Aug. 6, 2020
the standards of a president
In 2016, a bleak year of some, it is the last year of Obama's term-end. And a new president, Donald Trump, will strut on the world stage. I still remember the second day when Trump won in the election, people fell in bleak mood in my school. Through my teachers' eyes, I knew they cried overnight and didn't accept the truth that Trump became the new president. In my English class, my teacher choked and looked upset. She required to write a short essay for the personal review of Trump. As an only international student in the class, I hard to understand why they had a heavy-reaction. For this result, I can't write down anything. On my way, as a Chinese who grow up in a dictatorship system, I believe that President Trump enables make America great again. On the other side, I don't want my fatherland to face a restarting America. so that, I also disappointed Trump's won. Under the reaction of Trump's won in my school, I was inspired and started thinking about what are the standards of a president and why the majority don't like Trump until now.
tThe standards ofor a president
In 2016, a bleak year ofor some, it iwas the last year of Obama's term-endpresidency.
And a new president, Donald Trump, willould strut on the world stage.
I still remember that the second day when Trump won in the election, people fell into bleak mood in my school.
ThroughFrom my teachers' eyes, I knew they had cried overnight and didn't accept the truth that Trump had becaome the new president.
Trump became president before they didn’t accept those events, so as this is not part of something sequential, you need to use the pluperfect.
In my English class, my teacher choked up and looked upset.
She required us to write a short essay for theexpressing our personal reviews of Trump.
As an only international student in the class, I hardit was hard for me to understand why they had a heavy-strong reaction to Trump.
For this result, I can'Because of that, I couldn’t write down anything.
I think you meant to write “as a result,” but that expression is used more to describe a direct chain of causation.
On my way, as a Chinese person who groew up in a dictatorship system, I believe that President Trump enables make America to achieve greatness again.
Some words for ethnicity or nationality can be used alone as nouns, but “Chinese” is not one of them.
On the other sidehand, I don't want my fatherland to face a restartemerging America.
so that, IThus, I was also disappointed that Trump's won.
UnderBecause of the reaction tof Trump's woin in my school, I was inspired and started thinking about what are the standards ofor a president are and why the majority don'has not liked Trump until now.
You must be inspired to do something, but here what that was wasn’t explicitly stated and it wasn’t entirely clear from context.
The question here is indirect so “are” goes after “the standards for a president.”
“Until now” implies that the majority now likes Trump, which I’m guessing is not what you meant to say.
Aug. 9, 2020
thank you help me fix my writing. One more question for the last sentence, I wanted to express an idea, which recognizes from the reactions of my school, is that the difference between people how to examination their president Trump in all the forms. Do you have any idea how to express this idea down and make it clear? thank you very much.
Aug. 9, 2020
I'm not completely sure if I have the right idea of what you want to say, but I would probably write: "This reaction from my school inspired me to think about the different ways people understand and react to Trump." (I'm using "understand" more in the sense of "conceive" or "analyze.")
Aug. 9, 2020
If I want to express a personal view from people, which from different countries, have different standard for their own president. could you help me to express this idea clearly, please?
Aug. 9, 2020
I see. That's a bit precise than what I had. What you have is actually pretty close. I would write: "People from different countries have different standards for their president." Or, to combine it with the previous part: "The reaction from my school made me realize that people from different countries have different standards for their leaders." ("President" is fine, but "leader" seems better to me because some countries don't have such a title.)
the standards ofor a president
In 2016, a bleakthe last year of some, it is the last year of Obama's term-endObama's term, was a bleak year for some.
AndNow a new president, Donald Trump, will strut onep on to the world stage.
I still remember the second day when Trump won in the election, people fell into a bleak mood in my school.
Through my teachers' eyes, I knew they cried overnight and didn't accept the truthreality that Trump became the new president.
This more a stylistic change than a grammatical one. It sounds more natural to say they didn't accept reality because you are talking about a specific real-world situation.
In my English class, my teacher choked up and looked upset.
She required us to write a short essay for theon our personal review of Trump.
As anthe only international student in the class, I had a hard toime understanding why they had a heavy-such an extreme reaction.
For this resultason, I caouldn't write down anything.
OIn my wayopinion, as a Chinese person who groew up in a dictatorshipial system, I believe that President Trump enables citizens to make America great again.
I added citizens because if you use the verb "to enable", the direct object must be a noun.
On the other side, I don't want my fatherland to face a restarturging America.
so thatSo in that sense, I also disappointed that Trump's won.
UnderBecause of the reaction tof Trump's woin in my school, I was inspired and started thinking about what are the standards ofor a president and why the majority of people in America don't like Trump until now.
Feedback
I hope you find my corrections helpful. I share a lot of the same feelings about the president as the people in your school.
Aug. 9, 2020
thank you very much. Since the schools gradually close down, I on your side now. Hoping Trump will be voted out of the election in November.
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In 2016, a bleak year of some, it is the last year of Obama's term-end.
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And a new president, Donald Trump, will strut on the world stage.
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I still remember the second day when Trump won in the election, people fell in bleak mood in my school. I still remember the second day when Trump won in the election, people fell into a bleak mood in my school. I still remember that the second day when Trump won in the election, people fell into bleak mood in my school. |
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Through my teachers' eyes, I knew they cried overnight and didn't accept the truth that Trump became the new president. Through my teachers' eyes, I knew they cried overnight and didn't accept the This more a stylistic change than a grammatical one. It sounds more natural to say they didn't accept reality because you are talking about a specific real-world situation.
Trump became president before they didn’t accept those events, so as this is not part of something sequential, you need to use the pluperfect. |
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In my English class, my teacher choked and looked upset. In my English class, my teacher choked up and looked upset. In my English class, my teacher choked up and looked upset. |
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She required to write a short essay for the personal review of Trump. She required us to write a short essay She required us to write a short essay |
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As an only international student in the class, I hard to understand why they had a heavy-reaction. As As an only international student in the class, |
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For this result, I can't write down anything. For this re
I think you meant to write “as a result,” but that expression is used more to describe a direct chain of causation. |
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On my way, as a Chinese who grow up in a dictatorship system, I believe that President Trump enables make America great again.
I added citizens because if you use the verb "to enable", the direct object must be a noun. On my way, as a Chinese person who gr Some words for ethnicity or nationality can be used alone as nouns, but “Chinese” is not one of them. |
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On the other side, I don't want my fatherland to face a restarting America. On the other side, I don't want my fatherland to face a res On the other |
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so that, I also disappointed Trump's won.
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Under the reaction of Trump's won in my school, I was inspired and started thinking about what are the standards of a president and why the majority don't like Trump until now.
You must be inspired to do something, but here what that was wasn’t explicitly stated and it wasn’t entirely clear from context. The question here is indirect so “are” goes after “the standards for a president.” “Until now” implies that the majority now likes Trump, which I’m guessing is not what you meant to say. |
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