Thoughts on eEducation (V2)

On the one hand, a substantial number of individuals believe that dynamic classes are more enjoyable for students.

On the other hand, it ispeople claimed that seriousorthodox lessons are more understandableffective.

Hence, they argue, formally presented classes are definitely better than any other type of education.

In the first place, seriousformal classes allow people to focus solely on the subject matter, whereas an "entertaining" lesson negatively impacts students' ability to concentrate.

I think it's better to be careful not to inject our opinions into an essay when we're trying to convince someone of something. Here, "serious" implies good while "entertaining" implies bad. It's better to use "formal" or "orthodox" for the standard teaching model and "dynamic" for the experiential model.

In this sense, a more formal class model is useful when a professor is teaching a hard science, such as Mathematics, since pupils are fully absorbocused byon the logical reasoning behind the task at hand.

When I was in high school, I had a Mathematics teacher who used this approach when explainingto teach a class.

I remember being amazed with tby his magnificent way of teaching, which, in turn, made me heold this professorm in high regard.

This exhibits how a seriousdemonstrates how the standard type of teaching method may greatly improve the student learning process of a student.

Moreover, the learning pace is higher in a seriousformal class.

By using "entertaining"experiential activities, teachers tend to lose valuable time thatwhich may be used for something else, while a serioustandard approach would completely enhance the use of the students' use of time.

Therefore, as expressed previously, this learning approach significantly enriches the learning experience by many measuressignificantly.

On the other hand, it issome claimed that serious lessons are more understandable.

Changed to "some" to clarify meaning.

Hence,I believe formally presented classes are definitely better than any other type of education.

I don't think this is a question with a definitive answer, so it ultimately comes down to your opinion and shouldn't be presented as the absolute truth.

In the first place, serious classes allow people to focus solely on the subject matter, whereas an "entertaining" lesson negatively impacts students' ability to concentrate.

* Alt: an entertaining lesson has a negative impact on students' ability to concentrate.
* I don't think the quotation marks are necessary unless you're using them with "serious" as well.

In this sense, aA more formal class modelsetting is useful when a professor is teaching a hard science, such as Mmathematics, since pupils arneed to be fully absorbed by the logical reasoning behind the task at handconcepts.

I get what you mean but it feels clunky.

Furthermore, a formal lesson leaves a good impression of the teacher on the students.

Alt: a formal lesson gives the students a good impression of the teacher.

When I was in high school, I had a Mmathematics teacher who used this approach when explaining lessons.

Alt: a math teacher

I remember being amazed with this magnificent way of teaching, which made me held this professor in high regard.

Alt: I remember being amazed with this magnificent way of teaching and holding this professor in high regard.

This exhibits how a serious type of teaching may greatly improve the students' learning process.

Works, but I would go for "this shows [...]" or "this demonstrates [...]" to make the sentence more natural.

Moreover, the learning pace is higher in a serious classa serious class requires a higher pace of teaching.

By using "entertaining" activities, teachers tend to lose valuable time that may be used for something else, whil. I believe a serious approach would completely enhance the students' use of time.

* Alt: By incorporating
* Broken into separate sentences for better flow.

To conclude, formal lessons allow students to think only aboutfocus on the topic of the class.

Additionally, this type of education may inspire people.

Alt: this type of teaching style
(to clarify meaning)

When teachers use a formal approach, the learning pace of the class is highstudents can learn faster.

Therefore, as expressed previously, this learning approach significantly enriches the learning experience by many measures.

"As expressed previously" doesn't add meaning and is unnecessary. By saying "to conclude" in one of the previous sentences, you're already telling the reader to refer to your past arguments.

On the other hand, it issome claimed that serious lessons are more understandable.

It isn't incorrect to use the passive voice here, but it's usually preferable in English writing to use active voice when possible (with the exception of scientific research). Active voice usually sounds clearer to the reader and more to the point.

Hence, formallyclasses presented classeswith a formal tone are definitely better than any other type of education.

Take this with a grain of salt as it's just my personal opinion, not an actual error, but I think this sounds a bit clearer.

In this sense, a more formal class model is useful when a professor is teaching a hard science, such as Mmathematics, since pupils are fully absorbed by the logical reasoning behind the task at hand.

A general subject name doesn't need to be capitalized.

When I was in high school, I had a Mmathematics teacher who used this approach when explaining.

"High school" is written as two words, and we don't typically need to capitalize a general subject name.

I remember being amazed with this magnificent way of teaching, which made me heold this professor in high regard.

Following "made", the next verb should be written in the infinitive form.

When teachers use a formal approach, the learning pace of the class is higher.

There's nothing wrong with the structure/grammar here, but I just think it's a bit repetitive seeing as it was mentioned above.