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May 18, 2020

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THINGS I'M GOOD AT

I am good at communicating people, even I have not seen. However I was not good at communicating. For example, when I met my aunt after a long absence, she was surprised at my communicating. I was thought I did not like talk to anyone. A opportunity to change my mind is entrance into a high school. I didn't know anyone at the school, so I had to talk to my classmates by myself. While I did it, my communications skill was getting better. Now, I do not feel anything to talk someone.

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I am good at communicating with people, even I have not seenmet before.

"Seen" makes it seem that you've never physically seen something before. (i.e. I've never seen your sister because she's always in her room.) Generally, "meet" sounds better in this context.

However I was notn't always good at communicating.

For example, when I met my aunt after a long absenctime, she was surprised at my communicatingon skills.

"A long absence" is grammatically correct but sounds a bit formal. "A long time" is more commonly used.

I wasShe thought I did not like to talk to anyone.

A opportunity tohat changed my mind iwas entrance into aering high school.

I didn't know anyone at the school, so I had to talk to my classmates by myself.

WhilThe more I did it, the more my communications skill was gettings got better.

Now, I do not feel anythingnervous when I have to talk to someone.

"Feeling nothing" doesn't quite sound right in English;

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repezendelivery344

May 19, 2020

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Thank you!! I'll take care of them.

THINGS I'M GOOD AT

I am good at communicating with people, even those who I have not seen.

However I was not good at communicating, my communication skills used to be bad.

"However" is a transitional word at the beginning of the sentence, so it needs a comma afterwards.
The rest of the sentence I changed. You used "good at communicating" in the first sentence, and in the English language we try to avoid a lot of repetitiveness.

For example, when I met my aunt after a long absenctime, she was surprised at my communicationg.

In this scenario, we would rather say "after a long time" than a "long absence". You would say long absence here:
After taking a long absence from my studies, I re-enrolled at university today.

I was thought I did not like to talk to anyone.

AThe opportunity to change my mind ishat helped me was my entrance into a high school.

I changed this sentence to make it sound better. I think "helped me" is better than "change my mind", because you are talking about your communication skills improving, and anything that makes you improve obviously helps you.

Here's an example of where you would use change my mind:
You can't change my mind, I'm set on moving to Spain next year.

I didn't know anyone at the school, so I had to talk to my classmates by myself.

"by myself" isn't necessary here

WhilThe more I did it, the better my communications skill was getting better.s got.

Changed the sentence to sound smoother

Now, I do not feel anything toxious when I talk to someone.

if you "don't feel anything" when you talk to someone, that means you don't feel any emotion - happy, sad, scared, etc. Since you were talking about how your communication skills were bad but now they aren't, I put "anxious" instead.

Please correct this sentenceparagraph!

A sentence is just one line, a paragraph is a group of sentences :)

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Good job! Most of the things I changed were things to make your English sound more smooth/fluent :)

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repezendelivery344

May 18, 2020

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Thank you for correcting this sentence!
It's so easy to understand your explanation.

THINGS I'M GOOD AT


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I am good at communicating people, even I have not seen.


I am good at communicating with people, even those who I have not seen.

I am good at communicating with people, even I have not seenmet before.

"Seen" makes it seem that you've never physically seen something before. (i.e. I've never seen your sister because she's always in her room.) Generally, "meet" sounds better in this context.

However I was not good at communicating.


However I was not good at communicating, my communication skills used to be bad.

"However" is a transitional word at the beginning of the sentence, so it needs a comma afterwards. The rest of the sentence I changed. You used "good at communicating" in the first sentence, and in the English language we try to avoid a lot of repetitiveness.

However I was notn't always good at communicating.

For example, when I met my aunt after a long absence, she was surprised at my communicating.


For example, when I met my aunt after a long absenctime, she was surprised at my communicationg.

In this scenario, we would rather say "after a long time" than a "long absence". You would say long absence here: After taking a long absence from my studies, I re-enrolled at university today.

For example, when I met my aunt after a long absenctime, she was surprised at my communicatingon skills.

"A long absence" is grammatically correct but sounds a bit formal. "A long time" is more commonly used.

I was thought I did not like talk to anyone.


I was thought I did not like to talk to anyone.

I wasShe thought I did not like to talk to anyone.

A opportunity to change my mind is entrance into a high school.


AThe opportunity to change my mind ishat helped me was my entrance into a high school.

I changed this sentence to make it sound better. I think "helped me" is better than "change my mind", because you are talking about your communication skills improving, and anything that makes you improve obviously helps you. Here's an example of where you would use change my mind: You can't change my mind, I'm set on moving to Spain next year.

A opportunity tohat changed my mind iwas entrance into aering high school.

I didn't know anyone at the school, so I had to talk to my classmates by myself.


I didn't know anyone at the school, so I had to talk to my classmates by myself.

"by myself" isn't necessary here

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

While I did it, my communications skill was getting better.


WhilThe more I did it, the better my communications skill was getting better.s got.

Changed the sentence to sound smoother

WhilThe more I did it, the more my communications skill was gettings got better.

Now, I do not feel anything to talk someone.


Now, I do not feel anything toxious when I talk to someone.

if you "don't feel anything" when you talk to someone, that means you don't feel any emotion - happy, sad, scared, etc. Since you were talking about how your communication skills were bad but now they aren't, I put "anxious" instead.

Now, I do not feel anythingnervous when I have to talk to someone.

"Feeling nothing" doesn't quite sound right in English;

Please correct this sentence!


Please correct this sentenceparagraph!

A sentence is just one line, a paragraph is a group of sentences :)

Please correct this sentenceparagraph!

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