Jan. 26, 2021
Tourism or well-being?
Most of us have traveled at least somewhere. It could be either in your own country or further away to the other side of the globe. And this is the trend that will take over. More and more travelers go wandering around the world every year.
We can’t deny it wouldn’t be a great thing, as it is. It can even be vital for some countries as a source of income. Those countries could have their whole economy relying on travelers. What we often miss, are the downsides caused by it. These could be “small” things like trashing, forgetting animal rights, or at worst, destroying local culture and traditions. Most of the time this correlates between the number of tourists and the harmful effects, but we can’t take that for granted.
Many luckily have already started to fight against this. One good example of this found almost anywhere is certificates. They could signify almost anything from locality to saving the environment by more carbon-neutral solutions or less plastic used in the products. We can also be happy that tourists seem to be more and more aware of the certificates, and appreciate them more than the possible rivals without them.
In the end, what matters is how we choose to live our lives. No one can be perfect in everything, but each one of us can make a good try to make our world available for tourism without too many negative impacts. Perhaps our new slogan should be “Sustainable tourism for the win!”
(this is one of my English essays for school, but our teacher didn't correct it at any point so I would like it to be checked :))
Tourism or well-being?
Most of us have traveled at least somewhere.
It could be either in your own country or further away to the other side of the globe.
And this is the trend that will take overThis trend will only grow more and more.
It sounds a little strange that something "will take over."
More and more travelers go wandering around the world every year.
We can’t deny it wouldn’t be a great thing, as it isClearly, this is a good thing.
It can even be vital for some countries as a source of income.
Those cCountries could have their whole economy relying on travelers.
What we often miss, are the downsides caused by it.
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These could be “small” things like increased trashing, forgetting animal rights, or at, worste, destroying local culture and traditions.
Most of the time this correlates between the number of tourists and the harmful effects, butharmful effects are related to the number of tourists so we can’t take that for granted.
Many luckilyLuckily, many people have already started to fight against this.
One good example of this, which can be found almost anywhere, is certificates.
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In the end, what matters is how we choose to live our lives.
No one can be perfect in everything, but eachvery one of us can make a good try toattempt at makeing our world available for tourism without too many negative impacts.
Perhaps our new slogan should be “Sustainable tourism for the win!”
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Goo job!
Jan. 26, 2021
Thank you! I'm just wondering did you do the corrections with a really rough hand, or did I just seriously perform way under my usual standards. I've usually gotten 90+/100p from my essays. This would barely be 60p :D.
Jan. 26, 2021
I'm not an English teacher. I'm just trying to help people. I'm sorry to hear that you think my corrections were made with a "really rough hand" or that you underperformed. That was not my intent.
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And this is the trend that will take over.
It sounds a little strange that something "will take over." |
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Tourism or well-being? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Most of us have traveled at least somewhere. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It could be either in your own country or further away to the other side of the globe. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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More and more travelers go wandering around the world every year. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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We can’t deny it wouldn’t be a great thing, as it is.
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It can even be vital for some countries as a source of income. It can |
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Those countries could have their whole economy relying on travelers.
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What we often miss, are the downsides caused by it. What we often miss "What we often miss" is the subject of the sentence so a comma isn't necessary. |
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These could be “small” things like trashing, forgetting animal rights, or at worst, destroying local culture and traditions. These could be “small” things like increased trash |
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Most of the time this correlates between the number of tourists and the harmful effects, but we can’t take that for granted. Most of the time |
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Many luckily have already started to fight against this.
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One good example of this found almost anywhere is certificates. One good example of this, which can be found almost anywhere, is certificates. or One good example of this is certificates. These can be found anywhere. |
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They could signify almost anything from locality to saving the environment by more carbon-neutral solutions or less plastic used in the products. They could signify almost anything from locality to saving the environment by highlighting more carbon-neutral solutions or less plastic used in the products. |
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We can also be happy that tourists seem to be more and more aware of the certificates, and appreciate them more than the possible rivals without them. We can also be happy that tourists |
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In the end, what matters is how we choose to live our lives. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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No one can be perfect in everything, but each one of us can make a good try to make our world available for tourism without too many negative impacts. No one can be perfect in everything |
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Perhaps our new slogan should be “Sustainable tourism for the win!” This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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(this is one of my English essays for school, but our teacher didn't correct it at any point so I would like it to be checked :)) ( |
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