Jan. 20, 2020
Today's things.
This post is about happened today.
When I was taking on the cellphone with my friend.
He is Canadian. So He is native speaker.
But I'm a beginner to study English.
I couldn't hear he said almost things.
Then he said me " You should study English more."
It's very shocked for me.
So I'm still very depressed.
But I know why he said it.
It's all for me.
He always said me that you can speak English.Because you study English very hard. I know it.Believe in yourself!"
I remember his that word.
So I will never give up.
I will never stop to study English.
Thank you for reading this.
-Haz
この投稿は今日起こった出来事です。
私は友達と電話で話していました。
彼はカナダ人で、ネイティブスピーカーです。
だけど私は英語を勉強する初心者。
彼が話すことで聞き取れないことがたくさんありました。
すると彼が、君はもっと勉強して。と言いました。
私はショックでした。今でも落ち込んでいます。まだまだ勉強が足りないということに。
だけど彼はなぜそう言ったのか私はわかっています。
それは全部私のためです。
いつも彼は私に「君は英語話せるから。だって真剣に英語を勉強してること俺は知ってる。自信持って！」
その彼の言葉を私は覚えています。
だから私は諦めない。英語を勉強することをやめない。
読んでくださら、ありがとうございます。
-Haz
This post is about happened today.something that happened today, when I was talking on the phone with my friend.
I joined the two sentences together. Also we don't really say cellphone anymore since no one really has a landline anymore. So I would personally just say phone because 99% of the time it is referring to a cellphone.
When I was taking on the cellphone with my friend.
He is Canadian., so he is a native English speaker.
So He is native speaker.
ButHowever, I'm a beginner to studyin English.
I couldn't hear he said almost thingsunderstand what he said.
I couldn't hear－全く・全然聞こえなかった
I couldn't understand－全然分からなかった・理解できなかった
Then he said me, " You should study English more."
It's verHis words made me really shocked for me.
Alternative
So I'm still very depressed.
But I know why he said it.
It's all for me.
He always saidtells me that you can speak EnglishI will be able to speak English, because I study very hard.
Because you study English very hard.
Joined it together with the other sentence
I know ihe is right.
Believe in yourself!
"
¶I will remember
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Ihis that word.
¶what he said and I will never give up.
So
¶ I will never stop to studying English.
¶ Thank you for reading this.
¶
¶
-Haz
Feedback
Keep up the great work. Your English is pretty good and understandable. I will be more than happy to help you practice listening/speaking through line/skype or something.
Please also remember to correct other journals that are written in Japanese.
Happy learning :)
March 3, 2020
Thank you for your correct and fill out a comment. I'm sorry for late reply.
If you could be help me I want to practice English with you by call.
I have a account→Instagram / Line / Whatsapp / Facebook(FB's messenger) / Kakaotalk.
Which one do you like (have) account?
Could you tell me?
March 6, 2020
I have LINE, please send me a message with your user ID. Also please be sure to correct journal entries that are written in Japanese. You have received 147 corrections, but have made none.
Today's things.
This post is about something that happened today.
When I was talking on themy cellphone with mya friend.
You have too many short sentences in this text, you should work on combining some of them. It would be better to write: This post is about something that happened today when I was talking on my cellphone with my friend.
He is Canadian.
Sso Hhe is a native speaker.
This sentence should be combined with the last one.
ButHowever, I'm a beginner to studyin English.
Or you could write: However, I've just begun studying English.
It in generally considered poor style to start a sentence with "But" when writing (although we certainly do it when speaking).
I couldn't hear he said almost thingsunderstand what he said.
Your sentence doesn't make sense. I think you mean: I couldn't understand many of the things he said.
It's very was shocked for meto hear that.
Or you could write: It was shocking to hear that.
So I'm stillnow very depressed.
But I know why he said it.
It's all for me.
This sentence doesn't make sense. Do you mean: He wants to help me.
He always saidys to me that you canI will be able to speak English.
Bbecause youI study English very hard.
Combine the two sentences. Because you start the sentence with "He says to me" you need to continue to use "I". Otherwise you need to use speech quotes to indicate that these are the words as he said them. Like this:
He always says to me, "you will be able to speak English, because you study very hard".
I know ihe is right.
Believe in yourself!
"
¶I will remember
¶
Ihis that word.
¶what he says and I will never give up.
So
¶
I will never stop to studying English.
¶¶
¶
Thank you for reading this.
¶
-Haz
Feedback
Good effort. You need to combine the phrases to make longer, connected sentences. It is too fragmented at the moment.
Your friend is right, keep practising and you will improve quickly!
Jan. 21, 2020
Thank you.
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This post is about happened today. This post is about something that happened today. This post is about I joined the two sentences together. Also we don't really say cellphone anymore since no one really has a landline anymore. So I would personally just say phone because 99% of the time it is referring to a cellphone. |
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When I was taking on the cellphone with my friend.
You have too many short sentences in this text, you should work on combining some of them. It would be better to write: This post is about something that happened today when I was talking on my cellphone with my friend.
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He is Canadian. He is Canadian He is Canadian |
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So He is native speaker.
This sentence should be combined with the last one.
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But I'm a beginner to study English.
Or you could write: However, I've just begun studying English. It in generally considered poor style to start a sentence with "But" when writing (although we certainly do it when speaking).
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I couldn't hear he said almost things. I couldn't Your sentence doesn't make sense. I think you mean: I couldn't understand many of the things he said. I couldn't I couldn't hear－全く・全然聞こえなかった I couldn't understand－全然分からなかった・理解できなかった |
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It's very shocked for me. I Or you could write: It was shocking to hear that.
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So I'm still very depressed. So I'm This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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But I know why he said it. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It's all for me. It's all for me. This sentence doesn't make sense. Do you mean: He wants to help me. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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He always said me that you can speak English. He always sa He always |
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Because you study English very hard.
Combine the two sentences. Because you start the sentence with "He says to me" you need to continue to use "I". Otherwise you need to use speech quotes to indicate that these are the words as he said them. Like this: He always says to me, "you will be able to speak English, because you study very hard".
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" I remember his that word. So I will never give up. I will never stop to study English. Thank you for reading this. -Haz
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