July 23, 2025
Tibetan Plateau
The Himalayas, the largest and highest mountain chains on Earth, marking the border between China and India.
The Tibetan region contains over 35,000 glaciers, which covered with 10,000 square kilometers, about a sixth of the world's total.
Therefore, it is not surprising that there are many glacial lakes on the Tibetan Plateau.
In Tibet, if you are short of oxygen, you will surely suffer from altitude sickness.
But such thin air does not stop the daily activities of animals.
In the remote corner of the Tibetan Plateau, there is an astonishing creature living there.
They provide locals with food, transport, clothes and fuel.
Wild yaks travel large distances, grazing on the alpine tundra.
Because the high-altitude plateau creats the unique body structure of yaks.
They will become sick if they live at places, which below 3000 meters.
The Tibetans domesticate these yaks.
Yak manure is an indispensable fuel for the locals.
Yak's milk can be used to make butter tea.
Close to the summit of Mount Everest, a forest of ice once covered much of the area.
But due to the fact of climate change, much of it has gone.
It is predicted that 80% of Tibetan glaciers could disappear within the next 30 years.
This will surely affect everyone living in Tibet, and this might affect everyone on our planet sooner or later.
喜马拉雅是地球上最大和最高的山系，标志中国和印度的边界。
西藏地区有35000多条冰川, 覆盖面积1万平方公里，约占世界冰川总面积的六分之一。
因此，西藏高原许多冰川湖也就不足为奇了。
在西藏，如果你氧气不足，你肯定会患高山病。
但是如此稀薄的空气并没有阻止动物的日常活动。
在西藏高原的偏远角落里，有一种令人惊讶的生物生活在那里，它们为当地人提供食物、交通工具、衣服和燃料。
牦牛长途跋涉，在高寒的苔原上吃草。因为高海拔的高原造就了牦牛的独特身体结构。
如果它们生活在三千米以下的地方就会生病。西藏人驯化了这些牦牛。
牛大便是当地人必不可少的燃料。牛奶可以用来制作酥油茶。
在接近珠穆朗玛峰峰顶的地方，曾经有一片冰林覆盖了大部分地区。
但由于气候变化的事实，大部分都消失了。
据预测，80%的西藏冰川可能在未来30年内消失殆尽。
这肯定会影响到生活在西藏的每一个人，也可能迟早影响我们地球上的每个人。
The Tibeten Plateau
It sounds more natural as a title with the definite article 'the'
The Himalayas, consist of the largest and highest mountain chainranges on Earth, and marking the border between China and India.
The sentence sounded a bit off because there was technically no verb conjugated in any tense, just the gerund. It sounded more natural to include at least one verb in any relevant tense, so I added 'consist' and changed 'marking' to 'mark'.
The Tibetan region contains over 35,000 glaciers, about a sixth of the world's total, which covered with 10,000 square kilometers, about a sixth of the world's total.
cover --> facts that are still relevant are usually stated in the present tense. The preposition 'with' doesn't fit here.
It also works better to switch the clause with 'about a sixth...' with the clause with 'which cover...'; it would have been grammatically OK to continue follow '35,000 glaciers' with 'which cover....' even without a comma, so the 'about...' clause fits more neatly in the middle of the sentence separated by commas as it's extra information that wouldn't have worked without the commas.
In the remote corner of the Tibetan Plateau, tThere is an astonishing creature (living/that lives) in the remote corner of the Tibetan Plateau.
I think writing 'in the x location' and then 'living there' at the end is a bit redundant as it's technically repeated information. By changing the sentence order, you can avoid using the word 'there' whilst still keeping those two parts of the sentence sounding natural.
Because the high-altitude plateau creates the unique body structure of yaks.
You missed an 'e' in the word 'creates'.
They will become sick if they live at places, which below 3000 metersat altitudes below 3000 meters over an extended period of time.
'live at places' sounds a little unnatural. I guess with the word 'live' you are saying that they won't be sick if they're in that environment for a short period of time, only if they're there for quite a while. If so, then I've changed the sentence to add this information. You could also say 'live in areas/zones/locations...'
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The turns of phrases you use here are formed so expertly! Much of this writing reads to me like something from a professionally written article. There were just a few unnatural and grammatical errors but overall, your writing is really impressive.
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Tibeten Plateau The Tibeten Plateau It sounds more natural as a title with the definite article 'the' |
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The Himalayas, the largest and highest mountain chains on Earth, marking the border between China and India. The Himalayas The sentence sounded a bit off because there was technically no verb conjugated in any tense, just the gerund. It sounded more natural to include at least one verb in any relevant tense, so I added 'consist' and changed 'marking' to 'mark'. |
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The Tibetan region contains over 35,000 glaciers, which covered with 10,000 square kilometers, about a sixth of the world's total. The Tibetan region contains over 35,000 glaciers, about a sixth of the world's total, which cover cover --> facts that are still relevant are usually stated in the present tense. The preposition 'with' doesn't fit here. It also works better to switch the clause with 'about a sixth...' with the clause with 'which cover...'; it would have been grammatically OK to continue follow '35,000 glaciers' with 'which cover....' even without a comma, so the 'about...' clause fits more neatly in the middle of the sentence separated by commas as it's extra information that wouldn't have worked without the commas. |
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Therefore, it is not surprising that there are many glacial lakes on the Tibetan Plateau. |
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In Tibet, if you are short of oxygen, you will surely suffer from altitude sickness. |
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But such thin air does not stop the daily activities of animals. |
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The Tibetans domesticate these yaks. |
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In the remote corner of the Tibetan Plateau, there is an astonishing creature living there.
I think writing 'in the x location' and then 'living there' at the end is a bit redundant as it's technically repeated information. By changing the sentence order, you can avoid using the word 'there' whilst still keeping those two parts of the sentence sounding natural. |
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They provide locals with food, transport, clothes and fuel. |
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Wild yaks travel large distances, grazing on the alpine tundra. |
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Because the high-altitude plateau creats the unique body structure of yaks. Because the high-altitude plateau creates the unique body structure of yaks. You missed an 'e' in the word 'creates'. |
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They will become sick if they live at places, which below 3000 meters. They will become sick 'live at places' sounds a little unnatural. I guess with the word 'live' you are saying that they won't be sick if they're in that environment for a short period of time, only if they're there for quite a while. If so, then I've changed the sentence to add this information. You could also say 'live in areas/zones/locations...' |
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Yak manure is an indispensable fuel for the locals. |
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Yak's milk can be used to make butter tea. |
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Close to the summit of Mount Everest, a forest of ice once covered much of the area. |
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But due to the fact of climate change, much of it has gone. |
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This will surely affect everyone living in Tibet, and this might affect everyone on our planet sooner or later. |
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Tibetan Plateau |
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It is predicted that 80% of Tibetan glaciers could disappear within the next 30 years. |
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