Oct. 10, 2025
The Sweet Fragrant Olives
In the morning, I went to the doctor and had a urine test and a blood test. Including the cost of the medicine, the total came to over ten thousand yen, which left me stunned by the unexpected expense.
In the afternoon, I spent about an hour reading in the garden. The sweet fragrance of the fragrant olives (osumanthus) was drifting through the air, and I felt it would be a shame to go back inside.
It was a long time since I’d spent such a leisurely, graceful time in the garden.
午前は医者に行って来て、尿検査や血液検査などを受け、薬代を含めると１万円を超えた。思わぬ出費に愕然とした。
午後は一時間ぐらい庭で読書をした。きんもくせいの甘い香りが漂っていて、家の中にもどるのがもったいないと思った。こんなに庭で優雅に過ごすのも久しぶりだった。
The Sweet Fragrant Olives
ALSO POSSIBLE: In the morning, I went to thea doctor andto hadve a urine test and a blood test.
NOTE: The original wording is also possible . . .
Including the cost of the medicine, the totalMORE SUCCINCTLY: The total cost of that visit came to over ten thousand yen, which left me stunned by the unexpected expense.
NOTE: The original wording is possible, but a bit needlessly wordy.
In the afternoon, I spent about an hour reading in the garden.
The sweet fragrance of the fragrant olives (osumanthus) was drifting through the air, and I felt it would be a shame to go back inside.
It was a long time since I’d spent such a leisurely, graceful time in the garden.
Feedback
Glad you enjoyed a leisurely afternoon.
In the morning, I went to the doctor this morning, and had a urine test and a blood test.
Including the cost of the medicine, the total came to over ten thousand yen, an expense which left me stunned by the unexpected expense.
In the afternoon, I spent about an hour reading in the garden.
The sweet fragrance of the fragrant olives (osumanthus) was drifting through the air, and I felt it would be a shame to go back inside.
It was a long time since I’d spent such a leisurely, graceful time in the garden.
Oct. 11, 2025
In the _, doesn't work at the start. Unexpected and stunned are the same. it can be written this way, with stunned at the end for effect. Repeating fragrance is a flag, but fragrant olives is also strange so it matches and seems okay to me. The rest is very sweet.
The Sweet Fragrant Olives
In the morning, I went to the doctor and had a urine test and a blood test.
Including the cost of the medicine, the total came to over ten thousand yen, which left me stunned by the unexpected expense.
In the afternoon, I spent about an hour reading in the garden.
The sweet fragrancescent of the fragrant olives (osumanthus) was drifting through the air, and I felt it would be a shame to go back inside.
Maybe a nitpick but "fragrance of fragrant" feels repetitive, so using a synonym for fragrance would be better. "Scent" or "smell" would work here. The original phrasing isn't wrong, this is just a style suggestion
It was a long time since I’d spent such a leisurely, graceful time in the garden.
Feedback
You write very well. Reading outside is nice when the weather allows
Oct. 10, 2025
Thank ou for your correction.
|
The Sweet Fragrant Olives This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
|
In the morning, I went to the doctor and had a urine test and a blood test. ALSO POSSIBLE: In the morning, I went to NOTE: The original wording is also possible . . . This sentence has been marked as perfect!
|
|
Including the cost of the medicine, the total came to over ten thousand yen, which left me stunned by the unexpected expense.
NOTE: The original wording is possible, but a bit needlessly wordy. This sentence has been marked as perfect! Including the cost of the medicine, the total came to over ten thousand yen, an expense which left me stunned |
|
In the afternoon, I spent about an hour reading in the garden. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
|
The sweet fragrance of the fragrant olives (osumanthus) was drifting through the air, and I felt it would be a shame to go back inside. This sentence has been marked as perfect! The sweet Maybe a nitpick but "fragrance of fragrant" feels repetitive, so using a synonym for fragrance would be better. "Scent" or "smell" would work here. The original phrasing isn't wrong, this is just a style suggestion This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
|
It was a long time since I’d spent such a leisurely, graceful time in the garden. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
You need LangCorrect Premium to access this feature.
Go Premium