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hebereke

May 11, 2020

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When you visit somewhere, the place naturally takes over you, even if you hire a guide or have a guidebook with you. Even in the beginning of the trip, when you plan where to go, it is not you but the place that always decides how the trip goes, and you cannot ignore where the place tells you to go.


あなたがどこかの場所を訪問されるとすると、当然のことながら土地が主人公とする。ガイドに案内されようと、ガイドブックを持って歩こうと同じことなのだ。まず、どこへいこうかとプランを立てるそもそもの始まりから、場所が主導権を握り、あなたはその従順な奴隷となってしまう。

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When you visit somewhere, the place naturally takes over your mind, even if you hire a guide or have a guidebook with you.

Even in the beginning of the trip, when you plan where to go, it is not you but the place that always decides how the trip will goes, and you cannot ignore where the place tells you to go.

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The grammar is nearly perfect. I would however try to use more interesting verbs/vocabulary than just "to go". For example for movement: wander, travel, explore, walk, move.
And for something happening: occur, come to pass, take place, happen.

Your thinking is very true!

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When you visit somewhere, the place naturally takes over you, even if you hire a guide or have a guidebook with you.

I think this it the best way to say what you meant, 'takes over' means that the place takes control, decides what happens.

Even inat the beginning of the trip, when you plan where to go, it is not you but the place that always decides how the trip goes, and you cannot ignore where the place tells you to go.

sounds a little bit better without 'always' as you are talking generally (about trips in general) so the always is implied. It's a very small correction though.

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Very small corrections, only done to make it sound a bit more natural

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hebereke

May 31, 2020

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thank you!!

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When you visit somewhere, the place naturally takes over you, even if you hire a guide or have a guidebook with you.


When you visit somewhere, the place naturally takes over you, even if you hire a guide or have a guidebook with you.

I think this it the best way to say what you meant, 'takes over' means that the place takes control, decides what happens.

When you visit somewhere, the place naturally takes over your mind, even if you hire a guide or have a guidebook with you.

Even in the beginning of the trip, when you plan where to go, it is not you but the place that always decides how the trip goes, and you cannot ignore where the place tells you to go.


Even inat the beginning of the trip, when you plan where to go, it is not you but the place that always decides how the trip goes, and you cannot ignore where the place tells you to go.

sounds a little bit better without 'always' as you are talking generally (about trips in general) so the always is implied. It's a very small correction though.

Even in the beginning of the trip, when you plan where to go, it is not you but the place that always decides how the trip will goes, and you cannot ignore where the place tells you to go.

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