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Tammy

May 4, 2025

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Tired Holiday

I felt more tired during the past three days than during my work day.

On May 1st, it took me and my friends three times as long to arrive at the hike destination. One of my friends complained a lot on the bus during the traffic jam. At first, I kept calm down because it was the normal situation on national holidays. After comforting her several times, I felt tired and just let it go.

That's the reason I decided to stay in Shanghai for the last two days of this holiday. I'll take a stroll in the parks and look at the flowers, and then back home to sort out the videos and photos on my phone.

I sorted out some last night.

I have uploaded two videos about my hike in Baiyunshan on my YouTube channel. You can check them out here: https://www.youtube.com/shorts/pkg_YvFztPA & https://www.youtube.com/shorts/8xGFBkVVa24


过去的三天假,我感觉比工作日还累。

5月1日,我和朋友们花了三倍的时间才到达徒步地。交通堵塞时,我的一个朋友在大巴上抱怨了很多。起初,我还能保持冷静,因为这是法定假日的正常情况。在安慰了她几次之后,好累,就顺其自然了。

这就是我决定在这个假期的最后两天待在上海的原因。我会去公园散散步,看看花,然后回家整理手机上的视频和照片。

我昨晚整理了一些。

我上传了两个关于我在白云山徒步的视频。你可以在这里查看。

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Tireding Holiday

Tired Holiday - the holiday itself felt tired
Tiring Holiday - the holiday made you and/or someone else feel tired

I felt more tired during the past three days than during my (regular) work days.

alternative:
The past three vacation days were more tiring than regular workdays.

On May 1st, it took me and my friends three times as long as normal to {arrive at the hike destination| to reach} {the hiking place | the trailhead}.

The “hike destination” would be the ending point of your hike - 徒步的目的地 - so “it took us three times as long to arrive at the hike destination” means the hike itself took three times as long.

A “trailhead” is a starting point on a hiking trail or path. On long trails there might be many trailheads - access points where you can get onto the trail.

One of my friends complained a lot on the bus during the traffic jam.

At first, I kept calm down because it was the normal situation on national holidays.

suggestion: At first I kept calm because heavy traffic was normal for a national holiday.

After trying to comforting her several times, I felt tired and just let it go.

I changed “comforting” to “trying to comfort” because “comforting her” implies that you succeeded in making her feel better, but the fact that you had to do it several times implies that your attempts to comfort her didn’t really succeed, so “trying to comfort her” makes more sense.

That's the reason I decided to stay in Shanghai for the last two days of this holiday.

I'll take a stroll in the parks and look at the flowers, and then go back home to sort out the videos and photos on my phone.

I sorted out some out last night.

more natural

I have uploaded two videos aboutfrom my hike in / on Baiyunshan on / to my YouTube channel.

“About” feels wrong because the videos don’t describe anything about the hike. They depict scenes from the hike.

You can check them out here: https://www.youtube.com/shorts/pkg_YvFztPA & https://www.youtube.com/shorts/8xGFBkVVa24

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Nice videos!

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Tammy

May 4, 2025

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Thank you so much!

Have a nice day!

Tireding Holiday

I felt more tired duringover the past three days than during my work day.

"during the past three days" is probably grammatically correct, but "over the past three days" sounds more natural.

On May 1st, it took me and my friends three times as long to arrive at the hikeing destination.

For more clarity, you may also consider writing "it took me and my friends three times longer than usual"

One of my friends complained a lot on the bus during the traffic jam.

At first, I kcould keept calm down because it was the normal situation on national holidays.

Looking at the native text, I'd suggest the addition of "could" here, because "还能" implies an ability to keep calm.

After comforting her several times, I felgot tired and just let it go.

"got" would be the better choice of word here, as it suggests a causal relationship: it was the act of comforting your friend that caused you to feel tired.

That's the reason I decided to stay in Shanghai for the last two days of this holiday.

I'll take a stroll in the parks and look at the flowers, and then backreturn home to sort out the videos and photos on my phone.

