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Dec. 8, 2022

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TOEFL Writing| Computers make life easier

Topic:
Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.


My essay:
While some say that computers bring stress and troubles to daily lives, I counter that computers have made our lives easier and more convenient for three reasons, which I'll explore in the following essay.

First of all, computers have made learning and studying more easily. With computers, it's direct to skim and find useful passage and learn new knowledge. Imaging that if there are no computers, one who wants to get some information has to go to a library and search through thousands of books.

Second, computers have helped us communicate with each other. As our devices are connected to the Internet, it's easy for we to chat and talk with each other in any time, at anywhere. Moreover, the computers provide us a screen to see each other lively, which is a more efficient way to interact. Without computers, we can only communicate by telephones or even letters. My experience is a good example to illustrate this. Since I went to a college far from my hometown, it had been difficult for me to chat with families face to face. Thanks to the computer and the chat apps, I'm able to talk with my parents everyday by several simple clicks.

Last but not the least, computers and the Internet has become more and more important since the COVID-19 spread over the world. The pandemic has changed our lives in all aspects, from education to entertainment. For instance, our college stopped in-class teaching and forbade students entering the campus because of numerous positive cases last year. To continue teaching, our college decided to switch to online courses, providing a convenient way for both students and teachers in the specific time. It's impossible to do such a change without the help of computers.

In conclusion, computers have played a significant role in assisting people working in different fields. As the repercussion of COVID-19 still exists, computers will become more and more necessary in our lives.


It my practice for TOEFL writing and some examples are fictional. You may disagree with my opinions, but I will appreciate it if you could spend time reading and correcting.

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TOEFL Writing| Computers mMake lLife eEasier

Topic:

Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient.

Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful.

What is your opinion?

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

My essay:

While some say that computers bring stress and troubles toheartache to our daily lives, I counter that computers have made our lives easier and more convenient for three reasons, which I'll explore in the following essay.

First of all, computers have made learning and studying more reasdily.

or

First of all, computers have made learning and studying easier.

With computers, it's directeasy to skim and find useful passage and learns to acquire new knowledge.

Imaginge that if there are no computers, one who wants to get some information haswould have to go to a library and search through thousands of books.

Second, computers have helped us communicate with each other.

As our devices are connected to the Internet, it's easy for weus to chat and talk with each other in any time, at anywhere.

Moreover, the computers provide us a screen to see each other lively, which is a more efficient way to interact.

Without computers, we canwould only be able to communicate byvia telephones or even letters.

This is subjunctive case as you're imagining an alternate reality.

My experience is a good example to illustrate this.

Since I went to aattend college far from my hometown, it hads been difficult for me to chat with my familiesy face to face.

Thanks to the computer and the chat apps, I'm able to talk with my parents every day by using several simple clicks.

Last but not the least, computers and the Internet hasve become more and more important since the COVID-19 spread overaround the world.

The pandemic has changed our lives in all aspects, from education to entertainment.

For instance, our college stopped in-class teaching and forbade students from entering the campus because of numerous positive cases last year.

To continue teaching, our college decided to switch to online courses, providing a convenient way for both students and teachers in theto meet at a specific time.

It's impossible to do such a change without the help of computers.

In conclusion, computers have played a significant role in assisting people working in different fields.

As the repercussions of COVID-19 still existcontinues, computers will become more and more necessary in our lives.

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Well written.

vector341's avatar
vector341

Dec. 10, 2022

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Thank you for correcting! By the name, I have seen your name everywhere, a selfish less contributor in the community.

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mari

Dec. 10, 2022

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Thank you for correcting! By the name, I have seen your name everywhere, a selfish less contributor in the community.

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First of all, computers have made learning and studying more easily.

Imaginge that if there are no computers, a persone who wants to get some information has to go to a library and search through thousands of books.

Second, computers have helped us communicate with each other.

As our devices are connected to the Internet, it's easy for weus to chat and talk with each other in any time, atnd anywhere.

Moreover, the computers provide us a screen to see each other lively, w. Which is a more efficient way to interact.

Without computers, we can only communicate bythrough telephones or even letters.

My experience is a good example to illustrate this.

Since I went to a college far from my hometown, it had been difficult for me to chat with my familiesy face to face.

Thanks to the computer and the chat apps, I'm was able to talk with my parents everyday by several simple clicks.

Note that "I'm able" is correct too. But in this context, since you were talking about yourself in the past. I think "I was able" should be more appropriate

Last but not the least, computers and the Internet has become more and more important since the COVID-19 spread over the world.

