Aug. 17, 2020
Trout in a Stream
There is a stream running along a road just before our house. I remember the times when trout lived in it. When I was small, I used to throw them grains of wheat. I didn't know trout are carnivorous at the time. That is something that puts smile on my face every time I remember it.
Unfortunately, it has been a long time since the trout lived in the stream. My uncles once told me a story of how they caught the trout with their bear hands when they were children. They said fish used to be abundant here. It could be 30–40 years ago. I suppose a lot has changed since then. The stream was dredged multiple times when I was young, which could be one of the reasons for the missing fish. There might be other reasons, such as water pollution, but that is just a guess.
It would be wonderful if they ever returned.
Trout in a Stream
There is a stream running along a road just before our house.
I remember the times when trout lived in it.
When I was smallyounger/a kid, I used to throw them grains of wheat.
Saying "When I was small" works fine, but to me it feels a bit off. I don't know why =P
I didn't know trout awere carnivorous at the time.
That is something thaIt puts a smile on my face every time I remember it.
Just a shortened version, more compact and not so wordy.
Unfortunately, it has been a long time since the trout lived in the stream.
My uncles once told me a story of how they caught the trout with their beare hands when they were children.
They said fish used to be abundant here.
It could be've been anywhere from 30–40 years ago.
I suppose a lot has changed since then.
The stream was dredged multiple times when I was young, which could be one of the reasons for the missing fish.
There might be other reasons, such as water pollution, but that i's just a guess.
It's common to use contractions (for example: that is - that's / it is - it's / I have - I've) to make the flow of your words smoother.
If you don't use them, it can sound a bit robotic or professional, or serious (which isn't always a bad thing).
It would be wonderful if they ever returned.
Aug. 19, 2020
There might be other reasons, such as water pollution, but that i's just a guess.
As far as I know, contractions are used in informal texts, and in formal writings should be avoided. To be honest, I combine both styles. Maybe I should first decide which style I'm gonna use and only then start writing.
Aug. 19, 2020
Thank you for the corrections!
Aug. 19, 2020
As far as I know, contractions are used in informal texts, and in formal writings should be avoided. To be honest, I combine both styles. Maybe I should first decide which style I'm gonna use and only then start writing.
Of course! As always, there are different writing styles and different writing conventions to go with them. I think it just comes with experience, and eventually you'll just get a feel for it.
For reference, I think personal stories like this one tend to be more informal and relaxed, while informative writing tends to be formal and sophisticated.
Trout in a Stream
There is a stream running along a road just before our house.
I remember the times when trout lived in it.
When I was small, I used to throw them grains of wheat.
I didn't know that trout are carnivorous at the time. / I didn’t know at the time that trout are/were carnivorous
You could say it the first way, it still makes sense but reads a bit off, the second example I gave flows are reads a bit nicer.
That is something that puts a smile on my face every time I remember it.
Unfortunately, it has been a long time since the trout have lived in the stream.
My uncles once told me a story of how they caught the trout with their beare hands when they were children.
They said that fish used to be abundant here.
It could beThat would/could have been around 30–40 years ago.
I suppose a lot has changed since then.
The stream was dredged multiple times when I was young, which could be one of the reasons for the missing fish.
There might be other reasons, such as water pollution, but that is just a guess.
It would be wonderful if they ever returned.
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Good job, well done!
Aug. 17, 2020
I didn't know that trout are carnivorous at the time. / I didn’t know at the time that trout are/were carnivorous
I think in this sentence the way it is, using the word “were” like that doesn’t make much sense. To me at least upon first glance it reads as if they once were carnivorous but now aren’t lol. Wording it like “At the time I didn’t know trout were carnivorous” would read a bit nicer.
Aug. 18, 2020
Thank you again!
Trout in a Stream
There is a stream running along a road just before our house.
"In front" is probably more common than "before" in relatively informal writing when referring to location, but this is fine.
I remember the times when trout lived in it.
When I was small, I used to throw them grains of wheat.
I didn't know trout awere carnivorous at the time.
I would prefer "were" but "are" would be accepted by a lot of other native speakers.
That is something that puts a smile on my face every time I remember it.
Unfortunately, it has been a long time since the trout have lived in the stream.
My uncles once told me a story of how they caught the trout with their beare hands when they were children.
They said that fish used to be abundant here.
Probably fine as is, but I would prefer "that" here.
IThat could behave been 30–40 years ago.
The original was grammatical, but this makes more sense to me as the connection with the previous sentence is more obvious.
I suppose a lot has changed since then.
The stream was dredged multiple times when I was young, which could be one of the reasons for the missing fish.
There might be other reasons, such as water pollution, but that is just a guess.
It would be wonderful if they ever returned.
Aug. 17, 2020
I didn't know trout awere carnivorous at the time.
I actually thought about it while writing it, but I stick to "are" because that's a general truth about this species of trout.
Aug. 17, 2020
Thank you geartly for the correction!
As a side note, I had a concrete species of trout in mind while writing it. That's probably why I included "the" article.
Aug. 17, 2020
I actually thought about it while writing it, but I stick to "are" because that's a general truth about this species of trout.
Yeah, that's fine. Personally I tend to use the past tense, but in some cases, the present may work as well or possibly better. I'd probably wait and see what other corrections suggest.
Aug. 17, 2020
Thank you geartly for the correction! As a side note, I had a concrete species of trout in mind while writing it. That's probably why I included "the" article.
You're welcome! As to the definite article, I think it could go both ways, but on another look, I think having it might make more sense since you could arguably be referring to the specific population in the stream. I will edit my correction.
Aug. 17, 2020
I didn't know trout awere carnivorous at the time.
I think in this sentence the way it is, using the word “were” like that doesn’t make much sense. To me at least upon first glance it reads as if they once were carnivorous but now aren’t lol. Wording it like “At the time I didn’t know trout were carnivorous” would read a bit nicer.
Aug. 18, 2020
You're right, the placement is a bit ambiguous, and that word order is better.
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That is something that puts smile on my face every time I remember it. That is something that puts a smile on my face every time I remember it. That is something that puts a smile on my face every time I remember it.
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It could be 30–40 years ago.
The original was grammatical, but this makes more sense to me as the connection with the previous sentence is more obvious.
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