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April 15, 2021

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The Northwest (pt. 1)

The northwest has became a hip travel destination since 2019 or so, among the urban white collar women particularly. It was around that time that I started to see an increasing amount of holiday photos in Xinjiang, Kubuqi Desert, Gansu ,etc. shared by people I wouldn't think they'd be interested there.

Not that the northwest isn't refreshing, exciting or lack of breathtaking sceneries. The living conditions was poor and transportation inconvinient, and some regions could, in fact, still can be dangerous. So it was once exclusively visited by some of those more adventurous travellers and the outdoor ethusiasts.

As you can imagine, things have been changing quite a bit.

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The northwest has became a hippopular travel destination since 2019 or so, among the urban white collar women particularly.

"Hip" is quite casual and perhaps gives the impression it's popular with young people.

It was around that time that I started to see an increasing amount of holiday photos infrom places like Xinjiang, Kubuqi Desert, and Gansu ,etc.,

The 'rule of three' is something that's quite common in speaking and writing, so I think it would be a good idea to use it here.

shared by people I wouldn't think they'would be interested therin places like those.

NIt's not that the northwest isn't refreshing, exciting or lack ofs breath-taking sceneries.y,

I think connecting these three sentences would be better.

Tbut the living conditions wasere poor and transportation inconvienient, and some regions couldan, in fact, still can be dangerous.,

Since the last part of the sentence refers to its current state, it needs to be in the present tense.

Sso it was once exclusiveonly visited by some of those more adventurous travellers and the outdoor enthusiasts.

As you can imagine, things have been changinged quite a bit.

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linz

April 15, 2021

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Thank you very much!!! ^^

The Northwest (pt. 1)


The northwest has became a hip travel destination since 2019 or so, among the urban white collar women particularly.


The northwest has became a hippopular travel destination since 2019 or so, among the urban white collar women particularly.

"Hip" is quite casual and perhaps gives the impression it's popular with young people.

It was around that time that I started to see an increasing amount of holiday photos in Xinjiang, Kubuqi Desert, Gansu ,etc.


It was around that time that I started to see an increasing amount of holiday photos infrom places like Xinjiang, Kubuqi Desert, and Gansu ,etc.,

The 'rule of three' is something that's quite common in speaking and writing, so I think it would be a good idea to use it here.

shared by people I wouldn't think they'd be interested there.


shared by people I wouldn't think they'would be interested therin places like those.

Not that the northwest isn't refreshing, exciting or lack of breathtaking sceneries.


NIt's not that the northwest isn't refreshing, exciting or lack ofs breath-taking sceneries.y,

I think connecting these three sentences would be better.

The living conditions was poor and transportation inconvinient, and some regions could, in fact, still can be dangerous.


Tbut the living conditions wasere poor and transportation inconvienient, and some regions couldan, in fact, still can be dangerous.,

Since the last part of the sentence refers to its current state, it needs to be in the present tense.

So it was once exclusively visited by some of those more adventurous travellers and the outdoor ethusiasts.


Sso it was once exclusiveonly visited by some of those more adventurous travellers and the outdoor enthusiasts.

As you can imagine, things have been changing quite a bit.


As you can imagine, things have been changinged quite a bit.

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