Dec. 30, 2020
Translation practice.
If there are kids in a family, they must decorate festive fir trees together and then go out playing: kids go downhill with children’s sled and build snowmen, throw snowballs. In the night, they play games, sing, dance, and also dance our traditional circle dance music.
Children also like “ice and snow old man” and “snow girl". They are two roles in Russian folklore, and now, they are the symbol of the new year. Every year, the artists dressed as the two roles play with kids, sing, and then give small gifts (dessert or toys). They are all very happy.
When night arrives, everyone starts to set off fireworks. It is really beautiful and it is the new year’s activity I like the most. No matter if restaurants, clubs, or other interesting places are all closed, I don’t know if this new year can be celebrated as exciting as former years.
If there are kids in athe family, they must decorate festive fir trees together first and then go out playing: kids go downhill with children’s sled andand play. They sled downhill, build snowmen, and throw snowballs.
In theAt night, they play games, sing, dance, and also danceincluding our traditional circle dance music.
Children also like to pretend they are “ice and snow old man” and “snow girl".
If you begin your story with using "kids", then it is not necessary to switch back and forth.
They arse two roles incharacters are from Russian folklore, and now, they arhave become the symbol of the new year.
Every year, the artists, who dressed as these two roles play with kidscharacters, would play, sing, and then give small gifts (desserts or toys) to the kids.
They are all very happy.
Who are happy? the kids or the artists? When you have two different nouns in a previous sentence, then it is necessary for you to identify which one you're talking about in the following sentence; otherwise, the pronoun is confusing.
When night arrivtime comes, everyone starts to set off fireworks.
It isThe fireworks are really beautiful and it isI like these new year’s activity I likeies the most.
Again, you had two nouns in the previous sentence, night and fireworks. So when you begin the above sentence, the "it" could refer to either or both. You should be specific which of these two is beautiful. My correction will assume you are talking about the fireworks.
No matter ifSince the restaurants, clubs, or other interesting places are all closed, I don’t know'm not sure if this new year can be celebrated as exciting as formerprevious years.
I switched "former" to "previous" as previous sounds more natural. Former is used frequently to describe a person or a relationship, such as my former boss, my former colleague, my former girlfriend, the former tenant, the former owner, etc. Using former to describe past years sounds a bit odd.
Dec. 31, 2020
Thank you very much. Corrected passage flows better.
Translation practice.
If there are kids in a family, they mufirst decorate festive fir trees together and then go out playing: kids gothey sled downhill withon a children’s sled and, build snowmen, and throw snowballs.
"must" makes it sound like an order/command, but the context makes it sound like it's an enjoyable activity.
In the night, they play games, sing, dance, and also dance our traditional circle dance music.
This is correct, but sounds weird because "dance" occurs twice.
Children also like “iIce and sSnow oOld mMan” and “sSnow gGirl".
These appear to be proper nouns => capitalization needed.
They are two roles in Russian folklore, and now, they are the symbol of the new year.
Every year, the artists dressed as these two roles play with kids, sing, and then give small gifts (dessert or toys).
It's correct with "then", but it sounds too sequential.
They are all very happy.
This is correct, but you'll only find language like this in children's books.
When night arrives, everyone starts to set off fireworks.
It is really beautiful and it is the nNew yYear’s activity I like the most.
No matter ifGiven that restaurants, clubs, orand other interesting places are all closed, I don’t know if this nNew yYear can be celebrated as exciting as former years.
"No matter" is not the correct choice here.
"...can be as exciting as former years" or "...can be celebrated like former years." In any case "celebrated as exciting" needs tweaking.
Dec. 30, 2020
Thank you very much.
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It is really beautiful and it is the new year’s activity I like the most. It is really beautiful and it is the
Again, you had two nouns in the previous sentence, night and fireworks. So when you begin the above sentence, the "it" could refer to either or both. You should be specific which of these two is beautiful. My correction will assume you are talking about the fireworks. |
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Translation practice. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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If there are kids in a family, they must decorate festive fir trees together and then go out playing: kids go downhill with children’s sled and build snowmen, throw snowballs. If there are kids in a family, they "must" makes it sound like an order/command, but the context makes it sound like it's an enjoyable activity. If there are kids in |
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In the night, they play games, sing, dance, and also dance our traditional circle dance music. In the night, they play games, sing, dance, and also dance our traditional circle dance music. This is correct, but sounds weird because "dance" occurs twice.
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Children also like “ice and snow old man” and “snow girl". Children also like “ These appear to be proper nouns => capitalization needed. Children also like to pretend they are “ice and snow old man” and “snow girl". If you begin your story with using "kids", then it is not necessary to switch back and forth. |
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They are two roles in Russian folklore, and now, they are the symbol of the new year. This sentence has been marked as perfect! The |
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Every year, the artists dressed as the two roles play with kids, sing, and then give small gifts (dessert or toys). Every year, It's correct with "then", but it sounds too sequential. Every year, |
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They are all very happy. They are all very happy. This is correct, but you'll only find language like this in children's books. They are all very happy. Who are happy? the kids or the artists? When you have two different nouns in a previous sentence, then it is necessary for you to identify which one you're talking about in the following sentence; otherwise, the pronoun is confusing. |
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When night arrives, everyone starts to set off fireworks. This sentence has been marked as perfect! When night |
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No matter if restaurants, clubs, or other interesting places are all closed, I don’t know if this new year can be celebrated as exciting as former years.
"No matter" is not the correct choice here. "...can be as exciting as former years" or "...can be celebrated like former years." In any case "celebrated as exciting" needs tweaking.
I switched "former" to "previous" as previous sounds more natural. Former is used frequently to describe a person or a relationship, such as my former boss, my former colleague, my former girlfriend, the former tenant, the former owner, etc. Using former to describe past years sounds a bit odd. |
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