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Oct. 6, 2020

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Today in school

Well, hello everyone.
I was struggling with a body image because I was told I was fat by surrounded people like a male teacher and my mother. At that point, my weight was a healthy weight, though. Today I was told that you were not fat just few minutes ago by my male classmates. I was like honestly I was extremely happy and just got a sense of security. I’ve decided to take care of my body.
Then, I want to talk about my education. I’ve enjoyed studying in my school since this semester started. I can’t say I’m enjoying college because I’ve been to a vocational school. I was from a high school whose students were above average in my country and go to average to high university. I couldn’t admit to everyone that I met online that I’m a vocational school student, and I didn’t want to meet my past friends in big schools. However, I’m now confident to say I’ve been to a vocational school, I really enjoy and I’m proud of myself. The reason is that I met very nice people in this school and got a new perspective. I was like a silly person who look down students who is in low level of high school or university, so on. I’m totally different now. Thanks for my experience, and I may be able to have a nice day every single day from now. Happiness really depends on our mindset.

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Today in school

Well, hello everyone.

I was struggling with a body image because I was told I was fat by surroundeding people like a male teacher and my mother.

I would prefer a rephrasing to:
I was told I was fat by the people surrounding me like a male teacher and my mother.

At that point, my weight was a healthy weight, though.

Today I was told that you wereI was not fat just a few minutes ago by my male classmates.

If this is a quotation, you can keep the pronoun as you as follows:
Today I was told that: "you were not fat" just a few minutes ago by my male classmates.

I was like honestly I was extremely happy and I just gotdeveloped a sense of security.

Your use of like here is gramatically incorrect, but it is sometimes used this way. It's not a very educated way to speak. Think of characters like those in the movie Mean Girls if you are after an example of who would speak like this.

I’ve decided to take care of my body.

ThenNow, I want to talk about my education.

I’ve enjoyed studying in my school since this semester started.

I can’t say I’m enjoying college because I’ve been to a vocational school.

I was from a high school whose students were above average in my country and often go to average to high ranking universityies.

I couldn’t admit to everyone that I met online that I’m a vocational school student, and I didn’t want to meet my past friends in big schools.

However, I’m now confident to say I’ve been to a vocational school, I really enjoyed it and I’m proud of myself.

the verb enjoy needs a subject

The reason is that I met very nice people in thisat school and gotdeveloped a new perspective.

I was like a silly person who looks down on students who isare in low levels of high school or university, so on.

Students is plural and thus you use are instead of is

I’m totally different now thanks to my experience, and I may be able to have a nice day every single day from now.

Thanks for my experience, and I may be able to have a nice day every single day from now.

This is not a complete sentence, so I have combined it with the previous one.

Happiness really depends on our mindset.

Today in school


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Well, hello everyone.


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I was struggling with a body image because I was told I was fat by surrounded people like a male teacher and my mother.


I was struggling with a body image because I was told I was fat by surroundeding people like a male teacher and my mother.

I would prefer a rephrasing to: I was told I was fat by the people surrounding me like a male teacher and my mother.

At that point, my weight was a healthy weight, though.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Today I was told that you were not fat just few minutes ago by my male classmates.


Today I was told that you wereI was not fat just a few minutes ago by my male classmates.

If this is a quotation, you can keep the pronoun as you as follows: Today I was told that: "you were not fat" just a few minutes ago by my male classmates.

I was like honestly I was extremely happy and just got a sense of security.


I was like honestly I was extremely happy and I just gotdeveloped a sense of security.

Your use of like here is gramatically incorrect, but it is sometimes used this way. It's not a very educated way to speak. Think of characters like those in the movie Mean Girls if you are after an example of who would speak like this.

I’ve decided to take care of my body.


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Then, I want to talk about my education.


ThenNow, I want to talk about my education.

I’ve enjoyed studying in my school since this semester started.


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I can’t say I’m enjoying college because I’ve been to a vocational school.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I was from a high school whose students were above average in my country and go to average to high university.


I was from a high school whose students were above average in my country and often go to average to high ranking universityies.

I couldn’t admit to everyone that I met online that I’m a vocational school student, and I didn’t want to meet my past friends in big schools.


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However, I’m now confident to say I’ve been to a vocational school, I really enjoy and I’m proud of myself.


However, I’m now confident to say I’ve been to a vocational school, I really enjoyed it and I’m proud of myself.

the verb enjoy needs a subject

The reason is that I met very nice people in this school and got a new perspective.


The reason is that I met very nice people in thisat school and gotdeveloped a new perspective.

I was like a silly person who look down students who is in low level of high school or university, so on.


I was like a silly person who looks down on students who isare in low levels of high school or university, so on.

Students is plural and thus you use are instead of is

I’m totally different now.


I’m totally different now thanks to my experience, and I may be able to have a nice day every single day from now.

Thanks for my experience, and I may be able to have a nice day every single day from now.


Thanks for my experience, and I may be able to have a nice day every single day from now.

This is not a complete sentence, so I have combined it with the previous one.

Happiness really depends on our mindset.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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