July 4, 2021
Tonight
Tonight, I also go to the top floor. I watered my plants first. It is sunny and hot today. To my surprise, the vine grows taller, once I thougt that it would be died.
It is still hot. The breeze shows up from time to time. It is hotter than last night, but it is still a wonderful night.
The middle school are having a before-axam meeting. The students are so noisy that the speaker has to asked them to be quiet again amd again. It is so funny. There will be the final exam tomorrow, but the students seem like don't care it at all. Yep, their scores are vrey poor. They never concern about studying.
To my surprise, I don't feel disturbed. It just like: there are walls around me and separate me from them. Wow, it is so amazing. Because I am used disturbing easily before. Maybe I become more peaceful than before. I like that.
The sky is full of stars as well. And the breeze keep blowing. I'm sitting under the stars ,wtiting the journal. I like it too.
I like the summer night like this. I like myself like this.
Especially, I want to thank for the friend who correct my last joirnal. Your correction and comment make me very happy. Thank you very much.
Tonight
Tonight, I also gowent to the top floor.
I can't really tell what you're trying to say here. In my eyes, your sentence is trying to tell me that you're going to the top floor after someone. In which case you can say, "I also went to the top floor". But you need some context in order for that sentence to work. It also doesn't really make sense to use that sentence in my opinion, so my recommendation is to just use the correction I gave you.
I watered my plants first.
It i's sunny and hot today.
To my surprise, the vine growsew taller, once I thought that it would be died.
It i's still hot.
The breeze shows up from time to time.
It i's hotter than last night, but it i's still a wonderful night.
The middle school areis having a before-axam meetingmeeting before the exam.
I'm pretty sure before-exam isn't a hyphenated word.
The students awere so noisy that the speaker hasd to asked them to be quiet again amnd again.
It i's so funny.
There will be the final exam will be tomorrow, but the students don't seem like don'tthey care it at all.
Yep, their scores are vrey poorery bad.
I wouldn't use the word poor in this context, I would use the word bad instead. (This is just my opinion)
They're never concerned about studying.
It's just like:, there are walls around me andthat separate me from them.
This doesn't exactly make sense in my opinion.
Wow, it i's so amazing.
Because I a'm used to being disturbinged easily before.
Maybe I've become more peaceful than before.
I like that.
The sky is full of stars as well.
And the breeze keeps blowing.
I'm sitting under the stars ,wt, writing theis journal.
Especially, I want to thank for themy friend who correct my last joiurnal.
Especially isn't necessary.
Your correction and comment makde me very happy.
Thank you very much.
Feedback
Overall, the journal is decent. Some stuff don't make sense such as transitioning from tonight to a sunny day, and the I like it parts don't make much sense either. But overall, it's good. (A lot of the edits are my opinions and some might be wrong so don't rely on my editing)
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Tonight, I also go to the top floor. Tonight, I I can't really tell what you're trying to say here. In my eyes, your sentence is trying to tell me that you're going to the top floor after someone. In which case you can say, "I also went to the top floor". But you need some context in order for that sentence to work. It also doesn't really make sense to use that sentence in my opinion, so my recommendation is to just use the correction I gave you. |
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I watered my plants first. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It is sunny and hot today. It |
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To my surprise, the vine grows taller, once I thougt that it would be died. To my surprise, the vine gr |
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It is still hot. It |
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The breeze shows up from time to time. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It is hotter than last night, but it is still a wonderful night. It |
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The middle school are having a before-axam meeting. The middle school I'm pretty sure before-exam isn't a hyphenated word. |
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The students are so noisy that the speaker has to asked them to be quiet again amd again. The students |
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It is so funny. It |
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There will be the final exam tomorrow, but the students seem like don't care it at all. The |
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Yep, their scores are vrey poor. Yep, their scores are v I wouldn't use the word poor in this context, I would use the word bad instead. (This is just my opinion) |
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They never concern about studying. They're never concerned about studying. |
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To my surprise, I don't feel disturbed. |
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It just like: there are walls around me and separate me from them. It's just like This doesn't exactly make sense in my opinion. |
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Wow, it is so amazing. Wow, it |
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Because I am used disturbing easily before. Because I |
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Maybe I become more peaceful than before. Maybe I've become more peaceful than before. |
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I like that. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The sky is full of stars as well. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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And the breeze keep blowing. And the breeze keeps blowing. |
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I'm sitting under the stars ,wtiting the journey. |
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I like it too. |
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I like the summer night like this. |
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I like myself like this. |
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Especially, I want to thank for the friend who correct my last joirney. |
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Your correction and comment make me very happy. Your correction and comment ma |
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Thank you very much. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I'm sitting under the stars ,wtiting the journal. I'm |
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Especially, I want to thank for the friend who correct my last joirnal.
Especially isn't necessary. |
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