Dec. 25, 2020
Translation
I am new here and let me introduce myself. I have lived in China for six years and I have got a green card from China, and I have settled down here. In order to find a new job, I moved to Beijing last year, but I was not successful at that time. On the contrary, I tried my best to learn Chinese. I even found a tutor to help me and courage me. Although I stayed in China for a long time, I haven’t mastered high level Chinese because I was busy making a living, so I lost many good opportunities. This makes me so disappointed. I started seriously learning last year, but at the beginning of this year, the city was locked down because of the COVID-19. People were required to go out less and interact less, so I thought: forgot it. I just paid attention to focusing on learning Chinese at home. What about now? Although Beijing was unlocked in April this year and we can go out at any time, I still study hard. Besides, what can I do when I go out? I still haven’t got a job and I have just been studying. Apart from loneliness, this year is the most enjoyable time in my life.
Translation
I am new here and, so let me introduce myself.
It flows better with "so".
I have lived in China for six years and I have got a green card from China, have a Chinese green card, and I have settled down here.
In "A, B, and C", we don't need another "and". It's better to say "Chinese green card" (instead of "a green card from China") since it's more succinct, and technically "a green card from China" only refers to a green card that came from Chinese.
In order to find a new job, I moved to Beijing last year, but I was not successful at that time.
On the contraryInstead, I tried my best to learn Chinese.
"On the contrary, ..." is better used when we're about to contradict the previous statement.
I even found a tutor to help me and encourage me.
"help **me** and encourage me" = "help and encourage me"
Although I have stayed in China for a long time, I haven’t masteredreached a high level of Chinese because I was busy making a living, so I lost many good opportunities.
This makes me sode me disappointed.
There shouldn't be a new sentence here... it should continue: "...I lost many good opportunities, which made me disappointed".
I started seriousactively learning Chinese last year, but at the beginning of this year, the city was locked down because of the COVID-19.
Although it's not incorrect, "seriously" is not the best choice of word. Also "learning" by itself is unclear.
People were required to go out less and interact less, so I thought: forgot it.
I just paid attention to focusing on learning Chinese at home.
What about now?
Although Beijing was unlockreopened in April this year and we can go out at any time, I still study hard.
Besides, what can I do when I go out?
I still haven’t got a job and I have just been studying.
Apart from the loneliness, this year ishas been the most enjoyable time in my life.
Don't ask me why... but "is" is not correct here.
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Dec. 25, 2020
Thank you very much.
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I am new here and let me introduce myself. I am new here It flows better with "so". |
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I have lived in China for six years and I have got a green card from China, and I have settled down here. I have lived in China for six years In "A, B, and C", we don't need another "and". It's better to say "Chinese green card" (instead of "a green card from China") since it's more succinct, and technically "a green card from China" only refers to a green card that came from Chinese. |
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In order to find a new job, I moved to Beijing last year, but I was not successful at that time. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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On the contrary, I tried my best to learn Chinese.
"On the contrary, ..." is better used when we're about to contradict the previous statement. |
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I even found a tutor to help me and courage me. I even found a tutor to help "help **me** and encourage me" = "help and encourage me" |
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Although I stayed in China for a long time, I haven’t mastered high level Chinese because I was busy making a living, so I lost many good opportunities. Although I have stayed in China for a long time, I haven’t |
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This makes me so disappointed. This ma There shouldn't be a new sentence here... it should continue: "...I lost many good opportunities, which made me disappointed". |
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I started seriously learning last year, but at the beginning of this year, the city was locked down because of the COVID-19. I started Although it's not incorrect, "seriously" is not the best choice of word. Also "learning" by itself is unclear. |
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People were required to go out less and interact less, so I thought: forgot it. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I just paid attention to focusing on learning Chinese at home. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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What about now? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Although Beijing was unlocked in April this year and we can go out at any time, I still study hard. Although Beijing was |
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Besides, what can I do when I go out? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I still haven’t got a job and I have just been studying. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Apart from loneliness, this year is the most enjoyable time in my life. Apart from the loneliness, this year Don't ask me why... but "is" is not correct here. |
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