April 19, 2023
the part of my English homework
I turn to run into hotel's hallway, but then I saw the dead corpse of that lady from 217 room standing in front of me who's rotting away and laughing in a demonic way. Her eyes were fixed on me, glassy and huge, like marbles. Behind her there was a river of blood gushing out from the elevators in the Overlook Hotel. Now I realized why the room was bloody. The room suddenly felt cold, and a sudden smooth breeze caressed the exposed skin of the back of my neck, as an omen of death. I don't know what made my skin crawl more.
P.S. : I know it may sound weird to you, but my teacher gave me a horror text and I had to continue it.
the part of my English homework
I turn to run into hotel's hallway, but then I saw the dead corpse of that lady from 217 room standing in front of me who's rotting away and laughing in a demonic way. from Room 217 standing in front of me
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Her eyes were fixed on me, glassy and huge, like marbles.
Behind her, there was a river of blood gushing out from the elevators into the Overlook Hotel.
Now I realized why the room was bloody.
The room suddenly felt cold, and a sudden smooth breeze caressed the exposed skin of the back of my neck, as an omen of death.
I don't know what made my skin crawl more.
P.S. : I know it may sound weird to you, but my teacher gave me a horror text, and I had to continue it.
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Interesting, next time maybe you can expand it a bit more~
April 19, 2023
thank you so much! honestly, I'd write more but I had a word limit lol.
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the part of my English homework This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I turn to run into hotel's hallway, but then I saw the dead corpse of that lady from 217 room standing in front of me who's rotting away and laughing in a demonic way. I turn to run into hotel's hallway, but then I saw the dead corpse of that lady be careful of dangling modifiers |
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Her eyes were fixed on me, glassy and huge, like marbles. Her eyes were fixed on me, glassy and huge |
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Behind her there was a river of blood gushing out from the elevators in the Overlook Hotel. Behind her, there was a river of blood gushing out from the elevators into the Overlook Hotel. |
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Now I realized whe the room was bloody. |
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The room suddenly felt cold, and a sudden smooth breeze caressed the exposed skin of the back of my neck, as an omen of death. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I don't know what made my skin crawl more. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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P.S. : I know it may sound weird to you, but my teacher gave me a horror text and I had to continue it. P.S. : I know it may sound weird to you, but my teacher gave me a horror text, and I had to continue it. |
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Now I realized why the room was bloody. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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