June 14, 2025
Tired of losing the battle
I don't like being a consumer. Most of my free time, i've been distancing from social media, it's years since I started but it hasn't been easy. I still struggle with youTube, because the IT department from my job unblocked it a few months ago. Today I asked my direct boss to create a ticket, So the IT department can block the YouTube website, but he laughed at me first and I understand it. But at the end, he agreed to help me with the ticket.
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I don't like being a consumer.
MFor most of my free time, iI've been distancing myself from social media, i. It's been years since I started, but it hasn't been easy.
I still struggle with yYouTube, because the IT department fromat my job unblocked it a few months ago.
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But at the end, he agreed to help me with the ticket.
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I don't like being a consumer.
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Very good! Mainly just punctuation.
Tired of lLosing the bBattle
Titles are usually written using the capitalization rules of title case.
I don't like being a consumer.
MIn most of my free time, iI've been distancing from social media, it's. It's been years since I started, but it hasn't been easy.
sometimes creating separate sentences helps readibility. Also, it would be more typical to say, "I do this in/for most of my free time" than "I do this most of my free time."
I still struggle with yYouTube, because the IT department from my job unblocked it a few months ago.
Today I asked my direct boss to create a ticket, S so the IT department can block the YouTube website, but he laughed at me first, and I understand it.why.
It is more normal to just say "youtube" than "youtube website." The word "it" at the end has an unclear referent.
But aAt the end, he agreed to help me with the ticket.
As it was written, it was a fragment, since dependent clauses shouldn´t be left alone.
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Pretty clear writing about a relatable topic. Nice!
Tired of losing the battle
I don't like being a consumer.
MDuring most of my free time, i've been distancing from social media, it's. It's been years since I started but it hasn't been easy.
While it is understandable, it sounds unnatural and choppy.
I still struggle with yYouTube, because the IT department fromat my job unblocked it a few months ago.
Today I asked my direct boss to create a ticket, Sso the IT department can block the YouTube website, but h. He laughed at me first and I understanood it.
But atIn the end, he agreed to help me with the ticket.
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Good job! While your journal is understandable, I would work on your grammar so the sentences are not as long or choppy. Keep up the good work!
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Most of my free time, i've been distancing from social media, it's years since I started but it hasn't been easy.
While it is understandable, it sounds unnatural and choppy.
sometimes creating separate sentences helps readibility. Also, it would be more typical to say, "I do this in/for most of my free time" than "I do this most of my free time." Most of my free time,
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Today I asked my direct boss to create a ticket, So the IT department can block the YouTube website, but he laughed at me first and I understand it. Today I asked my direct boss to create a ticket, Today I asked my direct boss to create a ticket It is more normal to just say "youtube" than "youtube website." The word "it" at the end has an unclear referent. Today, I asked my direct boss to create a ticket You can also say, "which I get" which is more conversational. I would just this with the next sentence to flow better. Today I asked my |
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But at the end, he agreed to help me with the ticket.
As it was written, it was a fragment, since dependent clauses shouldn´t be left alone.
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