waterloo starting from this "X".

"Developed" is usually a word we use for non-sentient or non-animate subjects. I switched the subject of "developed" from him to being about his reputation, as I believe that is what you were trying to say.

Thise logo is very similar to the symbol of the Iron Cross ofor the German military inused in the 1940s.

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Overall, I believe you communicated your ideas effectively, though grammatically there is room for improvement. I say that you have done a good job.

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Scarlett_Father

July 29, 2023

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When I saw the logo "X" displayed on the website, it recallminded me as if a sharp knife had streakinged through the sky, which represents Elong's ambition to dominate the world.

That's great, you have explained the two words concisely and clearly to me: "recall" from myself and "remind" from an outside force. :-)

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Scarlett_Father

July 29, 2023

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Thank you for your time on this entry. Yes, I have been struggling with grammar for a long time. 😳

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July 29, 2023

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Thank you for your time on this entry. Yes, I have been struggling with grammar for a long time. 😳

Ah, you are very welcome. Happy to help !

Just a couple of days ago, I noticed that the logo on Twitter had changed.

It have become awares come to my attention that Elong Musk is considering creatturning Twitter into an "everything app" like WeChat in China, iIt seems he is likely to be a pioneer in various fields.

As the former founder of Paypal, Boing and OpenAI, no one will question his potential to succeed, - he doesn't know the vocabularyword "failure".

When I saw the "X" logo "X" displayed on the website, it recallminded me of a sharp knife streaklicing through the sky, which representsing Elong's ambition to dominate the world.

Does he really know the meaning of an "everything app", twhisch means thea monopoly.?

It wasn't very clear to me what you are trying to say, but if you are asking a "rhetorical question", you still need a question mark ("?") at the end. :)

He was born asBorn a prodigy fromin South Africa, and developed in America, however, he will meet Waterloo starting from this "X"he grew up in America, but it is from this "X" that he will meet Waterloo.

It's odd to keep repeating "he" "he" "he" in a sentence, so it's more natural to start without it. :)

This logo is very similar to the symbol of the Iron Cross forIron Cross symbol used by the German military in the 1940s.

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Honestly, I don't understand what Elon is trying to achieve with all the changes to Twitter! I think it is a waste - Twitter is such a strong brand that has been able to become part of our vocabulary (we say "to tweet" for example!) and very few brands can actually say that. It's really a waste.

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Scarlett_Father

July 29, 2023

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Thank you for taking the time to make corrections and useful comments. :-)

Twitter Logo Changed (I)


Just a couple of days ago, I noticed that the logo on Twitter had changed.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I have become aware that Elong Musk considering creating Twitter to a "everything app" like WeChat in China, it seems he is likely to be a pioneer in various fields.


It have become awares come to my attention that Elong Musk is considering creatturning Twitter into an "everything app" like WeChat in China, iIt seems he is likely to be a pioneer in various fields.

I have become aware that Elong Musk is considering creathanging Twitter to abe an "everything app" like WeChat in China, it seems he is likely to be a pioneer in various fields.

Between the name "Elon" and the verb "considering", the conjunction "is" should be used. "changing" should be used instead of "creating", "changing" often tells us that something that already exists is moving from one state to another. "Creating" is slightly inaccurate, it tells us that the subject "Twitter" has just been created.

As the former founder of Paypal, Boing and OpenAI, no one will question his potential to succeed, he doesn't know the vocabulary "failure".


As the former founder of Paypal, Boing and OpenAI, no one will question his potential to succeed, - he doesn't know the vocabularyword "failure".

As the former founder of Paypal, Boeing, and OpenAI, no one will question his potential to succeed, he doesn't know the vocabulary "failure".

"Vocabulary" is correct, though a better choice may be "word". Comma placement is correct depending on whether you like to use the Oxford comma or not.

When I saw the logo "X" displayed on the website, it recalled me a sharp knife streaking through the sky, which represents Elong's ambition to dominate the world.


When I saw the "X" logo "X" displayed on the website, it recallminded me of a sharp knife streaklicing through the sky, which representsing Elong's ambition to dominate the world.

When I saw the logo "X" displayed on the website, it recallminded me as if a sharp knife had streakinged through the sky, which represents Elong's ambition to dominate the world.

"Recall" means you remembered something by yourself without outside help, while "Remind" means you were made aware of something by an outside force or another person. Here is an example of the word "recall" being used: "I recall that you sent me an email last night" "He recalled the conversation they had earlier" Here is an example of the word "recall" being used: "The teacher reminded him that it was time for class in fifteen minutes." "His kitchen timer reminded him that it was time to take the cookies out of the oven."

Does he really know the meaning of "everything app", this means the monopoly.


Does he really know the meaning of an "everything app", twhisch means thea monopoly.?

It wasn't very clear to me what you are trying to say, but if you are asking a "rhetorical question", you still need a question mark ("?") at the end. :)

He was born as a prodigy from South Africa, and developed in America, however, he will meet Waterloo starting from this "X".


He was born asBorn a prodigy fromin South Africa, and developed in America, however, he will meet Waterloo starting from this "X"he grew up in America, but it is from this "X" that he will meet Waterloo.

It's odd to keep repeating "he" "he" "he" in a sentence, so it's more natural to start without it. :)

He was born as a prodigy from South Africa, and developed inupon coming to America, however, he further developed his reputation. He will meet Waterloo starting from this "X".

"Developed" is usually a word we use for non-sentient or non-animate subjects. I switched the subject of "developed" from him to being about his reputation, as I believe that is what you were trying to say.

This logo is very similar to the symbol of the Iron Cross for the German military in 1940s.


This logo is very similar to the symbol of the Iron Cross forIron Cross symbol used by the German military in the 1940s.

Thise logo is very similar to the symbol of the Iron Cross ofor the German military inused in the 1940s.

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