Jan. 24, 2021
Translation Practice
With her husband’s support, Meng Wanzhou, who was severely taught by Ren Zhengfei since her childhood, is more determined and comfortable.
In the face of the savage western journalist, she always keeps her nobility and calmly deals with every problem.
Her answer was decent and measured, and never left anything against Huawei.
Even when she comes out with electronic anklets, she always maintains confidence and pride.
In the face of countless malicious flashlights, she smiled with easy grace, without any traces of fear in her eyes.
Even if she was in danger, she didn’t forget to encourage her compatriots in the motherland.
She publicly stated that no matter what happened, she will positively respond, and will not bring shame to her motherland.
Although her personal freedom was restricted, Meng Wanzhou still cheered for herself and her family and friends in the circle of friends.
She once sent a photo of the ballet dancer’s feet, and behind the success of the dancers are numerous practices and hardships.
This photo shows Meng Wanzhou’s attitude that she is not afraid of suffering, which is the inevitable road to success.
This coincides with Ren Zhengfei’s educational ideal of “heroes who are trained from hardships”.
Now Meng Wanzhou has been illegally detained in Canada for two years, and many people are still worried about her safety.
However, Meng Wanzhou lived as usual, showing no panic or anxiety at all.
On her father Ren Zhengfei’s birthday, she also wrote a birthday greeting letter in Canada and sent it to her father.
In the letter, Meng Wanzhou apologized for not being able to celebrate her father’s birthday in person.
She said with deep affection: “Dad, your daughter can’t be with you this year, can’t taste your cooking, listen to your nagging, touch your winkles, kiss your smiling face, and accept your criticism. You owe all this first, and when I come back, you pay it back to me slowly.
Translation Practice
With her husband’s support, Meng Wanzhou, who was severely taught by Ren Zhengfei since her childhood, is more determined and comfortable.
Not sure what you want to convey by using the word 'severely' here, but it's not a natural expression to say someone was 'severely taught'. Maybe 'closely mentored' is what you are looking for.
Also, this sentence is an odd start and jumping from husband to teacher is a bit confusing, but I realise this may be a translation from a longer text.
In the face of the savage western journalist, she always keeps her nobility and calmly deals with every problem.
Her answer wass have been decent and measured, and never leftrevealed anything against Huawei.
Unless you are specific on which answer you are talking about, you need to use a continual past tense here. Basically you are writing too generally to talk about one specific past answer.
I am also not 100% sure what you mean by the second part.
Even when she comes out with electronic anklets, she always maintains confidence and pride.
In the face of countless malicious flashlights, she smiled with easy grace, without any traces of fear in her eyes.
Even ifwhen she was in danger, she didn’t forget to encourage her compatriots in the motherland.
Wouldn't quite use 'if' in this construction, it would be when.
If you would rather convey the possibility, aka uncertainty of danger, better to go with : 'Despite the possibility of being in (personal) danger, she never forgot to encourage her compatriots in the motherland.'
She publicly stated that no matter what happened, she will respond positively respond, and will not bring shame to her motherland.
Although her personal freedom was restricted, Meng Wanzhou still cheered for herself and, her family and friends in the her (circle of) friends.
'friends in the circle of friends' isn't correct, unless that is a specific term for something
She once sent a photo of thea ballet dancer’s feet, and; behind the success of these dancers are numerous practices and hardships.
This photo shows Meng Wanzhou’s attitude that she is not afraid of suffering, which is the inevitable road to success.
This coincides with Ren Zhengfei’s educational ideal of “heroes who are trained from hardships”.
Now Meng Wanzhou has been illegally detained in Canada for two years, and many people are still worried about her safety.
However, Meng Wanzhou livedhas continued on as usual, showing no panic or anxiety at all.
On her father Ren Zhengfei’s birthday, she also wrote a birthday greeting letter in Canada and sent it to her fatherhim a letter which she sent from Canada.
'Birthday greeting letter' wouldn't be a natural expression. Since you mentioned the father's birthday already, we can assume that the letter has a connection to his birthday and don't really need to repeat that here. Another option would be to say she sent him a birthday card.
This sentence was a bit repetative, which is why the complete rewrite.
