The story of ratnag part-3

Kindred Spirit

Aug. 1, 2025

The story of ratnag part-3

Eagle 1:
No, my lord! She is telling the truth.
Naeena:
I can prove it. I saw the black jackal who ran into the jungle.
Follow me, I will show you the jackal's footprints.

So, the king and the eagle followed the footprints of the jackal with the help of Naeena.
At the waterfall, the footprints were missing, so they concluded that the jackal was the killer.
Eagle 2:
Forgive us, Miss. We wanted to harm you due to a misunderstanding.
Eagle 2:
We couldn’t even take care of our own child. So, please my lord, give us permission to go to our nest.
King Akram:
Take care of your children. You can go, Miss. Shall I help you reach your city?
Naeena:
No thanks, my lord. I will go by myself.
King Akram:
Your choice. Take care.
After King Akram and the eagles left, Naeena turned into a witch.
Witch:
I thought today was my last day, but the king came at the right time.
So that I can manipulate the eagles.

Then the witch called her pet, who was the black jackal.
His name was “Kalu.” Who brought the two eagle children in his mouth.
Then the witch and the eagles disappeared.

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The sStory of rRatnag pPart- 3

When we have titles like this in English every letter is always capitalized except for words like “of” and “and”. There’s also no need for a dash here

Eagle 1: No, my lord!

She is telling the truth.

Naeena: I can prove it.

I saw the black jackal who ran into the jungle.

Follow me, I will show you the jackal's footprints.

So, the king and the eagle followed the footprints of the jackal with the help of Naeena.

At the waterfall, the footprints were missing, so they concluded that the jackal was the killer.

Eagle 2: Forgive us, Miss.

We wanted to harm you due to a misunderstanding.

Eagle 2: We couldn’t even take care of our own child.

So, please my lord, give us permission to go to our nest.

King Akram: Take care of your children.

You can go, Miss.

Shall I help you reach your city?

Naeena: No thanks, my lord.

I will go by myself.

King Akram: Your choice.

Take care.

After King Akram and the eagles left, Naeena turned into a witch.

Witch: I thought today was my last day, but the king came at the right time.

So that I can manipulate the eagles.

Then the witch called her pet, who was the black jackal.

His name was “Kalu.” Who brought the two eagle children in his mouth.

Then the witch and the eagles disappeared.

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Very good for the most part!

kaysik

The story of ratnag part-3

Eagle 1: No, my lord!

She is telling the truth.

Naeena: I can prove it.

I saw the black jackal who ran into the jungle.

Follow me, I will show you the jackal's footprints.

So, the king and the eagle followed the footprints of the jackal with the help of Naeena.

At the waterfall, the footprints ~~were missing~~ended, so they concluded that the jackal was the killer.

"were missing" isn't grammatically wrong, but doesn't sound very natural. You could also rearrange it like "The footprints ended at the waterfall, so they...".

Eagle 2: Forgive us, Miss.

We wanted to harm you due to a misunderstanding.

Eagle 2: We couldn’t even take care of our own child.

So, please my lord, give us permission to go to our nest.

King Akram: Take care of your children.

You can go, Miss.

Shall I help you reach your city?

Naeena: No thanks, my lord.

I will go by myself.

King Akram: Your choice.

Take care.

After King Akram and the eagles left, Naeena turned into a witch.

Witch: I thought today was my last day, but the king came at the right time.

So that I can manipulate the eagles.

Then the witch called her pet, who was the black jackal.

His name was “Kalu.” Who brought the two eagle children in his mouth.

Then the witch and the eagles disappeared.

The story of ratnag part-3