The Recent Big Step of Homo Sapiens

Ladia

Nov. 4, 2021

The Recent Big Step of Homo Sapiens

Our current life expectancy is between 60 and 80 years, depending on the country. A human life happens in the blink of an eye when compared to the age of the universe, being around 13.8 billion years. Some might say that our life is meaningless because we will most probably be forgotten.

We are part of the human species—the one that can make extraordinary things of which would previous generations only dream. The one that is exploring the universe and trying their best to recognize how it works. Even if our individual contribution is small, it still matters. Over centuries, our race will accumulate more and more knowledge and do things that we haven't done before. I like to think that we should do the best that we are capable of. I really want to see where we'll be in 50 years or more. I hope I'll still be here to see it, even if it's just a tiny fraction of the history of humankind. I want to know what awaits us in the future, and I want to participate in creating it.

Just think how the lives of humans changed in the past twenty years. Information sharing has increased enormously with the arrival of computers and the Internet. We can learn as never before, we can use computational power as never before. And all that came just in the past few decades. Homo sapiens have inhabited the earth for about 200 thousand years. And it was in the past few decades that this huge happened. This is exciting.

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The Recent Big Step of Homo Sapiens

Our current life expectancy is between 60 and 80 years, depending on the country.

A human life happens in the blink of an eye when compared to the age of the universe, being around 13.8 billion years.

Some might say that our life is meaningless because we will most probably be forgotten.

We are part of the human species—the one that can make extraordinary things of which would previous generations only dream.

The one that is exploring the universe and trying their best to recognize how it works.

Even if our individual contribution is small, it still matters.

Over centuries, our race will accumulate more and more knowledge and do things that we haven't done before.

I like to think that we should ~~do the best that we are capable of.~~try our best

Your version in completely correct, I think that “try our best” flows a bit better in this sentence.

I really want to see where we'll be in 50 years or more.

I hope I'll still be here to see it, even if it's just a tiny fraction of the history of humankind.

I want to know what awaits us in the future, and I want to participate in creating it.

Just think how the lives of humans changed in the past twenty years.

Information sharing has increased enormously with the arrival of computers and the Internet.

We can learn as never before, we can use computational power as never before.

And all that came just in the past few decades.

And it was in the past few decades that this huge happened.

This is exciting.

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very, very good. If this wasn’t on a language learning website, I wouldn’t have known if you were native English or not. I think the only thing to improve on is learning commonly used english phrases to help your writing flow better. perhaps look up some idioms or read english literature if you don’t already. :)

Ladia

Nov. 6, 2021

Thank you for correcting my journal. It sure was a longer one.

And also thank you for pointing out that I should concentrate on common phrases. I recently realised it when I talked to somebody and I felt that it didn't sound right. I didn't put more thought to it, but now that you pointed it out, I'm sure going to find some resources.

I read a lot of English content, so I can feel when the sentences don't sound right, but I don't always figure out a way to rephrase them.

The Recent Big Step of Homo Sapiens