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Mimi

May 31, 2020

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The things I want to learn

I want to learn web-design to come true my dream which I can work while traveling and promote to sell Japanese products to the world because there are hundreds of great quality products and respectable culture in Japan but many Japanese are not good at selling them and don’t know how to promote to the world especially in traditional industries.
In addition, they don’t have confidence to negotiate in English. I want to support them and improve Japanese economy.

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The things I want to learn

I want to learn web-design to come true my dream which I canmake dream come true, to work while traveling and promote to selling Japanese products to the world because there are. Japan has hundreds of great high-quality products and respectable culture in Japangood culture, but many Japanese are not good at selling them and don’t know how to promote them to the world especially in traditional industries.

This is a bit long, so it should be broken up into a few sentences. "Promote" needs an object to go with it, hence "promote them."

In addition, they don’t have the confidence to negotiate in English.

I want to support them and improve the Japanese economy.

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Mimi

May 31, 2020

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Thank you so much!

I want to learn web-design to come trumake my dream which I cancome true, to work while traveling and promote toand sell Japanese products to the world because there are hundreds of great quality products andfrom Japan, it has a very respectable culture in Japan b. But many Japanese are not good at selling them and don’t know how to promote to the world especially in traditional industries.

I am not sure about the first "," I put in. Perhaps there should be a ";" there instead!

In addition, they don’t have confidence to negotiate in English.

I want to support them and improve the Japanese economy.

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I think I can feel you putting a bit of your German into this with some of the word order.

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Mimi

May 31, 2020

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Really?! I didn't know that! I thought I forgot German at all! Thank you for correction!

The things I want to learn


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I want to learn web-design to come true my dream which I can work while traveling and promote to sell Japanese products to the world because there are hundreds of great quality products and respectable culture in Japan but many Japanese are not good at selling them and don’t know how to promote to the world especially in traditional industries.


I want to learn web-design to come trumake my dream which I cancome true, to work while traveling and promote toand sell Japanese products to the world because there are hundreds of great quality products andfrom Japan, it has a very respectable culture in Japan b. But many Japanese are not good at selling them and don’t know how to promote to the world especially in traditional industries.

I am not sure about the first "," I put in. Perhaps there should be a ";" there instead!

I want to learn web-design to come true my dream which I canmake dream come true, to work while traveling and promote to selling Japanese products to the world because there are. Japan has hundreds of great high-quality products and respectable culture in Japangood culture, but many Japanese are not good at selling them and don’t know how to promote them to the world especially in traditional industries.

This is a bit long, so it should be broken up into a few sentences. "Promote" needs an object to go with it, hence "promote them."

In addition, they don’t have confidence to negotiate in English.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

In addition, they don’t have the confidence to negotiate in English.

I want to support them and improve Japanese economy.


I want to support them and improve the Japanese economy.

I want to support them and improve the Japanese economy.

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