June 17, 2022
The Silent Sea (Spoiler)
I'm going to do a big spoiler, so if you are thinking to watch this series, better stop reading now. This entertaining and intersting TV drama, that takes place in a Korean base in the moon's surface has ,however, some noticiable errors.
The first, is about the moon gravity, 1/6 part of Earth, but the astronauts shouldn't know it (irony:on) and move in the same manner than in Earth.
The second problem is even worse. An human can walking and live on the exterior of base without her astronaut suit and breathing nothing, because by I know, on the moon, in the practice, almost there is not atmosphere.
The Silent Sea (Spoiler)
I'm going to dogive a big spoiler, so if you are thinking to watch this series, better stop reading now.
This entertaining and interesting TV drama, that takes place in a Korean base ion the moon's surface, has ,however, some noticiable errors.
The however seemed to be unnecessary.
The first, is about the moon's gravity, which is 1/6 part of Earth, but the astronauts shouldn't know it (irony:on) and move in the same manner than ias on Earth.
An human can walking and live on the exterior of base without her astronaut suit and breathing nothing, because by I know, that on the moon, in the practice, almost there is almost not atmosphere.
Feedback
Overall you did very well. I would work on conjugations with two verbs present. The largest issue seems to be your use of commas. Sometimes it might be necessary just to make two sentences or cut out the unnecessary sections.
June 22, 2022
Thanks a lot for you feedback. I'll keep it in mind.
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I'm going to do a big spoiler, so if you are thinking to watch this series, better stop reading now. I'm going to |
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This entertaining and intersting TV drama, that takes place in a Korean base in the moon's surface has ,however, some noticiable errors. This entertaining and interesting TV drama, that takes place in a Korean base The however seemed to be unnecessary. |
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The first, is about the moon gravity, 1/6 part of Earth, but the astronauts shouldn't know it (irony:on) and moves in the same manner than in Earth. |
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The second problem is even worse. |
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An human can walking and live on the exterior of base without her astronaut suit and breathing nothing, because by I know, on the moon, in the practice, almost there is not atmosphere. A |
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The first, is about the moon gravity, 1/6 part of Earth, but the astronauts shouldn't know it (irony:on) and move in the same manner than in Earth. The first |
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