After reading the play, Zhao Benshan was worried about who was suitable for performing iters.

"worried about who was suitable for performing it" is okay, but wordy

He thought that it was obviously not suitable for Gao Xiumin, so finally, he had tohe eventually asked Song Dandan.

This kind of "finally" is typically found to express relief after a long wait or after a lot of effort (e.g. "wow, you finally made it!"): momentarily thinking about Gao Xiumin is not enough effort.

Zhao Benshan callasked Song Dandan but he didn't directly tell her that he wanted to perform on the Spring Festival English Show with her.

Consider replacing "he" and "her" with "Zhao" and "Song" appropriately; a typical English reader cannot tell who is who.

He just told her that there was a good script that was worth seeconsidering.

Or "...worth getting involved in." (If you "see" a script, it's like you look at it for a few seconds, and nothing else.)

After all, Song Dandan's partner was Huanghong at that time.

Wow! Too many people to keep track of. And "at that time" is clear from context.

Back then, Song Dandan faced a dilemma: it was also the time after Song Dandan's divorce with Yingda.

"Back then" is clear from context.

She had to raise her kids while working.

I have no idea who "she" refers to here.

The negative effects from her divorce with Yingda awere not smallsignificant and her career was also in a tepid state.

I'm not sure "tepid" is the right word here. Consider "precarious" instead.

In general, "A and B" doesn't imply a cause/effect relationship between A and B. E.g. in "dogs like bones and I like chocolate" the two claims are totally unrelated. If there is a connection between the two, it's best to identify the kind of relationship. E.g.

- "I live in China and I often eat fried rice" -> "I live in China *so* I often eat fried rice".
- "I lost my job and have financial problems" -> "I lost my job *which has led to* financial problems".
- "I don't eat bacon and I'm a vegetarian" -> "I don't eat bacon *because* I'm a vegetarian".

The above sentence suggests her divorce with Yingda is unrelated to her career problems.

Although every year she performed on the Spring Festival Evening Show with Huanghong, it didwasn't have an ideal effectideal.

I don't understand "it didn't have an ideal effect" in this context. Are you talking about how the audience perceived the show? If so "effect" isn't an appropriate word.

She also needed to make some changes.

After seeing the script, Song Danda was tempted to [???].

The sentence is incomplete. You can say "Song Danda was tempted" by itself, but the context would need to make it clear what the temptation is.

"You should quit your job." "Oh, I'm tempted." (Here, it's clear the temptation is quitting a job.)

The script was so nicewell-written, and it would be a pity if they missed the chance to [???].

"nice" is imprecise. The sentence is incomplete, for the same reason as the last sentence. Maybe it should be "...they missed the chance to audition" or "...they missed the chance to perform".

"I thought they would like to ride on the steam train, but they missed the chance." Here what "the chance" refers to is clear from the context.

After weighing the pros and cons, Song Danda agreed to go ton the Spring Festival Evening Show with Zhao Benshan to perform Yesterday, Today and Tomorrow.. Nice With a well-written script addednd an excellent performer, it's difficult to perform badly would be a sure hit.

The word "perform" has two meanings which are conflated here ("to perform an act" and in the sense of "performance").

Their coopellaboration of the two was reallywas a hit and the program successfully won thewon first prize of(top language program that year, which also started); it was the prelude tof the two people's cooperation for many yearsir long-term collaboration.

"successfully won" seems like an tautology... can you "unsuccessfully win" something?

In 2006, during the performance of Xiao Cui Said tThings, Zhao Benshan made a serious mistake.

I'm going to assume "Xiao Cui Said Things" is the name of a performance (a proper noun).

He forgot his bag when he went up theon stage.

Fortunately, Song Dandan carefully found the mistakespotted the slip-up at the beginning when Zhao Benshan startedwas about to go up the stage.

"mistake" is a bit too strong for my taste

Song Dandan hurriedly winked at Zhao Benshan, because the props to be used in the sketch were in the bag, which was a book written by Song Dandan called YueZi.

"hurriedly winked" doesn't make much sense to me.

Song Dandan quickly helped Zhao Benshan to block the camera, and Zhao Benshan took the bag at the moment whens the camera switched, so as to avoid causing any major mistakebloopers.

It's sad that aAfter the performance, Zhao Benshan and Song Dandan wept bitterly in the backstage of the Spring Festival Evening Show, which shows that it's not easy to perform aton the Spring Festival Evening Show.

"sad" feels out of place here; why is this sad?

Recently, Pan Changjiang announced his return to the Spring Festival Evening Show, andone of many old faces willto return to this year's Spring Festival Evening Sshow.

Zhao Benshan and Song Dandan, the gold partners, don't know if they can return to the stage ofor the Spring Festival Evening Show.

If they can join hands againreunite, I believe they will bring us more laughter.

"join hands again" implies literal holding hands.