Now, let me ask you this.:

Iif you were a thief, would you like to be tracked down?

If we use a colon ":" in the previous sentence, we have to connect it to this one, so I made the initial letter lower case.

The owner of the company didn’t get confused though:. “The moment we realized they had a box of trackers, we went into recovery mode,” the owner said. “We notified the police and equipped them to track the devices, and in about 5 or 6 hours, it was done.

I see the other corrections here, but I think the only problem in this paragraph is punctuation. It looks good.

But wait, —there is more.

Yours is technically correct, too.

THIEVES STEAL THE DUMBEST THINGS EVER!

So you probably would not steal anything, which would help police locate you, right?

SoNeither would our crazy stupid idiots, but guess what?

They failed to do soat's exactly what they did.

Because what they had stolen, was a lot of GPS trackers from a hi-tech company which produces them.

The owner of the company didn’t get confused though: “The moment we realized they had a box of trackers, we went into recovery mode,” the owner said. “We notified the police and equipped them to track the devices, and, in about 5 or 6 hours, it was done.

the comma is not optional. look up "parenthetical commas" if you want more info.

The police had plenty of evidence to work with.

The cxops were also able to locate the place where the thieves kept their preyloot.

prey implies it itself suffered from the crime. The gps trackers didnt themselves suffer, so they can't be called "prey"

However tempting it might be, do not steal devices that can helpbe used to track you down!

There, we are going towill find two stupid idiots who stole some things.

So yYou probably would not steal anything, which that would help police locate you, right?

So would oOur crazy stupid idiots probably thought the same, but guess what?

They failed to do soat's exactly what they did.

Changed this and the last sentence for better flow and clarity.

Because wWhat they had stolen, was a lot of GPS trackers from a hi-tech company whichthat produces them.

The theft happened in June 2017 when two thieves stole $18,000 worth of GPS trackers, presumably confusing them with phone chargers since the trackers werelooked very alike to such phone accessories.

The owner of the company didn’t get confused though:. “The moment we realized they had a box of trackers, we went into recovery mode,” the owner said. “We notified the police and equipped them to track the devices, and within about 5 or 6 hours, it was done."

”The thieves were tracked down within five hours or soor so hours.

Not only did the thieves steal the trackers, but they also decided to celebrate their success by drinking beer from the fridge situated inat the scene of the crime.

The police had plenty of evidence to work with.

The cxops were also able to locate the place where the thieves kept their preyloot.

"Prey" is only applicable when you're talking about something being hunted or killed.

There were even more stolen thinggoods from other crimes the thieves had committed.

However tempting it mightay be, do not steal devices that can help track you down!

Today we are visiting Silicon Valley, and Santa Clara, California.

There wWe are going to find two stupid idiots who stole some things (that belongs to us).

So yYou probably would not want to steal anything, which would that could be used to help the police locate youtrack you down, right?

The owner of the company didn’t get confused though: “The moment we realized they had a box of trackers, we went into recovery mode,” the owner said. “We notified the police and equipped them to track the devices, and in about 5 or 6 hours, it was done."

”The thieves were tracked down in about five hours or so.

The police had plenty of evidence to work with.

The cxops were also able to locate the place where the thieves kept their prey.

There were even more stolen thinggoods from other crimes the thieves had committed.