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milkyway

Sept. 2, 2022

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Train Ticket

There is a train ticket called " Seishun 18 kippu".
This is a ticket for free-to-ride on JR regular trains, and one ticket can be used for five days.
I bought this ticket this summer.
I have two more days left, so I'd like to go to Hamamatsu tomorrow.
I'm looking forward to it.


Here's the sample picture of the ticket
https://contents.trafficnews.jp/icatch/000/007/095/large_180223_18kippu_01.jpg


”青春18きっぷ”という電車のきっぷがあります。
これはJRの普通列車乗り放題のきっぷで、1枚で5日分使うことができます。
この夏、このきっぷを買いました。
あと2日分残っているので、明日は浜松方面に行ってみたいと思います。
楽しみです。

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This is a ticket forcan be used for five days as a free-to-ride on JRpass on regular JR trains, and one ticket can be used for five days.

Your sentence structure is grammatically correct but doesn't feel very natural :)

I have two more days left, so I'd like to go decided to go to Hamamatsu tomorrow.¶
OR I have two more days left, so I'm going
to Hamamatsu tomorrow.

"I'd like" is used to describe hypothetical situations or to make a polite request. Here, because you say "I'm looking forward to it", it seems that it will definitely happen so you need a future meaning "I'm going" OR a decisive verb like "to decide" in the past to confirm that you are going.

I'm looking forward to it.

Here's the sample picture of the ticket

https://contents.trafficnews.jp/icatch/000/007/095/large_180223_18kippu_01.jpg

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Great job!

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milkyway

Sept. 7, 2022

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Thank you for your corrections. They are very useful.

Train Ticket

There is a train ticket called " Seishun 18 kippu"."

This is a ticket for free-to-rideallows unlimited travel on JR regular JR trains, and one ticket can be used for five days.

I bought this ticketone this summer.

I have two more days left, so I'd like to go to Hamamatsu tomorrow.

I'm looking forward to it.

Here's thea sample picture of the ticket.

https://contents.trafficnews.jp/icatch/000/007/095/large_180223_18kippu_01.jpg

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いいですね!楽しんで下さい。上手に書けています!

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milkyway

Sept. 5, 2022

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Thank you for your corrections.

There is a type of train ticket called " Seishun 18 kKippu".

Just being more specific, and capitalising the whole name of the ticket

This is a ticket for free-to-allows for unlimited rides on JR regular trains, and one ticket can be used for five days.

I think "unlimited rides" is the best expression here

I bought thise ticket this summer.

I have two more days left, so I'd like to go to Hamamatsu tomorrow.

I'm looking forward to it.

Here's the sample picture of the ticket

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Great job overall, very clear and concise! I also got to learn about something useful for travelling around Japan. :)

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milkyway

Sept. 5, 2022

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Thank you for your corrections and comments.

Train Ticket


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There is a train ticket called " Seishun 18 kippu".


There is a type of train ticket called " Seishun 18 kKippu".

Just being more specific, and capitalising the whole name of the ticket

There is a train ticket called " Seishun 18 kippu"."

This is a ticket for free-to-ride on JR regular trains, and one ticket can be used for five days.


This is a ticket for free-to-allows for unlimited rides on JR regular trains, and one ticket can be used for five days.

I think "unlimited rides" is the best expression here

This is a ticket for free-to-rideallows unlimited travel on JR regular JR trains, and one ticket can be used for five days.

This is a ticket forcan be used for five days as a free-to-ride on JRpass on regular JR trains, and one ticket can be used for five days.

Your sentence structure is grammatically correct but doesn't feel very natural :)

I bought this ticket this summer.


I bought thise ticket this summer.

I bought this ticketone this summer.

I have two more days left, so I'd like to go to Hamamatsu tomorrow.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I have two more days left, so I'd like to go decided to go to Hamamatsu tomorrow.¶
OR I have two more days left, so I'm going
to Hamamatsu tomorrow.

"I'd like" is used to describe hypothetical situations or to make a polite request. Here, because you say "I'm looking forward to it", it seems that it will definitely happen so you need a future meaning "I'm going" OR a decisive verb like "to decide" in the past to confirm that you are going.

I'm looking forward to it.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Here's the sample picture of the ticket


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Here's thea sample picture of the ticket.

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https://contents.trafficnews.jp/icatch/000/007/095/large_180223_18kippu_01.jpg


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