If you want to keep "parks" plural, "a stroll" should be plural as well (so "strolls"), unless you'll be visiting more than one park in one stroll.

I sorted out some last night.

I have uploaded two videos about my hike in Baiyunshan on my YouTube channel.

You can check them out here: https://www.youtube.com/shorts/pkg_YvFztPA & https://www.youtube.com/shorts/8xGFBkVVa24

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The YouTube link led me to a 404 error D:

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Tammy

May 4, 2025

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Thank you so much!

I checked the links and both of them are valid.

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pshedron

May 4, 2025

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Oh, I didn't realise there were two links and my stupid self just pasted the whole thing into the browser...😭 The mountain views are really nice though. China has some spectacular mountains. I had the pleasure of experiencing some of them myself when I went to Sichuan last year.

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Tammy

May 5, 2025

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Wow, you have been to Sichuan. The mountains in Sichuan are way bigger than those in East China.

Tired Holiday


Tireding Holiday

Tireding Holiday

Tired Holiday - the holiday itself felt tired Tiring Holiday - the holiday made you and/or someone else feel tired

I felt more tired during the past three days than during my work day.


I felt more tired duringover the past three days than during my work day.

"during the past three days" is probably grammatically correct, but "over the past three days" sounds more natural.

I felt more tired during the past three days than during my (regular) work days.

alternative: The past three vacation days were more tiring than regular workdays.

On May 1st, it took me and my friends three times as long to arrive at the hike destination.


On May 1st, it took me and my friends three times as long to arrive at the hikeing destination.

For more clarity, you may also consider writing "it took me and my friends three times longer than usual"

On May 1st, it took me and my friends three times as long as normal to {arrive at the hike destination| to reach} {the hiking place | the trailhead}.

The “hike destination” would be the ending point of your hike - 徒步的目的地 - so “it took us three times as long to arrive at the hike destination” means the hike itself took three times as long. A “trailhead” is a starting point on a hiking trail or path. On long trails there might be many trailheads - access points where you can get onto the trail.

One of my friends complained a lot on the bus during the traffic jam.


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At first, I kept calm down because it was the normal situation on national holidays.


At first, I kcould keept calm down because it was the normal situation on national holidays.

Looking at the native text, I'd suggest the addition of "could" here, because "还能" implies an ability to keep calm.

At first, I kept calm down because it was the normal situation on national holidays.

suggestion: At first I kept calm because heavy traffic was normal for a national holiday.

After comforting her several times, I felt tired and just let it go.


After comforting her several times, I felgot tired and just let it go.

"got" would be the better choice of word here, as it suggests a causal relationship: it was the act of comforting your friend that caused you to feel tired.

After trying to comforting her several times, I felt tired and just let it go.

I changed “comforting” to “trying to comfort” because “comforting her” implies that you succeeded in making her feel better, but the fact that you had to do it several times implies that your attempts to comfort her didn’t really succeed, so “trying to comfort her” makes more sense.

That's the reason I decided to stay in Shanghai for the last two days of this holiday.


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I'll take a stroll in the parks and look at the flowers, and then back home to sort out the videos and photos on my phone.


I'll take a stroll in the parks and look at the flowers, and then backreturn home to sort out the videos and photos on my phone.

If you want to keep "parks" plural, "a stroll" should be plural as well (so "strolls"), unless you'll be visiting more than one park in one stroll.

I'll take a stroll in the parks and look at the flowers, and then go back home to sort out the videos and photos on my phone.

I sorted out some last night.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I sorted out some out last night.

more natural

I have uploaded two videos about my hike in Baiyunshan on my YouTube channel.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I have uploaded two videos aboutfrom my hike in / on Baiyunshan on / to my YouTube channel.

“About” feels wrong because the videos don’t describe anything about the hike. They depict scenes from the hike.

You can check them out here: https://www.youtube.com/shorts/pkg_YvFztPA & https://www.youtube.com/shorts/8xGFBkVVa24


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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