Jan. 27, 2021
Korea has a problems for solution. That is a reunification. All men who is health must have the duty of national defense. Because, The war is not over. South Korea and North Korea are in a state of truce until now. Why do we need to the reunification? First of all, The government are spending a lot of moneys to military. It is mandatory to go to the army. The budgets of national defense expenditure are spent to the army. If South and North are to be reunification, The government can reduce that costs. These costs can usually use other parts such as welfare and infrastructure. Secondly, We are a homogeneous country. We are using a same language and We have a same culture and history. There are many separated families both south and north due to the war. How do we know their pain? They want to meet as soon as possible. Lastly, What would happen if South-North were a same country? Korea has a numerous human resources. Samsung, LG, Hyundai and Kia company are popular all of the world. In other hand, There is a natural resources in North. If we are integrated, We will more grow up to have a advantage each country.
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Great Job! Just a few corrections!
The relationship of between South korea and North Korea.
Korea has a problems for solutionunification problem.
That is a reunification.
I combined this sentence with the last one.
All men who is healthy musten have the duty of national defenseto defend the country, because war is not over.
Because, The war is not over.
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However, South Korea and North Korea are in a state of truce untilright now.
Why do we need to the reunificationy?
First of all, TheSouth Korean government areis spending a lot of moneys to on the military.
It is mandatory to go toserve in the army.
The budgets of national defense expenditure are spent to the army.cost of maintaining an army for national defense represents a big portion of the budget.
If the South and the North are to be reunification, The governmented, both sides can reduce that costs.
These costs can usually use other parts such asould be re-apportioned to fund welfare and infrastructure.
Secondly, Wwe are a homogeneous country.
We are using ause the same language and Wwe have athe same culture and history.
There are many separated families both south and northMany families are separated on both sides due to the war.
How do we know their pain?
When you pose a question, you should follow up by a response. For instance, you asked "how do we know their pain?". Do you know it through reading news articles, watching documentaries, studying it in school?
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Lastly, Wwhat would happen if South-Northboth Koreas were athe same country?
Korea has a numerous human resouvery talented workforces.
Furthermore, companies such as Samsung, LG, Hyundai and Kia company are popular all ofver the world.
In other hand, There is a natural resources inThe same talented workforce also exist in the North.
If we are integrated, We will more grow up to have a advantage each country.reunified, each side would be able to benefit from the other.
To bIn order to achieve reunification, Denuclearization is the name of the game. disarmament has to happen.
Nuclear isweapons are a big threatening to kKorea and also other countries.s well as the rest of the world.
So North government should give up to make a nuclearin my view, I think North Korea should disarm its nuclear weapons.
You have such good ideas and I can totally relate to the desire for families to reunite.
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The relationship of between South korea and North. The relationship of between South The In English, the first letter of all nouns, verbs, adverbs, adjetives, needs to be capitalized in the title. I don't know why, but it feels more natural to write it "North and South" than "South and North". |
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Korea has a problems for solution. Korea has a Korea has a problem I wasn't really sure what you wanted to say here, so I guessed. If you send me a description, I might be able to phrase it better. |
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That is a reunification.
I combined this sentence with the last one.
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All men who is health must have the duty of national defense. All All men who |
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Because, The war is not over.
combined the sentence with the last one. Because "Is not" is often said/written as "isn't". |
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South Korea and North Korea are in a state of truce until now. However, South Korea and North Korea are in a South Korea and North Korea |
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Why do we need to the reunification? Why do we need to Why do we need to |
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First of all, The government are spending a lot of moneys to military. First of all, First of all, |
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It is mandatory to go to the army. It is mandatory to It is mandatory to "It is" is often said/written as "It's". |
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The budgets of national defense expenditure are spent to the army. The The budgets of I'm not really sure what you mean here. In English, the first letter of all proper nouns are capitalized, (ex: Mount Everest). |
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If South and North are to be reunification, The government can reduce that costs. If the South and the North are to be reunifi If |
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These costs can usually use other parts such as welfare and infrastructure. These costs c These costs |
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Secondly, We are a homogeneous country. Secondly, Secondly, "We are" is often written/said as "we're". I'm not sure that "homogenous" is the right word here. |
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We are using a same language and We have a same culture and history. We We |
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There are many separated families both south and north due to the war.
There are many separated families in both |
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How do we know their pain? How do we know their pain? When you pose a question, you should follow up by a response. For instance, you asked "how do we know their pain?". Do you know it through reading news articles, watching documentaries, studying it in school?
I wasn't really sure what you were trying to say here. |
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They want to meet as soon as possible. The This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Lastly, What would happen if South-North were a same country? Lastly, Lastly, |
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Korea has a numerous human resources. Korea has a Korea has |
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Samsung, LG, Hyundai and Kia company are popular all of the world. Furthermore, companies such as Samsung, LG, Hyundai and Kia Companies like Samsung, LG, Hyundai, and Kia |
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In other hand, There is a natural resources in North.
"On the other hand" is generally used when you're making a counterpoint. |
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If we are integrated, We will more grow up to have a advantage each country. If we are If we are |
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To be reunification, Denuclearization is the name of the game.
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Nuclear is threatening to korea and also other countries. Nuclear Nuclear |
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So North government should give up to make a nuclear. So You have such good ideas and I can totally relate to the desire for families to reunite. So the North Korean government should give up |
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