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kikokun

yesterday

5
The Scent of Curry

I visited a quiet café nestled along the Naguri River. The curry they serve there is absolutely exquisite, and its mouthwatering aroma lingered in the air throughout the entire shop.
When I stopped by in the morning once before, it was only 10 a.m., yet a group of bikers were already digging into the curry. Unable to resist, I ended up ordering it too.

Today, since I had already eaten lunch, I just had coffee and managed to hold back but even after I got home, the smell of that curry still wouldn’t leave me. I wondered if the scent had somehow clung to my nose or maybe my brain had been numbed by it. It was a strange feeling.


名栗川沿いにひっそりとたたずむCaféに行ってきた。ここのお店のカレーは絶品で終始そのいい匂いが店内にただよっていた。以前、午前に伺った時はまだ10時なのにライダーたちがこのカレーを食っていて、たまらずぼくも注文してしまった。今日はお昼を食べた後だから、コーヒーだけで我慢したけど、家に帰ってからもこのカレーのにおいがずっと消えなかった。鼻ににおいがこびりついたのかな。それとも脳が麻痺しっちゃったのか、不思議だった。

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The Scent of Curry

I visited a quiet café nestllocated along the Naguri River.

"Nestled" sounds like something is surrounded by something else from all sides, so it's a little strange to say "nestled along [a river]" where the river is only on one side of it. It would be more natural to use the phrase "nestled within" when something is surrounded on all sides. You can still use the word "nestled" in this sentence by saying:

"I visited a quiet cafe nestled within a small area along the Naguri River."

The curry they serve there is absolutely exquisite, and its mouthwatering aroma lingered in the air throughout the entire shop.

When I stopped by in the morning once before, it was only 10 a.m., yet a group of bikers were already digging into their plates of curry.

The phrase "digging into the curry" can sound like they're eating from the large pot of curry in the kitchen, so I corrected it to be more clear.

Unable to resist, I ended up ordering it too.

Today, since I had already eaten lunch, I just had coffee and managed to hold back but even after I got home, the smell of that curry still wouldn’t leave me. (or: leave my mind)

I wondered if the scent had somehow clung to my nose or maybe my brain had been numbed by it.

It was a strange feeling.

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Well done! You described the curry so well that even I'm craving for curry now. 😂

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kikokun

today

5

Haha. Thank you for your corrections.

The curry they serve there is absolutely exquisite, and its mouthwatering aroma lingereds in the air throughout the entire shop.

Be careful when you change verb tenses.

Using present makes the statement a general statement that is not necessarily timebound. That is the first half. The second half is more specific to a moment. If you want to keep it that way, you need to indicate what moment:
"The curry they serve there is absolutely exquisite, and today, the mouthwatering aroma lingered in the air throughout the entire shop."

When I stopped by in thone morning once before, it was only 10 a.m., yet a group of bikers were already digging into the curry.

To make it more concise and simple: "when I stopped by one morning"

Today, since I had already eaten lunch, Iand I had just had coffee and, I managed to hold back b. But even after I got home, the smell of that curry still wouldn’t leave me.

OR "since I had already eaten lunch and just had coffee, ...
I moved your articles around a bit to make it read better. And also, your sentence is getting a bit run-on-y, so I split it into two.

I wondered if the scent had somehow clung to my nose or maybe my brain had been numbed by it.

I agree with the other correction, numb is an odd word choice. I'm not sure what you're trying to describe with this.

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I want some of that curry too...

The Scent of Curry

I visited a quiet café nestled along the Naguri River.

The curry they serve there is absolutely exquisite, and its mouthwatering aroma lingereds in the air throughout the entire shop.

Changing tense to be consistent with verb serve

When I stopped by in the morning once before, it was only 10 a.m., yetI saw a group of bikers were already digging into the curry though it was only 10 AM.

Unable to resist, I ended up ordering it too.

Today, since I had already eaten lunch, I just had coffee and managed to hold back, but even after I got home, the smell of that curry still wouldn’t leave me.

I wondered if the scent had somehow clung to my nose or maybe my brain had been numbed by it.

The sentence isn't wrong but I think "numbed by it" doesn't make sense here. I feel like you mean something more along the lines of was obsessed with it?

It was a strange feeling.

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Sounds delicious, I'm curious!

When I stopped by in the morning once before, it was only 10 a.m., yet a group of bikers were already digging into the curry.

Adding 'when' at the start of the sentence is unnatural here. It's grammatically correct but it sounds strange

Today, since I had already eaten lunch, I just had coffee and managed to hold back but even afteronce I got home, the smell of that curry still wouldn’t leave me.

