Oct. 4, 2020
the story from my granduncle #2
In the 20th century of Hong Kong, there were two major ways to smuggle people. Swimming at night across the Sham Chun River, which is located between HongKong and Shen Zhen, to arrive in HongKong is the most dangerous one. Another was to pay money to local fishermen to hide in boats to avoid the British army patrol crossing the river. Because my granduncle was as poor as a church mouse, he didn't have extra money for fishermen. So he had to swim to smuggle. Every time he talked about his experiment, I could see tears in his eyes. To prevent the unlimited stowaways crossing the river, during that period, the British government published a policy; once the stowaways were found crossing the river, the army police had a right to fire. Granduncle sadly said; “ I could hear gunshots in the darkness, bullets flying as Death kissed the river, saw blood from my peers, smelled rust odor in the air when I swam crossing the river as one of the stowaways. This experience torments me in my whole life. ” In my granduncle’s words, I was deeply shocked and a bleak and depressive aura infected me.
the sA Story from mMy gGranduncle: Part #2
There are a few ways you could rework this title; this is just my choice.
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I read farther down and saw that this is a story about how your granduncle snuck into the city. You don't say that a person smuggled him or herself somewhere.
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AnThe other was to pay money to local fishermen to let you hide in their boats to avoid the British army patrol crossing the river.
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It's unusual to talk about someone smuggling him/herself.
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Granduncle sadly said;, “ I could hear gunshots in the darkness, bullets flying as Death kissed the river, saw blood from my peers, smelled a rusty odor in the air when I swam acrossing the river as one of the stowaways.
This experience has tormentsed me in my whole life."
” InI was deeply shocked by my granduncle’'s words, I was deeply shocked and a bleak and depressive aura infectenveloped me.
Oct. 4, 2020
thank you ~ If you need me to make corrections in Chinese, welcome to ask me.
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the story from my granduncle #2
There are a few ways you could rework this title; this is just my choice. |
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In the 20th century of Hong Kong, there were two major ways to smuggle people. In I read farther down and saw that this is a story about how your granduncle snuck into the city. You don't say that a person smuggled him or herself somewhere. |
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Swimming at night across the Sham Chun River, which is located between HongKong and Shen Zhen, to arrive in HongKong is the most dangerous one. Swimming at night across the Sham Chun River, which is located between Hong Kong and Shen Zhen, to arrive in Hong Kong |
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Another was to pay money to local fishermen to hide in boats to avoid the British army patrol crossing the river.
Since you're listing two things, you can say "one... the other...". |
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Because my granduncle was as poor as a church mouse, he didn't have extra money for fishermen. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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So he had to swim to smuggle. So, he had to swim to It's unusual to talk about someone smuggling him/herself. |
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Every time he talked about his experiment, I could see tears in his eyes. Every time he talked about his experi |
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To prevent the unlimited stowaways crossing the river, during that period, the British government published a policy; once the stowaways were found crossing the river, the army police had a right to fire. To If a person is just swimming across the river and not hidden in a boat or something, they are not a stowaway. |
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Granduncle sadly said; “ I could hear gunshots in the darkness, bullets flying as Death kissed the river, saw blood from my peers, smelled rust odor in the air when I swam crossing the river as one of the stowaways. Granduncle sadly said |
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This experience torments me in my whole life. This experience has torment |
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” In my granduncle’s words, I was deeply shocked and a bleak and depressive aura infected me.
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