Sept. 20, 2022
The universe
I started trying an online English conversation class from this week, and today's topic was the univers. The teacher asked each student if we were insrested in the universe when we were little or what the hardest thing would be for the astronauts.
Personnaly, being a food lover, I'm sure that I'm going to miss Japanese foods. Though the technology of space food has been développed and studies continuously, the restrain to the choice of daily diet should exist, which is unthinkable for me. Their curiosity of sense of duty to discover the truth or to contribute to the society should be outweigning the interest for food. It also seems like becoming an astronaut requires a certain personnality, strong and tough physics, good eyesight (if I'm not mistaken), mental matureness, intelligence etc. Thus, it is a extreme priviledge to be able to go out of Earth and see what's there in the universe.
The uUniverse
This week I started trying an online English conversation class from this week, and today's topic was the universe.
The teacher asked each student if we were insterested in the universe when we were little, or what the hardest thing would be for the astronauts.
Personnally, being a food lover, I'm sure that I'm going to would miss Japanese foods.
If you say "I'm going to", it sounds like you are an astronaut and you will go to space!
"I would" sounds more hypothetical, like you would IF you did go to space.
Though the technology of space food has been déevelopped and studieis continuously, the studied, there is a restraint to the choice of your daily diet should exist, which is unthinkable for me.
"should exist" => "there is" or "there would be"
Their curiosity ofand sense of duty to discover the truth or to contribute to the society should bemust outweigningh their interest forin food.
It also seems like becoming an astronaut requires a certain personnality, a strong and tough physicsque, good eyesight (if I'm not mistaken), mental maturenessity, intelligence, etc.
"physique" is about your body, "physics" is a kind of science.
Thus, it is a extreme priviledge to be able to go out ofleave Earth and see what's there in the universe.
"go out of" makes it seem like you're inside the Earth.
Sept. 21, 2022
Thank you I really appreciate your feedback with explanations in detail, that helps me a lot !
The uUniverse
We capitalize the first letter of important words in titles.
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The teacher asked each student if we were insterested in the universe when we were little or what the hardest thing would be for the astronauts.
Personnally, being a food lover, I'm sure that I'm going to would miss Japanese foods.
Subjunctive casse
Though the technology of space food has beenis continuously déevelopped and studies continuously, the restrain to the choice ofd, the restrictions of a daily diet should exist, which is unthinkable for me.
Their curiosity ofand sense of duty to discover the truth or to contribute to the society should be outweigningh the interest ofor food.
It also seems like becoming an astronaut requires a certain personnality, a strong and toughknowledge of physics, good eyesight (if I'm not mistaken), mentemotional maturenessity, intelligence etc.
Yes, good eyesight is still a requirement for US astronauts.
Thus, it is an extreme priviledge to be able to go out ofleave Earth and see what's out there in the universe.
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よく書けています！
Sept. 21, 2022
前回引き続き、ありがとうございます！
The uUniverse
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With the structure of your original sentence, the conjunction should be "and" not "or."
Personnally, being a food loverie, I'm sure that I'm going to miss Japanese foods.
"food" in this sense is always used in the singular form.
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TFor someone to become an astronaut, their curiosity ofand sense of duty to discover the truth or to contribute to the society should be outweigningh their interest for food.
It is unclear who "they" is here, which is why I saw fit to add that first part. Saying "or to" is fine but because there are two layers of "or" here it's clearer in my opinion to just say "or contribute."
It also seems like becoming an astronaut requires a certain personnality, a strong and tough physicsque, good eyesight (if I'm not mistaken), mental matureness, intelligence, etc.
"Physique" (pronounced fi-ZEEK) is the word you are looking for.
Thus, it is an extreme priviledge to be able to go out ofleave Earth and see what's out there in the universe.
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I also find it hard to fathom leaving the comforts of earth to go to space. It would be cool, though! Maybe if commercial space travel becomes a thing within our lifetimes, that would give us a chance to visit space conveniently.
Sept. 21, 2022
I really thank you for having corrected my text in detail!! I would do the same, if it were a lot easier to prepare for the adventure, I would love to do it.
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