Sept. 8, 2022
The Train and Dragonfly Part2
This post is yesterday's continuation.
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On my previous trip, I was seeing outside the train windows.
When the train stopped at a station, a dragonfly came and sat on outside the window.
I thought the dragonfly would fly away, when the train start moving. But it stayed there.
The speed of the train was getting faster, so I thought the dragonfly would be thrown off soon, but It held on to it all the way.
The dragonfly swayed wildly like a ribbon fanned by strong wind.
It stayed there until almost next station.
I thought it was great.
この投稿は機能の続きです。
この前の旅行での話です。
電車に乗って窓の外を眺めていました。
すると、窓の外にトンボが停まりました。
電車が動き出したら飛んでいくと思いましたが、そのままとまっていました。
電車のスピードが早くなっていくので、すぐ振り落とされると思いましたが、ずっと頑張ってつかまっていました。
強風に煽られるリボンのように激しく揺れていました。
次の駅近くまでとまっていました。
すごいと思いました。
The Train and the Dragonfly . [Part2]
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On my previous trip, I was seelooking outside the train windowswindow of the train.
When the train stopped at a station, a dragonfly came and sat on the outside of the window.
I thought the dragonfly would fly away, when the train startbegan moving.
The speed of the train was gettingstarted to get faster, so I thought the dragonfly would be thrown off soon,fall off but It held on to it all the way.
The dragonfly swayed wildly like a ribbon fanned by strong wind.
It stayed there until we almost got to the next station.
I thought it was great.
Sept. 13, 2022
Thank you for your corrections.
The Train and the Dragonfly, Part 2
This post is yesterday'sa continuation of yesterday's post.
2)
On my previous trip, I was seelooking outside the train windows of the train.
For some reason, we use "look" to look out of windows instead of "see."
When the train stopped at a station, a dragonfly came and sat onlanded on the outside of the window.
I thought the dragonfly would fly away, when the train started moving.
But iIt stayed there, however.
The speed of the train was getting faster, so I thought the dragonfly would be thrown off soonat any moment, but It held on to it all thfast the whole way.
We don't have to mention "speed."
The dragonfly swayed wildly like a ribbon fanned by a strong wind.
It stayed there until almost until the next station.
I thought it was great.
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よく出来ました。
Sept. 13, 2022
Thank you for your corrections.
The Train and Dragonfly Part 2
This post is yesterday'sa continuation from yesterday.
On my previous trip, I was seelooking outside the train windows.
When the train stopped at a station, a dragonfly came and sat on the outside of the window.
I thought the dragonfly would fly away, when the train started moving.,
Bbut it stayed there.
I would make this and the previous into one sentence
The speed of the train was getting faster, so I thought the dragonfly would be thrown off soon, but Iit held on to it all the way.
The dragonfly swayed wildly like a ribbon fanned by strong wind.
It stayed there until almost the next station.
You could also say "It stayed there almost until the next station," or even "It almost stayed there until the next station" but that version 👆 sounds better
I thought it was great.
Sept. 13, 2022
Thank you for your corrections. They are very useful.
The Train and Dragonfly Part2 Two.
This post is yesterday'sa continuation from yesterday's post.
On my previous trip, I was seelooking outside the train windows.
I thought the dragonfly would fly away, when the train started moving.
The speed of the train was getting faster, so I thought the dragonfly would be thrown off soon, but Iit held on to ithe window all the way.
The dragonfly swayed wildly, like a ribbon being fanned out by strong wind.
Great sentence - it's very poetic!
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This sounds very cool! Great work - very readable. I've made some changes to sound more natural, but it's all very good.
Sept. 13, 2022
Thank you for your corrections. They are very useful.
This post is yesterday'sa continuation of yesterday's.
On my previous trip, I was seelooking outside the train windows.
I thought the dragonfly would fly away, when the train start moving.
You don't need a comma between away and when. If you wanted to, you could combine this sentence and the next to make "I thought the dragonfly would fly away when the train started moving, but it stayed there."
The speed of the train was getting faster, so I thought the dragonfly would be thrown off soon, but Iit held on to it all the way.
You don't need the "to it", and it doesn't make much sense here. What's it holding on to? The train? A railing?
The dragonfly swayed wildly like a ribbon fanned by strong wind.
It stayed there until almost the next station.
"almost until the next station" would sound more natural, but both make sense.
Sept. 13, 2022
Thank you for your corrections and comments. They are very useful.
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