In the letter, Meng Wanzhou apologized for not being able to celebrate her father’s birthday in person.
She said with deep affection: “Dad, your daughter can’t be with you this year, can’t taste your cooking, listen to your nagging, touch your wrinkles, kiss your smiling face, andor accept your criticism.
'She wrote with deep affection' would be technically more correct, but we do often use 'said' for writing as well, so it's not a real issue.
You owe all this to me first, and when I come back, you can pay it back to me slowly."
Feedback
Good, just some issues that I think may moreso come because this is a translation, as direct translations can often read a bit off and stilted. Personally I have used a two step process for translations in the past - 1) creating the translation, then leaving it alone for a while, 2) reread and edit the translation without looking back at the original.
Jan. 25, 2021
Thank you for your suggestions, I will try it.
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Translation Practice This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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With her husband’s support, Meng Wanzhou, who was severely taught by Ren Zhengfei since her childhood, is more determined and comfortable. With her husband’s support, Meng Wanzhou, who was Not sure what you want to convey by using the word 'severely' here, but it's not a natural expression to say someone was 'severely taught'. Maybe 'closely mentored' is what you are looking for. Also, this sentence is an odd start and jumping from husband to teacher is a bit confusing, but I realise this may be a translation from a longer text. |
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In the face of the savage western journalist, she always keeps her nobility and calmly deals with every problem. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Her answer was decent and measured, and never left anything against Huawei. Her answer Unless you are specific on which answer you are talking about, you need to use a continual past tense here. Basically you are writing too generally to talk about one specific past answer. I am also not 100% sure what you mean by the second part. |
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Even when she comes out with electronic anklets, she always maintains confidence and pride. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In the face of countless malicious flashlights, she smiled with easy grace, without any traces of fear in her eyes. In the face of countless malicious flashlights, she smiled with easy grace, without any trace |
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Even if she was in danger, she didn’t forget to encourage her compatriots in the motherland. Even Wouldn't quite use 'if' in this construction, it would be when. If you would rather convey the possibility, aka uncertainty of danger, better to go with : 'Despite the possibility of being in (personal) danger, she never forgot to encourage her compatriots in the motherland.' |
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She publicly stated that no matter what happened, she will positively respond, and will not bring shame to her motherland. She publicly stated that no matter what happened, she will respond positively |
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Although her personal freedom was restricted, Meng Wanzhou still cheered for herself and her family and friends in the circle of friends. Although her personal freedom was restricted, Meng Wanzhou still cheered for herself 'friends in the circle of friends' isn't correct, unless that is a specific term for something |
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She once sent a photo of the ballet dancer’s feet, and behind the success of the dancers are numerous practices and hardships. She once sent a photo of |
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This photo shows Meng Wanzhou’s attitude that she is not afraid of suffering, which is the inevitable road to success. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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This coincides with Ren Zhengfei’s educational ideal of “heroes who are trained from hardships”. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Now Meng Wanzhou has been illegally detained in Canada for two years, and many people are still worried about her safety. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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However, Meng Wanzhou lived as usual, showing no panic or anxiety at all. However, Meng Wanzhou |
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On her father Ren Zhengfei’s birthday, she also wrote a birthday greeting letter in Canada and sent it to her father. On her father Ren Zhengfei’s birthday, she also wrote 'Birthday greeting letter' wouldn't be a natural expression. Since you mentioned the father's birthday already, we can assume that the letter has a connection to his birthday and don't really need to repeat that here. Another option would be to say she sent him a birthday card. This sentence was a bit repetative, which is why the complete rewrite. |
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In the letter, Meng Wanzhou apologized for not being able to celebrate her father’s birthday in person. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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She said with deep affection: “Dad, your daughter can’t be with you this year, can’t taste your cooking, listen to your nagging, touch your winkles, kiss your smiling face, and accept your criticism. She said with deep affection: “Dad, your daughter can’t be with you this year, can’t taste your cooking, listen to your nagging, touch your wrinkles, kiss your smiling face, 'She wrote with deep affection' would be technically more correct, but we do often use 'said' for writing as well, so it's not a real issue. |
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You owe all this first, and when I come back, you pay it back to me slowly. You owe all this to me first, and when I come back, you can pay it back to me slowly." |
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