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dannymleone

July 29, 2020

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The Second Chance

I randomly choose words, expressions, phrasal verbs etc. from my flash cards and my task is to incorporate them into meaningful sentence/s or a short story.

VOID, PLUMMET, PIVOTAL, JUNIPER BUSH, MAKE A HASH OF SMTH., UNCONVENTIONAL, FEEL GIDDY, SMITTEN, SALUBRIOUS, FLEXING

Wow…Look who’s here.
Our eagle fallen from the sky.
I know why you are here. Because you have nowhere to go, haven’t you? Life is tricky, isn’t it?
Can you remember how all it start?
Your self-confidence, arrogance and sometimes unconventional approach to resolve the financial problems made you a name for yourself and fortune in a really short period of time.
And from that moment the fall has begun.
You began losing loyal friends by flexing in front of them every flat you live in, every car you drive, every girl you date.
You were obsessed with money and felt giddy of the power and fame that it gave to you.
You were so smitten…smitten by yourself.
And then, the same traits that help you became rich and famous played a cruel trick on you. Little did you see that the people you consider as your friends hate you and was conspiring against you convincing you made one pivotal decision that eventually leads to plummeting your fame and wealth literally overnight.
After that you were being hunted by government, media, creditors and even mobsters. You tried to hide like a little bird in the juniper bushes, flinching every time you heard any footsteps outside the door.
You lost everything; loyal friends, the girl you were in love with, money, cars, houses, fame, respect, honor…You made a hash of your life…You are about to touch the void.
And now, you are here, at doorsteps of those whose trust you betrayed…your family.
You know, I think it for the best. All that has happened is a blessing in disguise. I hope it’ll be an awakening moment and a salubrious turn for your mind and your maimed soul.
Anyway, you must know. We have loved you all this time, and I believe that EVERYONE DESERVES A SECOND CHANCE.

Corrections

I randomly choose words, expressions, phrasal verbs, etc.

from my flash cards and my task is to incorporate them into meaningful sentence/s(s) or a short story.

Can you remember how all of it started?

You could also say "how it all started".

Little did you seeknow that the people you consider ased your friends hated you and wasere conspiring against you, convincing you to madke one pivotal decision that eventually leads to plummetingd to your fame and wealth plummeting literally overnight.

After that you were being hunted by the government, the media, creditors and even mobsters.

Wow…L look who’s here.

Can you remember how all it started?

Your self-confidence, arrogance and sometimes unconventional approach to resolve theing financial problems made you a name for yourself and a fortune in a really short period of time.

And from that moment the fall has beguan.

You began losing loyal friends by flexing in front of them every flat you lived in, every car you driove, every girl you dated.

You were obsessed with money and felt giddy ofat the power and fame that it gave to you.

You were so smitten… smitten by yourself.

And then, the same traits that helped you becaome rich and famous played a cruel trick on you.

Little did you see that the people you considered as your friends hated you and wasere conspiring against you convincing you to madke one pivotal decision that eventually leadsd to plummeting your fame and wealth literally overnight.

You tried to hide like a little bird in the juniper bushes, flinching every time you heard any footsteps outside the door.

You lost everything; loyal friends, the girl you were in love with, money, cars, houses, fame, respect, honor. You made a hash of your life. You awere about to touch the void.

And now, you are here, at the doorsteps of those whose trust you betrayed: your family.

You know, I think it is for the best.

I hope it’ll be an moment of awakening moment and a salubriousand a healthy turn for your mind and your maimed soul.

not a mistake, just substituting a common word for a very uncommon one to create a more even tone.

EDIT: oh it was one of the target words, never mind.

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dannymleone

July 30, 2020

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Thank you. As I see i have some problem with Past Simple, and the same difficulties with articles and prepositions.

I randomly choose words, expressions, phrasal verbs etc.


I randomly choose words, expressions, phrasal verbs, etc.

The Second Chance


from my flash cards and my task is to incorporate them into meaningful sentence/s or a short story.


from my flash cards and my task is to incorporate them into meaningful sentence/s(s) or a short story.

VOID, PLUMMET, PIVOTAL, JUNIPER BUSH, MAKE A HASH OF SMTH., UNCONVENTIONAL, FEEL GIDDY, SMITTEN, SALUBRIOUS, FLEXING


Wow…Look who’s here.


Wow…L look who’s here.

Our eagle fallen from the sky.


I know why you are here.


Because you have nowhere to go, haven’t you?


Life is tricky, isn’t it?


Can you remember how all it start?


Can you remember how all it started?

Can you remember how all of it started?

You could also say "how it all started".

Your self-confidence, arrogance and sometimes unconventional approach to resolve the financial problems made you a name for yourself and fortune in a really short period of time.


Your self-confidence, arrogance and sometimes unconventional approach to resolve theing financial problems made you a name for yourself and a fortune in a really short period of time.

And from that moment the fall has begun.


And from that moment the fall has beguan.

You began losing loyal friends by flexing in front of them every flat you live in, every car you drive, every girl you date.


You began losing loyal friends by flexing in front of them every flat you lived in, every car you driove, every girl you dated.

You were obsessed with money and felt giddy of the power and fame that it gave to you.


You were obsessed with money and felt giddy ofat the power and fame that it gave to you.

You were so smitten…smitten by yourself.


You were so smitten… smitten by yourself.

And then, the same traits that help you became rich and famous played a cruel trick on you.


And then, the same traits that helped you becaome rich and famous played a cruel trick on you.

Little did you see that the people you consider as your friends hate you and was conspiring against you convincing you made one pivotal decision that eventually leads to plummeting your fame and wealth literally overnight.


Little did you see that the people you considered as your friends hated you and wasere conspiring against you convincing you to madke one pivotal decision that eventually leadsd to plummeting your fame and wealth literally overnight.

Little did you seeknow that the people you consider ased your friends hated you and wasere conspiring against you, convincing you to madke one pivotal decision that eventually leads to plummetingd to your fame and wealth plummeting literally overnight.

After that you were being hunted by government, media, creditors and even mobsters.


After that you were being hunted by the government, the media, creditors and even mobsters.

You tried to hide like a little bird in the juniper bushes, flinching every time you heard any footsteps outside the door.


You tried to hide like a little bird in the juniper bushes, flinching every time you heard any footsteps outside the door.

You lost everything; loyal friends, the girl you were in love with, money, cars, houses, fame, respect, honor…You made a hash of your life…You are about to touch the void.


You lost everything; loyal friends, the girl you were in love with, money, cars, houses, fame, respect, honor. You made a hash of your life. You awere about to touch the void.

And now, you are here, at doorsteps of those whose trust you betrayed…your family.


And now, you are here, at the doorsteps of those whose trust you betrayed: your family.

You know, I think it for the best.


You know, I think it is for the best.

All that has happened is a blessing in disguise.


I hope it’ll be an awakening moment and a salubrious turn for your mind and your maimed soul.


I hope it’ll be an moment of awakening moment and a salubriousand a healthy turn for your mind and your maimed soul.

not a mistake, just substituting a common word for a very uncommon one to create a more even tone. EDIT: oh it was one of the target words, never mind.

Anyway, you must know.


We have loved you all this time, and I believe that EVERYONE DESERVES A SECOND CHANCE.


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