April 20, 2023
The woman I admire most | part 2
When her parents died, they left her a rich inheritance. In 1931, Glessner Lee endowed with money she got the Harvard Department of Legal Medicine. Because the forensic field was dominated by men, Lee had to find a way to stand out amongst them. A great idea grew inside her mind – crafting tiny replicas of real crime scenes in order to help detectives examine clues in cases of unexplained deaths. Lee used these dollhouses in training lectures she gave police officers on crime scene forensics. The series of dioramas are known as The Nutshell Studies of Unexplained Death. During her lectures, the students were instructed to analyze every detail of a scene, every suspicious subject in the room, dubious position of the victim and after that, they had to draw conclusions from the visual evidence. It was an effective way to show to young students how they can distinguish a murder from suicide, and sometimes it did not depend by position of the victim, but the furnishing in the room (the way things were put and such, not sure if it’s right).
Frances showed interest in teaching police officers who has already worked because they were first who arrived at the crime scene, so they had to be attentive to find and save the clues, which are so needful for crime investigation. Whilst most of police officers unwittingly complicated the process of investigation by touching subjects, moving them from place to place, interpreting incorrectly the clues. Lee was also interested in improving contact between medical assessores, police officers, investigators and prosecutors. Her courses were considered to be the best for training detectives in US.
The woman I admire most | part 2
When her parents died, they left her a rich inheritance.
In 1931, Glessner Lee endowed with money she got the Harvard Department of Legal Medicine.
The definition of endow already includes 'with money', so you don't need to mention that again in this context. You could of course specify what someone is endowed with, for instance - She is endowed with a great sense of humour. He endowed the town with many lovely buildings.
For this text, since you already mention her rich inheritance, you could also combine the sentences -
When her parents died, they left her a rich inheritance, with which she endowed the Harvard Department of Legal Medicine.
Because the forensic field was dominated by men, Lee had to find a way to stand out amongst them.
A great idea grew inside her mind – crafting tiny replicas of real crime scenes in order to help detectives examine clues in cases of unexplained deaths.
Lee used these dollhouses induring the training lectures she gave police officers, on crime scene forensics.
The series of dioramas are known as The Nutshell Studies of Unexplained Death.
During her lectures, the students were instructed to analyze every detail of a scene, every suspicious subject in the room, dubious position of the victim and after that, they had to draw conclusions from the visual evidence.
It was an effective way to show to young students how they canould distinguish a murder from a suicide, and sometimes it did not depend byon the position of the victim, but the furnishing in the room (the way things were put and such, not sure if it’s right).way the furniture was arranged
(the way things were placed and such, not sure if it’s right) - It's not that it's not right but I think based on what you are trying to say I would say it a bit differently.
Frances showed interest in teaching police officers who hasd already worked because they were the first whto arrived at the crime scene, so they had to be attentive to find and save the clues, which awere so needfuled for crimthe investigation.
Who is Frances? Police officers who had already worked where, on what? This sentence is a bit confusing. I'm not sure which police officers you are referring to. Officers who had already worked is a bit vague for me
Whilst most ofMost police officers unwittingly complicated the process of investigationve process by touching the subjects, moving them from place to place, and incorrectly interpreting incorrectly the clues.
Not sure what you mean by subjects here. As in, the bodies of the victims?
Lee was also interested in improving contactmmunication between medical assccessories, police officers, investigators, and prosecutors.
Her courses were considered to be the best for training detectives in the US.
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Good text overall, some stylistic aspects to consider. A few of the sentences could also be rephrased as their current form makes them a bit unclear. But good job and hope this helps! :)
April 26, 2023
Frances showed interest in teaching police officers who hasd already worked because they were the first whto arrived at the crime scene, so they had to be attentive to find and save the clues, which awere so needfuled for crimthe investigation.
I think you should read the first part of this text. I meant all police officers from US
April 26, 2023
Thank you for your help!
May 1, 2023
I think you should read the first part of this text. I meant all police officers from US
No, I understand that. I just don't know what you mean when you say 'police officers who had already worked.' Worked on what?
May 2, 2023
No, I understand that. I just don't know what you mean when you say 'police officers who had already worked.' Worked on what?
Who already have experience in investigating
The woman I admire most | pPart 2
When her parents died, they left her a rich inheritance.
In 1931, Glessner Lee endowed withe money she got to the Harvard Department of Legal Medicine.
Because the forensic field was dominated by men, Lee had to find a way to stand out amongst them.
A great idea grewformed inside her mind – crafting tiny replicas of real crime scenes in order to help detectives examine clues in cases of unexplained deaths.
Lee used these dollhouses in the training lectures she gave police officers on crime scene forensics.
The series of dioramas are known as The Nutshell Studies of Unexplained Death.
During her lectures, the students were instructed to analyze every detail of a scene, every suspicious subject in the room, dubious position of the victim and after that, they had to draw conclusions from the visual evidence.
It was an effective way to show to young students how they can distinguish a murder from suicide, and sometimes it did not depend byon the position of the victim, but the furnishplacement of the furniture and fittings in the room (the way things were put and such, not sure if it’s right).
Frances showed interest in teaching police officers who hasd already worked because they were first who arrived at the crime scene, so t. They had to be attentive to find and save the clues, which are so needfulessential for crime investigation.
Whilst most of police officers unwittingly complicated the process of investigation by touching suobjects, moving them from place to place, and interpreting the clues incorrectly the clues.
Lee was also interested in improving contactthe relationship between medical assessores, police officers, investigators and prosecutors.
Her courses were considered to be the best for training detectives in US.
April 21, 2023
I have so many mistakes X.X
anyway, thank you! I could avoid some mistakes but I wasn't very attentive.
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Frances showed interest in teaching police officers who has already worked because they were the first who arrived at the crime scene, so they had to be attentive to find and save the clues, which are so needful for crime investigation. |
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