But as sheHowever, as Penny turns around and leaves the room, heBobby is overcome with horror. However, as Penny turns around and leaves the room, Bobby is overcome with horror.

Now, back in thethe next morning, she takes a fancy hair-comb from Bobby’s desk to pin her hair. Now, the next morning, she takes a fancy hair-comb from Bobby’s desk to pin her hair.

Now, back in the morning, she takes a fancy hair-comb from Bobby’s desk to pin her hair back. Now, back in the morning, she takes a fancy hair-comb from Bobby’s desk to pin her hair back.

Now, backAt present, in the morning, shePenny takes a fancy hair-comb from Bobby’s desk to pin her hair. At present, in the morning, Penny takes a fancy hair-comb from Bobby’s desk to pin her hair.

This summary was deliberately written in present tenses (in this case only the beginning and the end. ) This summary was deliberately written in present tense (in this case only the beginning and the end. )

This summary was deliberately written in present tenses (in this case only the beginning and the end of the text. ) This summary was deliberately written in present tenses (in this case only the beginning and the end of the text. )

This summary was deliberately written in the present tenses (in this case only the beginning and the end. ) This summary was deliberately written in the present (in this case only the beginning and the end. )

Bobby Melma, known ato the public as Professor Mesmer, wakes up at 9 a.m. For a moment he has no idea where he is and what has happened. Bobby Melma, known to the public as Professor Mesmer, wakes up at 9 a.m. For a moment he has no idea where he is and what has happened.

Bobby Melma, known ato the public as Professor Mesmer, wakes up at 9 a.m. For a moment he has no idea where he is andnor what has happened. Bobby Melma, known to the public as Professor Mesmer, wakes up at 9 a.m. For a moment he has no idea where he is nor what has happened.

Bobby Melma, known ato the public as Professor Mesmer, wakes up at 9 a.m. For a moment he has no idea where he is and what has happened. Bobby Melma, known to the public as Professor Mesmer, wakes up at 9 a.m. For a moment he has no idea where he is and what has happened.

But then a second’squick reflection brings everything to mindback. But then a quick reflection brings everything back.

"Second's reflection" sounds kind of like the reverse-image (like a mirror) of a second.

But tThen, a second’s reflection brings everything to mind. Then, a second’s reflection brings everything to mind.

The thoughtHe could not bear to think of her coping with grief on her own did not bear thinking about. He could not bear to think of her coping with grief on her own.

TShe couldn't bear the thought of her coping with grief on her own did not bear thinking about. She couldn't bear the thought of her coping with grief on her own.

Besides, he had a strongwas deeply attractioned to her. Besides, he was deeply attracted to her.

He had to find and comfort her frombecause of the loss of hiser boyfriend and boss Jack. He had to find and comfort her because of the loss of her boyfriend and boss Jack.

He had to find and comfort her pain from the loss of hiser boyfriend and boss Jack. He had to find and comfort her pain from the loss of her boyfriend and boss Jack.

She had clearly had been crying. She had clearly been crying.

She'd clearly had been crying. She'd clearly been crying.

But hHe was no use in lessening her pain, his main concern being whether he himself would be the next target himself. He was no use in lessening her pain, his main concern being whether he himself would be the next target.

In particular, she and Jack had had a quarrel when they ha'd last seen each other. In particular, she and Jack had had a quarrel when they'd last seen each other.

Trying to divert her attention from herself, Bobby said that one of his co-stars had been arrested for Jack’s murder. Trying to divert attention from her, Bobby said that one of his co-stars had been arrested for Jack’s murder.

you can use "divert attention from herself" if she is the one diverting attention from herself. If another person is diverting attention, it would just be "her".

Trying to divert herPenny's attention from herself, Bobby said that one of his co-stars had been arrested for Jack’s murder. Trying to divert Penny's attention, Bobby said that one of his co-stars had been arrested for Jack’s murder.

The Ppolice stated she was a wily thief, and on this ghastly occasion she turned to violence for reasons unknown. The police stated she was a wily thief, and on this ghastly occasion she turned to violence for reasons unknown.

Penny’s distrainess mounted. Penny’s distress mounted.

She did non't know all these grim details. She didn't know all these grim details.

TShe couldn't bear the thought of sleeping alone did not bear thinking about. She couldn't bear the thought of sleeping alone.

The thought of sleeping alone did not bear thinking aboutwas too much to bear. The thought of sleeping alone was too much to bear.

She, therefore, spent the night at Bobby’s. She therefore spent the night at Bobby’s.

That victorian hair-comb is worth thousands of pounds, but that is not what deeply alarms him. That victorian hair-comb is worth thousands of pounds, but that is not what alarms him.

"Deeply" just doesn't really sound right with "to alarm", though that might be more stylistic/regional than grammatical.

That vVictorian hair-comb is worth thousands of pounds, but that is not what deeptruly alarms him. That Victorian hair-comb is worth thousands of pounds, but that is not what truly alarms him.

The problem is this hair-comb alone could provide a breakthrough for the Ppolice, gettleading them on to him. The problem is this hair-comb alone could provide a breakthrough for the police, leading them to him.