Dec. 10, 2022
TOEFL Writing| Honorable Person in Your Country
Topic:
Your city has decided to build a statue or monument to honor a famous person in your country. Whom would you choose? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice.
My essay:
In my opinion, if my city planned to build a statue to honor a famous person, I would vote to the prestigious philosopher and educationist Confucius. The reasons for the decision are as follows.
First of all, I choose to honor Confucius because of the enduring relevance of his theory, Confucianism. Confucianism, found by Confucius about 2500 years ago, mainly talk about virtues, morality and social harmony. His theory, which is beneficial for both the Emperor and the country, had become the principle to manage the country since Han Dynasty. Moreover, his philosophy of "ren", means kindness, plays a significant role in self-developing and communication even in today's Chinese lives.
Second reason why I am eager to honor Confucius is his commitment to education. As a successful educationist, Confucius cultivated seventy-two students, most of whom also became well-known philosophers or politician. In addition, his emphasis on education and unconventional ideas about education methods became the cornerstone of Chinese education. For instance, his quote "Teach students in accordance of their aptitude" that focus on students' profiles, helps develop students' potential. This idea, with his thorough theory, had constant influence on following education thinking.
Finally, I want my city to choose Confucius to honor because of global impact of his theory. Confucius' teachings have been studied and admired not only in China, but also in other parts of Asia, such as Korea, Japan and Vietnam. His thinking of personal integrity and social responsibility has resonated with people around the world, and his ideas have been embraced by many non-Chinese philosophers and thinkers.
In conclusion, I am glad to choose Confucius as the one to be memorized. Considering his influent philosophy, pioneering education thinking and the global influence, it's our duty to honor him by making a statue or monument.
I only introduce a famous person in my essay. Should I explain the relation between him and my city since the prompt mentioned the city. What's your opinion about the question?
TOEFL Writing| An Honorable Person in Your Country
Topic:
Your city has decided to build a statue or monument to honor a famous person in your country.
Whom would you choose?
Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice.
My essay:
In my opinion, if my city planned to build a statue to honor a famous person, I would vote tofor the prestigious philosopher and educationistor Confucius.
The reasons for the decision are as follows.
First of all, I choose to honor Confucius because of the enduring relevance of his theorphilosophy, Confucianism.
Confucianism, found by Confucius about 2500 years ago, mainly talks about virtues, morality and social harmony.
His theorphilosophy, which is beneficial for both the Emperor and the country, hads become the principle on which to manage the country since the Han Dynasty.
Moreover, his philosophy of "ren", means kindness, and plays a significant role in self-developingment and communication even in today's Chinese lives.
SThe second reason why I am eager to honor Confucius is for his commitment to education.
As a successful educationistor, Confucius cultivatedtaught seventy-two students, most of whom also became well-known philosophers or politicians.
In addition, his emphasis on education and unconventional ideas about educational methods have becaome the cornerstone of Chinese education.
For instance, his quote, "Teach students in accordance of their aptitude," that focuses on students' profiles, and helps develop students' potential.
This idea, with his thorough theory,detailed philosophy, has had constant influence on following educational thinking.
Finally, I want my city to choose Confucius to honor because of the global impact of his theorphilosophy.
Confucius' teachings have been studied and admired not only in China, but also in other parts of Asia, such as Korea, Japan and Vietnam.
His thinking of personal integrity and social responsibility has resonated with people around the world, and his ideas have been embraced by many non-Chinese philosophers and thinkers.
In conclusion, I am glad to choose Confucius as the one to be memorialized.
Considering his influential philosophy, pioneering educational thinking and theits global influence, it's our duty to honor him by making a statue or monument.
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Good work. I don't think you need to describe the relationship between Confucius and your city because, as you said, his influence was worldwide. It wouldn't hurt, however, to mention, say, if he was born in your city or went to school in your city. It would emphasize why you want to honor him.
Dec. 11, 2022
Thank you for the suggestion!
In my opinion, if my city planned to build a statue to honor a famous person, I would vote tofor the prestigious philosopher and educationistor Confucius.
The reasons for themy decision are as follows.
First of all, I choose to honor Confucius because of the enduring relevance of his theorphilosophy, Confucianism.
"theory" refers to something, usually related to science, that hasn't been proven yet. Philosophy or teachings would be a better fit here.
Confucianism, founded by Confucius about 2500 years ago, mainly talks about virtues, morality and social harmony.
His theorphilosophy, which is beneficial for both the Eemperor and the country, had become the principle to manage the country since the Han Dynasty.
Since the emperor's name isn't mentioned, it should be used as a common noun.
Moreover, his philosophy of "ren", meansing kindness, plays a significant role in self-developingment and communication even in today'she lives of the Chinese livestoday.
SecondAnother reason why I am eager to honor Confucius is his commitment to education.
You could also say "a second reason", but "another" sounds more natural.
As a successful educationistor, Confucius cultivated seventy-two students, most of whom also became well-known philosophers or politicians.
In addition to this, his emphasis on education and unconventional ideas about educational methods became the cornerstone of Chinese education.
For instance, his quote "Teach students in accordance of their aptitude" that focuses on students' profiles, helps develop students' potential.
This idea, with his thorough theorphilosophy, had a constant influence on following educational thinking.
FinalLastly, I want my city to choosenor Confucius to honor because of the global impact of his theorphilosophy.
"to choose to honor" is grammatically correct, but it sounds repetitive. Simply "to honor" would be a better fit here.
Confucius' teachings have been studied and admired not only in China, but also in other parts of Asia, such as Korea, Japan and Vietnam.
His thinking of personal integrity and social responsibility has resonated with people around the world, and his ideas have been embraced by many non-Chinese philosophers and thinkers.
In conclusion, I am glad to choose Confucius as the one to be memorizhonored.
Considering his influential philosophy, pioneering educational thinking, and thehis global influence, it's our duty to honor him by makbuilding a statue or monument for him.
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Although there were several grammar mistakes, I like the meaning of your write-up! I agree. Confucius should be honored more, especially because of his influence on our society today.
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For instance, his quote "Teach students in accordance of their aptitude" that focus on students' profiles, helps develop students' potential. For instance, his quote "Teach students in accordance of their aptitude" that focuses on students' profiles For instance, his quote, "Teach students in accordance of their aptitude," |
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This idea, with his thorough theory, had constant influence on following education thinking. This idea, with his thorough This idea, with his |
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Finally, I want my city to choose Confucius to honor because of global impact of his theory.
"to choose to honor" is grammatically correct, but it sounds repetitive. Simply "to honor" would be a better fit here. Finally, I want my city to choose Confucius to honor because of the global impact of his |
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His theory, which is beneficial for both the Emperor and the country, had become the principle to manage the country since Han Dynasty. His Since the emperor's name isn't mentioned, it should be used as a common noun. His |
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Second reason why I am eager to honor Confucius is his commitment to education.
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As a successful educationist, Confucius cultivated seventy-two students, most of whom also became well-known philosophers or politician. As a successful educat As a successful educat |
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In addition, his emphasis on education and unconventional ideas about education methods became the cornerstone of Chinese education. In addition to this, his emphasis on education and unconventional ideas about educational methods became the cornerstone of Chinese education. In addition, his emphasis on education and unconventional ideas about educational methods have bec |
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