The word 'after' here is fine but I think the word 'once' better describes what you are trying to convey. This is super minor though so I wouldn't worry about it

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Good in terms of grammar and spelling

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kikokun

yesterday

5

Thank you for your corrections and useful comment.

The Scent of Curry

I visited a quiet café nestled along the Naguri River.

The curry they serve there is absolutely exquisite, and its mouthwatering aroma lingered in the air throughout the entire shop.

When I stopped by in the morning once before, it was only 10 a.m., yet a group of bikers were already digging into the curry.

Unable to resist, I ended up ordering it too.

Today, since I had already eaten lunch, I just had coffee and managed to hold back but even after I got home, the smell of that curry still wouldn’t leave me.

I wondered if the scent had somehow clung to my nose or maybe my brain had been numbed by it.

It was a strange feeling.

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kikokun

yesterday

5

Thank you!

The Scent of Curry


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I visited a quiet café nestled along the Naguri River.


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I visited a quiet café nestllocated along the Naguri River.

"Nestled" sounds like something is surrounded by something else from all sides, so it's a little strange to say "nestled along [a river]" where the river is only on one side of it. It would be more natural to use the phrase "nestled within" when something is surrounded on all sides. You can still use the word "nestled" in this sentence by saying: "I visited a quiet cafe nestled within a small area along the Naguri River."

The curry they serve there is absolutely exquisite, and its mouthwatering aroma lingered in the air throughout the entire shop.


The curry they serve there is absolutely exquisite, and its mouthwatering aroma lingereds in the air throughout the entire shop.

Changing tense to be consistent with verb serve

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The curry they serve there is absolutely exquisite, and its mouthwatering aroma lingereds in the air throughout the entire shop.

Be careful when you change verb tenses. Using present makes the statement a general statement that is not necessarily timebound. That is the first half. The second half is more specific to a moment. If you want to keep it that way, you need to indicate what moment: "The curry they serve there is absolutely exquisite, and today, the mouthwatering aroma lingered in the air throughout the entire shop."

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When I stopped by in the morning once before, it was only 10 a.m., yet a group of bikers were already digging into the curry.


When I stopped by in the morning once before, it was only 10 a.m., yetI saw a group of bikers were already digging into the curry though it was only 10 AM.

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When I stopped by in the morning once before, it was only 10 a.m., yet a group of bikers were already digging into the curry.

Adding 'when' at the start of the sentence is unnatural here. It's grammatically correct but it sounds strange

When I stopped by in thone morning once before, it was only 10 a.m., yet a group of bikers were already digging into the curry.

To make it more concise and simple: "when I stopped by one morning"

When I stopped by in the morning once before, it was only 10 a.m., yet a group of bikers were already digging into their plates of curry.

The phrase "digging into the curry" can sound like they're eating from the large pot of curry in the kitchen, so I corrected it to be more clear.

Unable to resist, I ended up ordering it too.


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Today, since I had already eaten lunch, I just had coffee and managed to hold back but even after I got home, the smell of that curry still wouldn’t leave me.


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Today, since I had already eaten lunch, I just had coffee and managed to hold back but even afteronce I got home, the smell of that curry still wouldn’t leave me.

The word 'after' here is fine but I think the word 'once' better describes what you are trying to convey. This is super minor though so I wouldn't worry about it

Today, since I had already eaten lunch, I just had coffee and managed to hold back, but even after I got home, the smell of that curry still wouldn’t leave me.

Today, since I had already eaten lunch, Iand I had just had coffee and, I managed to hold back b. But even after I got home, the smell of that curry still wouldn’t leave me.

OR "since I had already eaten lunch and just had coffee, ... I moved your articles around a bit to make it read better. And also, your sentence is getting a bit run-on-y, so I split it into two.

Today, since I had already eaten lunch, I just had coffee and managed to hold back but even after I got home, the smell of that curry still wouldn’t leave me. (or: leave my mind)

I wondered if the scent had somehow clung to my nose or maybe my brain had been numbed by it.


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I wondered if the scent had somehow clung to my nose or maybe my brain had been numbed by it.

The sentence isn't wrong but I think "numbed by it" doesn't make sense here. I feel like you mean something more along the lines of was obsessed with it?

I wondered if the scent had somehow clung to my nose or maybe my brain had been numbed by it.

I agree with the other correction, numb is an odd word choice. I'm not sure what you're trying to describe with this.

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It was a strange feeling.


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