The pandemic has changed our lives in all aspects, from education to entertainment.

For instance, our college stopped in-class teaching and forbade students from entering the campus because of numerous positive cases last year.

To continue teaching, our college decided to switch to online courses, providing a convenient way for both students and teachers in the specific time.

It's impossible to do such a change without the help of computers.

In conclusion, computers have played a significant role in assisting people working in different fields.

As the repercussion of COVID-19 still exists, computers will become more and more necessary in our lives.

vector341's avatar
vector341

Dec. 8, 2022

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Imaginge that if there are no computers, a persone who wants to get some information has to go to a library and search through thousands of books.

I wonder if "imagine" makes the sentence have two verbs, or maybe the first part is the clause ignoring subject.

TOEFL Writing| Computers make life easier


TOEFL Writing| Computers mMake lLife eEasier

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Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient.


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Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful.


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What is your opinion?


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Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.


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My essay:


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

While some say that computers bring stress and troubles to daily lives, I counter that computers have made our lives easier and more convenient for three reasons, which I'll explore in the following essay.


While some say that computers bring stress and troubles toheartache to our daily lives, I counter that computers have made our lives easier and more convenient for three reasons, which I'll explore in the following essay.

First of all, computers have made learning and studying more easily.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

First of all, computers have made learning and studying more reasdily.

or First of all, computers have made learning and studying easier.

With computers, it's direct to skim and find useful passage and learn new knowledge.


With computers, it's directeasy to skim and find useful passage and learns to acquire new knowledge.

Imaging that if there are no computers, one who wants to get some information has to go to a library and search through thousands of books.


Imaginge that if there are no computers, a persone who wants to get some information has to go to a library and search through thousands of books.

Imaginge that if there are no computers, one who wants to get some information haswould have to go to a library and search through thousands of books.

Second, computers have helped us communicate with each other.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

As our devices are connected to the Internet, it's easy for we to chat and talk with each other in any time, at anywhere.


As our devices are connected to the Internet, it's easy for weus to chat and talk with each other in any time, atnd anywhere.

As our devices are connected to the Internet, it's easy for weus to chat and talk with each other in any time, at anywhere.

Moreover, the computers provide us a screen to see each other lively, which is a more efficient way to interact.


Moreover, the computers provide us a screen to see each other lively, w. Which is a more efficient way to interact.

Moreover, the computers provide us a screen to see each other lively, which is a more efficient way to interact.

Without computers, we can only communicate by telephones or even letters.


Without computers, we can only communicate bythrough telephones or even letters.

Without computers, we canwould only be able to communicate byvia telephones or even letters.

This is subjunctive case as you're imagining an alternate reality.

My experience is a good example to illustrate this.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Since I went to a college far from my hometown, it had been difficult for me to chat with families face to face.


Since I went to a college far from my hometown, it had been difficult for me to chat with my familiesy face to face.

Since I went to aattend college far from my hometown, it hads been difficult for me to chat with my familiesy face to face.

Thanks to the computer and the chat apps, I'm able to talk with my parents everyday by several simple clicks.


Thanks to the computer and the chat apps, I'm was able to talk with my parents everyday by several simple clicks.

Note that "I'm able" is correct too. But in this context, since you were talking about yourself in the past. I think "I was able" should be more appropriate

Thanks to the computer and the chat apps, I'm able to talk with my parents every day by using several simple clicks.

Last but not the least, computers and the Internet has become more and more important since the COVID-19 spread over the world.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Last but not the least, computers and the Internet hasve become more and more important since the COVID-19 spread overaround the world.

The pandemic has changed our lives in all aspects, from education to entertainment.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

For instance, our college stopped in-class teaching and forbade students entering the campus because of numerous positive cases last year.


For instance, our college stopped in-class teaching and forbade students from entering the campus because of numerous positive cases last year.

For instance, our college stopped in-class teaching and forbade students from entering the campus because of numerous positive cases last year.

To continue teaching, our college decided to switch to online courses, providing a convenient way for both students and teachers in the specific time.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

To continue teaching, our college decided to switch to online courses, providing a convenient way for both students and teachers in theto meet at a specific time.

It's impossible to do such a change without the help of computers.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

In conclusion, computers have played a significant role in assisting people working in different fields.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

As the repercussion of COVID-19 still exists, computers will become more and more necessary in our lives.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

As the repercussions of COVID-19 still existcontinues, computers will become more and more necessary in our lives.

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